Reviews for Cruel time
Linnath chapter 1 . 6/2/2005
Hmm, so short? Shame one you! You have a very nice, expand it!

~Eleiel
Nymredil72 chapter 1 . 6/18/2004
This was lovely, although I prefer your other works. (just me, though.) Have you read any ancient Roman poetry? This poetry reminds me of... er... (can't remember the name properly!) I think it was either Callinus or Catullus (I always get them confused.) He wrote something like:

My woman says there is no one she would rather marry than me

Not Jupiter himself, if he asked her

But what a woman says to a hungry lover

You might as well scribble in wind and swift water.

Hm... I dunno why, so don't ask...

Oh! I suddenly remembered what this really reminded me of! *claps* Their's a poem by Sappho that goes like this:

Although they are

only breath

The words I speak

are immortal

The brevity definitely gave this poem impact, and goes well with your theme of how lives are so brief in the spanning of Time.

Great job!
Jazmin3 Firewing chapter 1 . 5/29/2004
Nice. Short, sweet, and it makes you think.
Shadowed Mind chapter 1 . 5/29/2004
You were right. The berevity DOES give the poem more impact, especially since you speak about the cruelty of time. This is very true, and very good. I like this poem...you're a good poet.

Shadowed Mind
UniCornVampire3z chapter 1 . 5/28/2004
so tru so tru...
starspike chapter 1 . 5/27/2004
This is really good...it's short but everything you wrote is so true, it really makes you think. Nice job.

~Blaze
Selesterile chapter 1 . 5/27/2004
Very nice and very true