|Reviews for troubled ego's poems|
| Anonymous chapter 1 . 8/2/2005
Well, it wasn't great. It wasn't terrible either but it is not good. I can write better. Watch (and don't you dare copy)
Coffins (a/n this is one of my worst ones)
The black paint
Can always taint
The goodness in one's soul
As the wind blows them about
The deadly smell
Can always fell
Or draw a person back
Looks at the sums
Shakes his head and shovels dirt
Pat it down
Smooth your gown
With your withered hands
Do not release
Rest in peace
Till the end of time
| hekatie chapter 1 . 11/20/2004
how you ryme is quiet strange. i'll show you one of my poems (don't copy-please! i'm hoping of getting it published) *looks franticly through notebook* oh well i'll just make up one,
i sit in my dark
i let out a terrified moan.
a hellish scream peirces the air
stabbing the night
help my soul
make it free
make me whole.
the darkness comes
it's to late
my mind succumbs.
yeah, i do understand that everyone's a different writer (i'm a smart 7th grader!) however everyone's a different critic. update! please!
| IamnottakingRAVENsname2 chapter 5 . 7/29/2004
Nice...I love your poetry...I really need to send you my poems...which arent about the TT, thats why I wont post them on here...heh
| Perfectly Censored chapter 5 . 7/15/2004
Lol! Also a nice poem! Kinda dark...but I really don't think that you can make Star's dark...that would be weird...well I'm sure you could but I think that it would be kinda hard...lol...jeeze! What ever I say today can be used against me! Bad! But that was a good poem! Very good! Lol! _ Well Till Next Time!
Sakura Peace Out Dude v_v
| Perfectly Censored chapter 4 . 7/15/2004
Nice! lol...as I said before you know the reason why I haven't been reviewing lately! Gomen! Lol! Well I write poetry too...but it is very weird...lol! except for my Kindaichi one! That one was awsome! lol! HAMSTER! Muahahahahaha! *coughs* Well I guess it's Till Next Time!
| way2beme chapter 5 . 7/11/2004
better tham Ravens even!
| way2beme chapter 4 . 7/11/2004
v.v. good pretty
| Raven A. Star chapter 4 . 7/10/2004
Great poem, keep up the good work!
| Raven A. Star chapter 5 . 7/10/2004
d00d! Cool poem!
| Star taro chapter 5 . 7/9/2004
poems... . i likr your poems!1 very good!
| Turtle Girl Yuki chapter 3 . 6/8/2004
raven is so mean to beastboy! (wah!) *crys* well, great poems, maybe i should put mine on fanfic. see what people think of it, they are mostly about heartbreacks and sadness thought. what do you think?
| Star taro chapter 3 . 5/26/2004
i love your poems! they're better then mine. they rock. .
| The Sage of Story chapter 3 . 5/11/2004
Aw...that was sad...poor Beast Boy...
*is confused, doesn't know whether to laugh, or frown, or smile with 'shippiness, or glare at Raven, or...will come back when she figures herself out*
Keep going! In the meantime, you're on my favorite author's list. (Can't believe I'm only doing that NOW...you have to remind me about these things! My mind can only hold very little!)
| The Sage of Story chapter 2 . 5/11/2004
Oh! I got mentioned! *jumps up and down* Thank you! I love you, troubled-ego! _
My favorite line?
"I gotta go now — my Math teacher’s singing
no, seriously my ears are ringing!"
I'm off to read the next 'un. Keep going, friend...they're very catchy!
| Star taro chapter 3 . 5/8/2004
Very good. i loved these poems so much _ update soon please!