|Reviews for Guardian: UnCut|
| vampirediva07 chapter 3 . 6/18/2006
Definitely keep this one going. I like this story. Very different side of Selene, more vulnerable. Perhaps throwing a child into the mix would complicate things more. All in all, this is very emotionally wonderful and appealing to romantics like myself. Beautifully written with descriptions, could use a bit more though. Keep this up and I look forward to an update with great anticipation. ;)
*adds to favorites*
| Ithilwen K-Bane chapter 3 . 9/5/2005
ALl in all, this 'fic still has its problems, but this version is much better than the other one. ...not that I won't be reading it.
| Ithilwen K-Bane chapter 2 . 9/5/2005
Cool. This is a good reason why Lucian would've held ouy for "the blood of a powerful elder," instead of using any vampire. Marcus' powers seem pretty handy.
| Ithilwen K-Bane chapter 1 . 9/5/2005
And what a difference five months make! This is a much better read than your other version of this chapter, and not just because of the paragraph breaks. There's one mistake that's still here, though: Whenever a new person speaks, a new paragraph should be made. It is almost never correct to put quotes from two people in the same paragraph.
The freeverse section doesn't quite do it for me. The break from prose to poetry takes me out of the story. It would have been more moving as just Selene's thoughts.
You don't need to capitalize words like "vampire."
I've been in anime fandom too long. Youkai, vampires, lycans... What is it with the love bites?
I don't know if it was the formatting or what, but this version is much more emotionally resonant than the last one.
I must warn you, though. If someone wanted to, they could hit "report abuse," claim that "Guardian: Uncut" was just a re-posting of "Guardian" and you'd get deleted. If I were you, I'd just replace the contents of Guardian chapter one with this piece here.
| JuicyFruit chapter 3 . 5/16/2005
AWESOME! Please keep writing this amazing love story. I know it's more than just a love story. But iIreally do like this. Please, continue! Do not be discouraged, you're doing a great job!
| katjajett chapter 3 . 1/7/2005
This is really good stuff. Marcus is awake, so is he going to be on Michels side or Vampires?
| Janessa chapter 3 . 9/19/2004
Great story. Can't wait to see what happens... Please update soon.
| Lady K2 chapter 3 . 9/12/2004
Wow girl! I didn't think you could get much better than the original, but damn! You've proved me wrong. Excellent. It had all the wonderful makings of Guardian, but with better formatting and a lot more description. I enjoyed it emencely. *winks* Keep going! Or if you like, wait till you've got it written, then post the whole thing at once. Either way, it's an improvment on an already awesome thing. You've done very well. Good luck and may the moon give you strength.
| astacia chapter 3 . 9/11/2004
I'm lovin' this story. Can't wait for more. Update soon.
| astacia chapter 2 . 9/6/2004
I'm likin' this story. Can't wait for some more. Please update soon.
| Silver Spider chapter 1 . 7/25/2004
This story is formated much better than Guardian. Please keep going. I see the changes.
| loveologyy chapter 1 . 7/2/2004
Normal spacing would be nice. :)