|Reviews for beautiful contradictions|
| LifeonEarth chapter 8 . 12/9/2012
Hmmm. I love their relationship. It is so obvious that they are like desperate for each other.
| LifeonEarth chapter 6 . 12/9/2012
THANK YOU! I love this. This is like perfection at it's best!
| LifeonEarth chapter 4 . 12/9/2012
I love this fic. It's sweet and intense. You can really see how Lily's feelings are slowly changing and how James is so deeply in love with her it makes him go insane.
| Tajee165 chapter 18 . 11/16/2012
I loved the whole story :)
| Elless chapter 7 . 10/4/2012
Interesting...kinda felt rushed, but I enjoyed it nonetheless. I was surprised at Sirius' and Marlene's reactions. I hope Sirius comes around.
By the way, there's no red card in Quidditch, it's in Book 1. Don't butcher the sport! Lol
| Elless chapter 4 . 10/3/2012
Good chapter:) Sirius needs to chill out though, lol.
Also, I know you wrote this before the 6th book came out, but Lily was brilliant at Potions. You might want to fix that. And secondly, you don't actually need a spell to transform; you could do it at will, ie McGonagall first year and third yet.
| Elless chapter 3 . 10/2/2012
Umm woah...I don't want I be rude and this isn't meant as a flame, but honesty, not your best chapter. It just kept shifting from one place to the next and I was like, what is going on?
If you're going to skip period in time, you need to you page breaks. It's too abrupt otherwise. Also, why the sudden leap from Lily breaking up with Gideon and then all of a sudden, it's September 1st. I also think you could tone it down on the italics, since it gets annoying after a while. Finally, I was rather surprised at James' slight sexism...I never got the impression the Wizarding World was like that; i always thought it was more about vlood status. Please don't take this as me flaming you; it's meant to be constructive, but I tend to be blunt about things.
That said, I liked the argument between Lily and Petunia; I could just feel the resentment boiling there. It was well-written:) I was surprised at how cruel Sirius was being, but I kinda liked it. He's loyal but rash, so I wouldn't be at all surprised if this happened. And well, he was kind if right.
I would have lol'ed when James started being all formal with Lily in the train, but my roommate is sleeping; didn't wanna wake her haha.
| Elless chapter 2 . 10/2/2012
Oh dear. Lily really shouldn't put it off. That'll jut make it more awkward.
Good chapter though:) liking this so far.
You missed a few quotation marks. For example:
-He doesn't place any value in the things he does have.
I look at him and I see all the things that I strive for; and then I see him acting like he did something to deserve it, like it was so easy to do, so passé-
When you start a new paragraph but continue the quote, you need to put a quotation mark at the beginning of the new paragraph.
| Elless chapter 1 . 10/2/2012
Open mouth. Insert foot. Lol poor James.
I really like the beginning. It was well-written and in character, which considering your summary, I was a bit surprised - when most people put that kind if thing in a summary, it's usually untrue.
Tiny things: Fabian and Gideon are twins, and it's Prewett not Prewitt. Or at least that's what it says in HP Wiki.
| Guest chapter 18 . 9/27/2012
I have spent the past couple of hours reading this from start to finish. Thank you for my nights entertainment, it was fantastic.
| Bookworm895 chapter 18 . 9/25/2012
Omg, I just went to click for the next chapter and realized it was over and got so sad. That was a really great story, and be f the only James/Lilly stories where you actually see them in a relationship. I wish I could find out whats happening next, but I understand why you ended here. Good job, I love you're portrayals of all the characters
| DorkQueen chapter 18 . 9/14/2012
I remember I read this fanfic a few years ago, but that was before I got my fanfic account.
The first half of this fanfic was absolutely amazing, but it started to drag on around Chapter 10. The characterization was spot-on and your grammar was very good, but I think the plot was a little weak. It was mostly fluff, which is fine, but the conversations about "love" and "forever" started to get repetitive. Some parts of the dialogue were just too mushy and unrealistic. I was utterly engrossed in the first few chapters, but I pretty much skimmed through the later chapters.
I know Jily fanfics can be challenging to write because you have to balance between love and sexual tension (hehe ;D) and their school life and Voldemort...etc. However, I don't think you did a very good job. I think you portrayed Lily as very ignorant when it came to Voldemort and wizard politics. I also think you could've elaborated more on the dark times and the influence of Voldemort.
That said, I did enjoy this fanfic (or at least the first ten chapters) and I like your writing style. :)
| ecao chapter 18 . 9/10/2012
This is simply the best Lily/James story ever.
Congratulations, Drowning Goldfish. You accomplished everything you set out to achieve.
Thank you for the honour of letting us read it.
| flipflopswithsocks chapter 18 . 9/10/2012
That was a great story! I was a little disappointed with the end, it felt a little abrupt. I suppose unless you dragged it all the way out till their deaths, there's no other way to do it. Great job, thanks for writing
| LilPotterfanfic chapter 10 . 9/5/2012
This is probably one of my favorite chapters, youve done a reallly great job with this story!