|Reviews for Violin|
| Rachel chapter 1 . 5/22/2010
It's an ok story so far but you keep misspelling Lucius' name and also you need a beta
| Amellie chapter 7 . 10/12/2008
wow, im so confused, this is so messed up xD your characters are messed up, your plot is messed up, i really dontlike it. None of the characters are in character, its like youve created characters and given them names like Harry, Hermione and Draco and your character Torri, whats up with her? talk about a major mary sue! WHO likes Mary sues? AND WHERE ARE THE WEASLEYS? you cant have a story without them! especialy with out a logical explanation.
Im confused about the pairings too. Is this a H/D? or -god forbid- something else? Tori is way too in with harry and draco for MY liking, why cant she just jump off a cliff and leave em alone yeah? If this isnt a h/d fic then why is it in that pairing categori under 'romance' ? I just really cant read anymore, its probably the most badly written story ive read and my standards are low so thats definatly saying something!
Im sorry if this message sounded mean, you just need work on your plotlines and characterization and perhaps spelling too. Take this as a good type of critisism :)
| magicalwriter chapter 28 . 1/10/2007
YOU HAVE TO WRITE MORE! YOU HAVE TO WRITE MORE! I LOVED IT YOU ABSOLUTLY HAVE TO WRITE MORE! I only review at the end. SO PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE WRITE MORE! I LOVED IT SO PLEASE WRITE MORE AND I WONT STOP ASKING YOU UNTIL YOU DO!
| Coin Operated Pencil chapter 2 . 7/4/2006
In the very first sentence, you've spelled 'scent' incorrectly.
Draco seems so out-of-character. I know that a fanfiction is up to the author, but why name the character Draco in the first place if it isn't really Draco? You could just as easily name this character Bob and there wouldn't be a difference.
Draco is being much too accepting and much too pleasant. He's too casual to be the Draco Malfoy everyone has gotten to know through J.K. Rowling.
All righty, I think I've said enough. It's obvious that people like this fanfiction, as you have so many reviews, but I suggest you get a beta. Once a proper beta has helped this story out I believe you could acquire a higher level of readers. (Yanno, if that makes sense.)
| Coin Operated Pencil chapter 1 . 7/3/2006
You've so many, many spelling mistakes that it makes me want to just gouge my eyes out.
Also, you've used the wrong form of 'your' throughout this entire first chapter. You should use 'you're' instead of 'your' in all of those places.
Here are sentences giving examples of how you should use 'your.'
Your- Your violin is so beautiful.
You're- You're my best friend.
'Your' is used to show possession. My ball, his ball, her ball, your ball, you see?
'You're' is the contraction of 'you are' and is a verb.
“Put this on, it’ll keep it from scaring.” Said Bill as he walked to the door.”
You have an unneeded quotation mark at the end of this. Also, scaring should be scarring.
You've at least one word in every paragraph that is missing a letter. I hope you plan to revise this.
I do love the idea of the violin, and the plot. This story would be so much better after a lot of editing.
| punkitten chapter 5 . 5/3/2006
i love draco in this story when are you going to post new chapters?satanic violins, reincarnated angels, and an author with ADD!yes,i is crazy iz my only complaint...oh, and the ending with a shoot out...i wanna cookie...
| Lacerta Augurey chapter 28 . 10/23/2005
So yeah, I love this story, I really do. And I've loved it for about a year and a half now. So please, do update! This is one of the best stories I've ever read, and I'd really appreciate if you updated it more than once a year. So yeah, Divine Intervention is good too-update that one too!
| grim dimmock chapter 28 . 10/1/2005
WOW..I LOVE THIS STORY...it has kept me gripped throuout i cant wait to find out what happens next..you are a very talented writer...keep up the excellent work
| devil's sporn chapter 28 . 7/18/2005
i luv this chap. i like the way that dumbledor is evil. i'm wondering though what that something deep in the castle that's stirring is.
| Lavena Liadan chapter 28 . 4/4/2005
Hey, you are doing an amazing job with this story. I really hope there is more :D I just love your portrayal of the vampires and everyone. You develop them very very well.
I anxiously await another chapter because you can't just leave me hanging like that :D
| carrie leigh chapter 28 . 2/20/2005
u should have torri date louie and draco with harry and mallvorn with sirius and remus with adonis
| carrie leigh chapter 8 . 2/15/2005
earlier u sed torri was 8 and now harry and draco are in wat..?...5th 6th year? so dont like it! thats like child sumthing or wat erever but still break the trio up and lrave torri out! plz!
| violet princess of the night chapter 27 . 1/20/2005
Alright, I think I'm going to stop reading, you could have warned me that you were going to be all churchy! I'm NOT Christian, and I'm sick of this holier than thou crap, so warn me next time K?
| bex chapter 28 . 1/19/2005
omg, this is one of the best fics ive read! plzplzplz update soon! plz dont leave evryone hanging for too long!
| Miss Grace137 chapter 28 . 1/17/2005
OMG, this is one of the best stories eva written. I love it and Torri is my idol Lol.
Update soon :)