I don't get it, literally don't get it. look I get it people want to marry for love ect, but the setup for harry is hes an untrained necromancer with 1 enemy already and potentially another if he doesn't follow through with a debt his family owes not to mention HE NEEDS TRAINED it's not just magic as was mentioned multiple times it's his LIFE FORCE literally what keeps him alive I'd marry who ever as long as i got to keep my damn life

please update

This fic is horrible, dont have a issue with au stuff but it is so fucking badly done its not even funny.

Would've liked this story more if it was continued until ginny was obselete. As it is, a really great au making the bland harry potter magic, much more interesting.

A real pity this was dropped.
I may disagree with or dislike many things the author did, it's still a very well done story that is very creatively put together.
Would've loved to see where it was going ...

Any moment happening on this?

Good stuff! Writing is a bit rough here and there, but the ideas are intriguing. Percy / Tonks is a breath of fresh air hahaha. The noir-ish portrayal of him being an Order shill and meeting undercover Dumbledore in a seedy place was quite a fun idea for the former Head Boy.

The writing is pretty decent and the pace is pretty good, but that flashback is just awful. Please, PLEASE don't tell me that little digressions like that are littered throughout this story. That would be a shame.

What is it with fanfictions and flashbacks? There's a reason professional novelists rarely if ever use them. If they are used, they're used in the form of entire chapters. They certainly aren't announced with FLASHBACK, only to include a few throwaway paragraphs before ending in END FLASHBACK.

Where did these kids learn that this is okay in storytelling?

Please write the next chapter already. Thank you very much. I really appreciated it and liked it a lot.

this was great and fantastically written... I wish you would pick this up again but Its been way too long...

I just have to comment on the chapter 3 flashback to Fleur becoming the apprentice to Pomfrey. That must have been the most unnecessary flashback in history. It's so unnecessary and interrupts the immersion and flow so badly that I wonder if it was left in the final release by mistake.

I'm hoping that the story doesn't get ruined by flashbacks. They are the scourge of fanfiction. I don't know who lied and told people that flashbacks are part of good writing.

I have seen flashbacks done well, but rarely. They might be hinted at indirectly through expositional dialog or via a reference source like a book. A flashback might be part of a prologue of a story or chapter. But it should never, I mean NEVER interrupt the flow of the present story. Do not add a flashback in the middle of the present action or conversation. In fact, avoid flashbacks altogether. If you have to write the word "flashback" to tell your audience that there is going to be a flashback, that a good indication that you're abusing the 3rd person perspective.

Post Charles Dickens era writing usually suggests that 3rd person should be limited. That's right future FF writers, LIMITED, as in not omniscient. That means that 3rd person does not know very much outside of what the watched characters know and experience at the time. This is for a reason. It's so the audience can "experience" what the characters experience.

It's harder to experience or become invested in anything when the third person is like God and seems to know everything that has ever happened, or ever will happen, everywhere, with everyone. I certainly don't want a 3rd person to explain a story to me like God is reading from a procedure or instruction manual.

In the Charles Dickens Era of writing, this was common. The 3rd person would tell the reader that a character was "wicked" or "selfish" or "honest" rather than the reader learning those things either within the context of the story or based on how a character acts. The 3rd person already knew what every character "is" because the 3rd person is really just the author narrating indirectly.

Today, that is usually considered an abuse of 3rd person. The 3rd person is NOT SUPPOSED TO BE THE AUTHOR.

Let me repeat that for future prospective writers. THIRD PERSON IS NOT SUPPOSED TO BE THE AUTHOR. He or she is not supposed to know everything about every character, past, present and future. That means no random flashbacks. No explaining characters' placement or motivations outside of what can be readily observed by, you guessed it, a 3rd person. No explaining action that is "off screen".

Usually, the 3rd person is focused on a particular character. If that person is Harry, then the 3rd person might know what Harry is doing, thinking, or feeling, but he might not know that about another character in the same scene. If the 3rd person is focused on Harry then he is limited to what Harry can experience.

I love 3rd person, but one thing I like about 1st person is that helps force writers to develop characters and write properly through it's limited perspective on order to make an interesting story.

Wow, I really when of on a rant, but it's very frustrating to see so many FF writers make the same mistakes. People were 3rd person because it's "easier". But the ease is deceptive because its too easy to abuse the freedom to develop some very bad habits.

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