|Reviews for Dashed Dreams|
| Annonymous Ink chapter 1 . 12/28/2011
Well no offense but this poem is way to on the nose. I have read the original Oddyssey over 4 times and the facts are very accurate but mabey too acurate. The first line is very plain and i think could be improved like, See Ithaca swirling/dancing in the mist, the second line is very predictable mabey something about his family ON Ithaca. His son and wife may be his housemaid or pig keeper. Well maybe the next line could talk about how possibly the tears begin to well in his eyes being a more suttle way of showing happiness. The next line i personally think should come with the name of the god of sleep, Hypnose. Like the God Hypnose pulls at my eyes as i rest on the floor. No offense but the next line is terrible. Way to on the nose, not interesting. Maybe how the sack the wind god gave you gets heavy in their minds and the are brought down by a curiosty. Hope strays and Ithaca floats farther away. Overall good idea bad words. I love the Oddyssey and i think this poem has potential.
| Ummster chapter 1 . 7/25/2006
who's ithica again? the guy that melts under the sun.. i haven't read the mythology book yet. left it in the us. which means i only have 10 days 2 read it when i come back! my bro says we don't need it, though. i read in like 5th grade when my brother had to and i kinda remember.
| fiddler jones chapter 1 . 8/15/2004