Reviews for DBV Series 1: The UnNatural Saiyan
HypePanda chapter 23 . 8/1
I'm going to be saying what the power levels should be. This is not meant to bash or insult the reader it's just to say what they should be. Also I'm assuming that Verto's great ape form is the same strength as a Super Saiyan 2. Also base forms will not change due to this being an Au. Let's get to it! The Unnatural Saiyan saga Chapter 3:
Verto: 5,000
Frieza: 8,000,000
Frieza Soldiers: 1,000-100,000
Future Trunks: 57,000,000 Super Saiyan: 2,850,000,000
Bank Robbers: 25-100 (should be 5-25)
Videl: 250 (should be 23) Chapter 45:
Verto: 5,000 Great Ape?: 500,000
Vegeta: 50,000,000 Chapter 67:
Verto: 5,000
Goten: 13,000,000
Trunks: 15,000,000
Gohan: 45,000,000 Chapter 8:
Verto 4 days (16 minutes outside) in time chamber: 175,000
Vegeta: 50,000,000 Chapter 9:
Verto: 10,000,000 Super Saiyan: 500,000,000
Tien: 9,000,000
Vegeta: 55,000,000 Super Saiyan: 2,750,000,000
Piccolo: 55,000,000 Max: 160,000,000 Chapter 10:
Power Rangers: 500-1,000 Megazord: 25,000
Monsters: 2,0003,000 Large Monsters: 20,000-30,000
Verto: 17,000,000 Super Saiyan: 850,000,000
Trunks: 15,000,000 Super Saiyan: 750,000,000
Goten: 13,000,000 Super Saiyan: 650,000,000
Gohan: 45,000,000 Super Saiyan: 2,250,000,000 Chapter 11:
Serpenterra: 170,000,000
KamehameGalic Gun: 350,000,000
Mutants: 150-30,000
Sentinels: 25,000 Chapter 12:
Goten: 13,000,000
Juggernaut: 60,000,000
Apocalypse (hiding power27,000,000
Mutants: 150-30,000,000
Verto: 17,000,000 Super Saiyan: 850,000,000
Sentinels: 25,000
Master Mold: 25,000,000 Chapter 13:
Sinister: 50,000
Gohan: 45,000,000
Mind control Goten: 7,000,000 Super Saiyan: 350,000,000 Chapter 14:
Gohan: 45,000,000 Super Saiyan: 2,250,000,000 Super Saiyan 2: 4,500,000,000
Apocalypse: 50,000,000 Full Power: 190,000,000
Sentinels: 25,000 Chapter 15:
Goten: 16,000,000 Super Saiyan: 800,000,000
Trunks: 20,000,000 Super Saiyan: 1,000,000,000
Verto: 23,000,000 Super Saiyan: 1,150,000,000 Great Ape: 2,300,000,000
Gohan: 51,000,000 Super Saiyan: 2,250,000,000 Super Saiyan 2: 4,500,000,000
Spirdman: 3,000
Insidious 5: 1,0003,000
Cat: 5,000 Chapter 1617:
Green Goblin: 2,00
Spiderman: 3,000
Black Cat: 5,000
Electro: 200,000
Vampires: 100500
Blade: 1,000
Blood God: 10,000 Chapter 18:
Vegeta: 55,000,000 Super Saiyan: 2,750,000,000 Super Saiyan 2: 5,500,000,000
Verto: 31,000,000 Super Saiyan: 1,550,000,000 Great Ape: 3,100,000,000
Trunks: 28,000,000 Super Saiyan: 1,400,000,00
Goten: 25,000,000 Super Saiyan: 1,250,000,000
Gohan: 52,000,000 Super Saiyan: 2,600,000,000 Super Saiyan 2: 5,200,000,00 Chapter 1920:
Vegeta: 55,000,000 Super Saiyan: 2,750,000,000 Super Saiyan 2: 5,500,000,000
Cops: 25-40 (should be 10-20)
Gohan: 52,000,000 Super Saiyan: 2,600,000,000 Super Saiyan 2: 5,200,000,000
Videl: 250 Chapter 21:
Videl: 250
Verto: 31,000,000 Super Saiyan: 1,550,000,000
Trunks: 28,000,000 Super Saiyan: 1,400,000,000
Gohan: 53,000,000 Super Saiyan: 2,650,000,000
Vegeta: 56,000,000 Super Saiyan: 2,800,000,000
Hercule: 180 (should be 22) Chapter 22:
Verto: 40,000,000 Super Saiyan: 2,000,000,000 Great Ape: 4,000,000,000
Trunks: 35,000,000 Super Saiyan: 1,750,000,000
Goten: 30,000,000 Super Saiyan: 1,500,000,000
Vegeta: 75,000,000 Super Saiyan: 3,750,000,000 Super Saiyan 2: 7,500,000,000
Gohan: 68,000,000 Super Saiyan: 3,400,000,000 Super Saiyan 2: 6,800,000,000
Goku: 78,000,000 Super Saiyan: 3,900,000,000 Super Saiyan 2: 7,800,000,000
Piccolo: 180,000,000
Krillin: 25,000,000
Android 18: 60,000,000
Hercule: 185
Videl: 315 (Just saying but Kid Goku at the start of DB was 50. Videl and Hercule's power levels are to high.)
HypePanda chapter 5 . 7/31
I'm really liking this series so far! I don't know if you found this out already, but I just wanted to put in the multipliers for transformations.
Great Ape: X10
Example, Verto: 5,000, Great Ape Verto: 50,000
Super Saiyan: X50: Verto: 5,000, SS Verto: 250,000
Super Saiyan 2: X100 base form
Super Saiyan 3: X400base base form
Super Saiyan 4: X4,000 base form
Super Saiyan God: X3,500 base form
Super Saiyan God Super Saiyan: X175,000 base form
Super Saiyan God Super Saiyan 2 (if it happens): X350,000 base form
Super Saiyan God Super Saiyan 3: X1,400,000 base form
Super Saiyan God Super Saiyan 4: X14,000,000 base form

Just trying to be helpful!
Guest chapter 23 . 2/19/2014
Just epic
averyenture chapter 1 . 9/24/2013
Okay, first of all let me just say: oh my God. I honestly can't explain how astonished I am at the fact that you've been writing this series for almost ten years. That is seriously amazing. I can't even handle finishing one story. You must be a seriously, seriously determined, hard-working guy if you've managed to keep it up for this long. I salute you, sir. And secondly, it's good to come across this story again-I stumbled upon it about a year ago or so when I was really into DBZ, but of course I ventured to other series and fandoms and whatnot, but now that I've recently gotten back into it I'm relieved to see these stories are still up and coming. I'm very excited to re-read from the beginning and submerge myself into the shenanigans of Verto once more! So anyway, I just thought I should stop by and let you know how much I respect you for your consistency in this series, and how much I really enjoyed (and will enjoy again, no doubt) reading the parts that I did. Oh, and I hope that your surgery recovery goes well! (I'll probably be reviewing more every couple of series, just to let you know what I think)
Yua-hime chapter 23 . 4/20/2013
Hi, I just recently found your stories and have really been enjoying them so far. I've decided to review large chinks of the stories that you've completed to make thing easier, which is why I haven't reviewed until the last chapter of this story.

I'm really liking Verto so far. He's most definitely not a Mary Sue/Gary Stu. I like that he started out with no experience and your idea to keep the story in first person most of the time allows people to see more of his character. Your explanation for how our world and the DBZ world are connected was plausible based off of the actual canon of the DBZ world. Verto becoming a Saiyin was also plausible.

I like that you had Mirai Trunks and Bulma be the ones to find Verto. I've always liked Mirai Trunks and it was cool to see him and I hope he shows up again later in the series. I certainly wasn't expecting Verto to turn into a kid, but it was ice as Goten and Trunks are some of my favorite characters, and I wasn't sure how he would be able to interact fully with them if he was twenty-one. I also like that he kept his tail. I always liked their tail, though I never really liked the transformations (I'm not a big fan of monkeys, even though I like to watch things that tend to revolve around the 'Monkey King').

Having Verto live with Vegeta is an interesting idea. Most people would likely have him live with Gohan instead, even if it wouldn't be as plausible. I love Verto and Gohan's friendship. It's something that Verto needs as, while he's in the body of a seven/eight year old, he's still an adult in mind. Having Piccolo help train Verto was also a good idea, I that it gives Verto more exposure to prominent Z fighters as well as something else I common with Gohan.

I think that all the power levels are just right, and I like that you give the power levels for everyone at the end of the chapters. I really helps to keep things strait.

The crossover section of the story was great. I've always loved crossovers, but I've never been able to find any that seemed to work with the DBZ world, considering the outrageous amounts of power that the main characters posses. You, however were able to make all of the crossovers possible and fun to read. You gave the Saiyins enough of a challenge to make things interesting, but you didn't change the other fandoms outrageously to keep up with the power of Trunks, Gohan, Verto, and Goten. I'm really hoping there's more to come of things like that.

As for the rest of the story... I'm glad that you don't focus too much on the fighting and training aspect of the show. Obviously there will be plenty of fight scenes to come, but you seem to be doing pretty well at not making the story all about the fighting. If I wanted five chapters worth of fighting I could simply watch the show. Not that I don't like the fighting in the show, but they can be a little overboard (Namek took like five episodes to blow up, but they had five minutes). You seem to be doing a good job at balancing out the fighting and the everyday life of the heroes so far though.

I'm off to read your other series now, but thank you so much for writing this story and uploading it. It really is wonderful.

With regards,
Yua-hime
TheMysteriousAlpha chapter 23 . 2/20/2013
Great story
wolf chapter 22 . 11/9/2012
hahaa
wolf chapter 21 . 11/9/2012
best
wolf chapter 20 . 11/9/2012
great
wolf chapter 19 . 11/9/2012
good...
wolf chapter 19 . 11/8/2012
bleh
wolf chapter 18 . 11/8/2012
ok
wolf chapter 17 . 11/8/2012
..good/
wolf chapter 16 . 11/8/2012
umm
wolf chapter 15 . 11/8/2012
good again
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