Reviews for Starting Over
mayalewis16 chapter 5 . 5/5/2013
cant wait to read more!
LordxXxofxXxDorkness chapter 5 . 11/7/2011
Fuck. That just isn't fair; I finally find a fiction that doesn't make me want to pull out my hair in frustration, and it's been stopped!

XC My heart is breaking right now, Hun. Tearing in two. I simply must know how they're going to stop the water!

And, you know, how long it'll take for Rhaps and Achmed to clue in on the fact that Ashe is hauning them.

Please, if you read this, please thing about updating a long dead story! This is amazing- what are they going to do?
meg chapter 3 . 1/9/2009
they are a little out of character, but sometime you need to have them like that or else they won't do what you wanted
meg chapter 1 . 1/9/2009
so i read the prequel first, but if ashe has gray hair won't gwydion so be like dead by now?
GrayRobes chapter 5 . 10/3/2006
NOt bad. Love the fact that Achmed is paranoid enough to believe its a F'dor. Can't quite believe Rhapsody is THAT naive, though. Then again, she doesn't really know, does she? Oh, I did read the last chapter, I just didn't get to comment at the time. I think that overall, this chapter, chapter five, needs some work. More content, really. It leaves us hanging too much.
GrayRobes chapter 3 . 10/3/2006
Yes! I KNEW the dragon wouldn't be staved off! Now that Ashe is a dragon, he basically has to give in to that intristic part of his being. And Rhapsody, as we know, is his treasure. I like how he basically threatens Achmed. And Achmed seems perfectly in character in this, but Rhapsody is EXTREMELY OoC.

*grinning* I am doing a Rhapsody fanfic myself v. soon. I am new on here, but I decided Grunthor needs some lovins'. So he gets 'em. I think that mine is mostly fan fic stuff, your seems based more off the story line...
GrayRobes chapter 2 . 10/3/2006
You do excellently portraying Rhapsody's grief. She would be v. devastated, of course. Yet, she doesn't EXACTLY run back into Achmed's arms. She's in a time of grief and mourning, v. appropriate.

This could have stood to be a little longer, give us some insight into what maybe Rhapsody thinks, not just what she says.
GrayRobes chapter 1 . 10/3/2006
Eyah! I loved this! You obviously know the books v. well. Did not expect the quick point of view from Gwydion. Achmed seems unusually talkative in this, but I guess its okay on that. He DOES have a reason.
Taranis Theia chapter 5 . 9/8/2006
*does a little dance* Yay! You're back! Please stay this time and update more often. I love your story so much and I don't think you have to worry about OOC-ness. You could write the story more detailed, though.

I'm happy you're back! (I know I already said that...)

Red Cat Lotty chapter 5 . 8/3/2006
This is a REALLY GREAT STORY! I love it that you try so much to keep character's behavior so fitted to the book ones, I also believe that it's esential. Update soon!
DarkIlluser chapter 5 . 7/17/2006
It is always good to see an alive fic in this fandom. However, do be sure to double check your writing to ensure that you can correct the minor word usage errors in the story. As to your previous question about Achmed's skin webs, I believe that to be a Dhracian trait, and so it would be passed down to his children, though their blood would be only a quarter Dhracian.
Linnorria chapter 5 . 7/14/2006
Wow i thought i'd never see an update on this story! It's good even though it is short. I only noticed one spelling error...

"When what has been attacking us?”

isn't that supposed to be "Then...?"
Verya chapter 5 . 7/13/2006
hey man, everyone's life is going to shit

Don't get me started, it sucks that it goes on so much

Nywho, I hope you continue writing, this is really good

Though 1 Constructive criticism: make sure you put it the amount of time and suff, "They rode" is kinda bland.

I'd rather wait and get good stuff from you than have you update quickly and get crappy stuff

I love this story line, keep on going

Laura chapter 4 . 7/13/2006
::grins;: Hey, it's been a year. Where's my update?
ObsidianSickle chapter 4 . 2/7/2006
This is showing to be an interesting story so far. I've recently become re-obsessed with the Symphony of Ages Series again and I felt the need to read some good AchmedRhapsody fanfics because I felt so badly for Achmed when Ashe stepped into the picture...(*writes the name "Ashe" on a pool noodle and begins to strangle it*) Needless to say, you didn't dissapoint me

I don't think the mist is a F'dor though... It's Ashe in Dragon form! But he's going to loose Rhapsody, right? Right? Please update soon so I can read further! :D

A small note though. The story is good and the dialogue is good, but you need to add a bit more description. Point out tiny little details that you can see in your mind, even if they don't seem worthy enough to be written on paper. When you think you're rambling, then it's probably just the right amount. And don't worry about the characters being OOC. You actually portray them rather well, and the amount of OOC is so little that I don't know why I'm even mentioning it.

Well that's my review! To my fav's list this story shall go! :D

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