Bretty guud.

Some parts were pretty funny, maybe unintentionally so, I don't know, but I had a giggle at Su and Motoko playing "big damn heroes" at the warehouse with Keitaro.

There were some subplots that you wrote that didn't quite catch on - Like for instance, what's the point of Keitaro being super duper rich if he never uses it in the story? It felt like you were going to do something here... also, in the last chapter you have a letter for Shinobu that we never find out what it says (or even what Shinobu's reaction is?). I didn't really understand why you needed the Karen character either, she seemed like she was supposed to be important, but ended up not really being so?

These are pretty much minor quibbles because let's face it, that happens all the time in fanfiction. I'll say however, what you wrote was imminently readable and there was enough intrigue to keep me floating along with the story even if it was a little all over the place in some parts. On the whole, I give this one a thumbs up. Good job.

It just occurred to me that if Keitaro died on a commercial flight heading back to Japan, his name would have been on the passenger manifest, so the government would have eventually contacted his parents. The girls out to actually assume that he's "dead" and not just missing, right?

Honestly, I'm sorta dissapointed that Motoko went down like a chump. I get (now) that this is a "Keitaro is a badass" story (and I think it's done better than most) but I can't help but feel that you somehow slighted the Shinmei ryu with how easy your super-assassin Keitaro was able to counter the guy that nearly wiped her out (and she even had to be rescued at the end).

Yeah, I know "reasons".

At least Naru, even though she has played a minor part in this fiction so far, managed to earn herself the redemption of the martyr (it appears?).

THIS WAS AWESOME!

IS there a sequel or will there be?

Great story! I really enjoyed it. :)

Good story, but I would have liked you to continue it a bit more to see Motoko and Keitaro's relationship develop.

Plus I don't understand some thing, was the party in the epilogue and the conversation between Motoko and Keitaro all in his mind?

This... this was superb. Marvelous. Excellent. Hell, it was better than 300. This is one of the best fanfiction plots I've ever seen. Well done.

Wow... just wow... I feel like I've just watched all of the three LOTR movie in one siting... but like... more James Bond and less magic ring...

I am speechless when I write this. This fic had so much wow about it I could barely close my mouth in wonder. It all clicked as you promised it would in the last chapter. Lazarus was the hardest part. I had to recall so much from my early readings of the bible. I sort of gave it up but anyways I want you to know that this was an amazing fic. The characters, the suspence, the power that came with it when I read each and every word. Even the mystery surrounding why he dissappeared when he could never leave his girls as you put it kept it real,flowing and the best I have read from a fic in this style for a long time.

Thank you for writing this is all I can say

Sweet Heavens

Next fic: Hell knows lol

Woah, this is how the "Borne Identity" should have turned out. This leaves it in the dust with its more developed background, complex plot, and synthesis of ideas. The "Borne Identity" was probably just created to satisify the action freaks... Oh well, at least stories like yours are around to provide the depth plots like this deserve.

On to another of your stories!

You've made this story seem natural. seamlessly continues Love Hina. My hat's to you, man.

Nivremous, the idea of Keitarou leaving and coming is not too original but you spectacular writing skill turns this story into a very interesting piece of art. Again, good job.

nivremous, your fics never fail to impress me, and this one certainly does not disappoint. Keep up the good work, man.

Aw man. ( I was really hoping for the KeiKit pairing. But I guess I should just always expect him with Motoko, eh?

Awesome story. Loved the influence from The Bourne Trilogy.

Hm, I'm guessing that in the next chapter, he'll do all that stuff the letter told him to, and then at the end somebody will come to attack him, he'll instinctively kick his ass, then wonder how the hell he did that.

Am I close? :P