I can never read these in public or I'll just burst out laughing...

Dude, that was a complete waste of whatever drugs you're taking...

PS Try writing a real story. No seriously, try it. You might like it, and you may even be good.

And... how is that a romance? 'Cause it ain't. Granted, it was kinda funny. Especially the waffles and head-banging.

So you get a somewhat happy reader.

Haha that was awesome. A BILLION/5

why did i waste my time reading this? seriously sort it out!

This is the stupidist thing i have ever didnt even spell spiral right!Bad guys never say "please".Tooty explodes for a million years?What,does that mean that after a million years she will regenerate, only to face the horror of the sun blowing up? WHAT IS OMMITTED?Who puts a baddness antidote in waffles? (ghasps for air) And why is this romance-drama? This falls under the category of written-by-a-three-year-old, but wait, it cant cause you know what omg means!i pity you in all ways ya next time(lights flashlight under face:hears organs)Dan-dana,na-na-na-na.i love that tune)~

That was the most absurd performance created on "Tooty screams and explodes for a million years?" I suggest more of a plotline, more grammer (omg-put oh my gosh!) and much, much, MUCH more work!

That was...interesting...

Banjo makes WAFFELS! Yay!

I tking I'll go see if you have written anything else.

This story makes no sense. try again.

O_o a little confusing...what happened in chapter 4?

The plot is okay (although it sounds a lot like my story, Darkness) but you need to go into more details such as how Kaz fell and what happened to Grunty after Kaz returned to normal. Last, you need to extend the chapters, but this is still a pretty good story.

USE BOMBS WISELY

5/5