|Reviews for Harry Potter and the Secret Sanctuary|
| Bvblova chapter 5 . 8/13
Aww, brother sister moment! So kawaii
| puiwaihin chapter 53 . 7/8
I'm going to have to say, I'm less than impressed with the whole "let the bad guys in the castle" plan. Where were all the traps and ambushes? What was the advantage of using students instead of aurors, or at the least the entire Order?
IMO, this chapter needs a complete rewrite. This story deserves an ending, but this penultimate conflict simply flies in the face of logic.
You have a Charmed Trio of witches not fighting together. You have Harry in full command of the castle not using that power except as as a deus ex machina escape and to force the attackers to the Great Hall...which gave the defenders no advantage. You basically left Tonks and Remus out in the cold, as well as had the side plot of Mr. Thatcher completely unrelated to the rest of the story.
So, ok, you wrote this before Deathly Hallows came out. And you totally didn't include anything about horcruxes. It doesn't matter. Come on, finish the story. Just redo this chapter to make it more logical.
| puiwaihin chapter 42 . 7/8
You have a few very frequent usage errors.
In this chapter I noticed "here here" which should be "hear hear".
You frequently use "aloud" instead of "allowed" (aloudout loud; allowedpast tense of allow)
"canon" is the term for the authoritative written work "cannon" the weapon-such as Chudley Cannons
You used "mute" instead of "moot"-Mute meaning without a voice, moot meaning rendered inconsequential or meaningless.
There are a few others I've noticed that you make, but can't recall right now. Overall your writing is fine, but these small errors are recurring.
| puiwaihin chapter 14 . 7/7
Overall enjoyable. You get the chemistry between the characters right and tend to interpret them the way JK Rowling intended (IMO) rather than how fanfic writers interpret them.
| puiwaihin chapter 11 . 7/7
Ah, I see, you were referring to the room in the Potter Mansion, not the Hogwarts one. It was a bit confusing, but you cleared it up. I take back my previous comment (which you might read after this one if your alert mail is anything like mine.)
| puiwaihin chapter 10 . 7/7
You called the Potter Mansion the Room of Requirement in this chapter...
| puiwaihin chapter 6 . 7/7
Similar in concept to other stories where Harry is descended from a Founder and he gets the benefit of the Room of Requirement and tutoring by ghosts, but the differences and execution make this very enjoyable. So far the writing has been great.
| AragornII chapter 53 . 6/9
Hope your life has been supportive of you and your family these past 8 years...
| AragornII chapter 47 . 6/8
Yes, a very good day...
Thanks for the creative gift.
| ImagineShine chapter 50 . 4/13
Just call it the Defense Academy already! Same initials, better description. This story is AMAZING and I am actually dreading finishing it. Because then it would be over... Oh well...
| Milagro626 chapter 53 . 4/8
Great story! Have you had a chance to finish the last of the chapters and the Epilogue?
Pls finish this!
| TheElectricFire chapter 53 . 2/1
So much for finishing the story. It's been almost 8 years! You've probably forgotten the rest of the plot...
| TheElectricFire chapter 52 . 2/1
He opened the cube in a magical dimension...
Dun dun dun!
| TheElectricFire chapter 47 . 1/31
Damnit! You just _had_ to put a huge spoiler in bold at the top of the chapter. I hate spoilers. _Tomato-chucking machines works in the background._ -winks-
| WhiteElfElder chapter 53 . 12/10/2014
That is the first of battle of the war and Harry and group got lucky. Hopefully with the loses Voldemort took he will be a while before he is back.