Okay... that seemed kind of... random. It was written well, but... I don't know, it just seems odd for some reason.

Interesting story, if not a bit disturbing. I liked the ideas you used; I thought they were very original and creative. Hm, I suppose this would make a good episode.

Sakina x

... so, this is where ryou found the presence already?

cool story! i never thought about Kaiba refusing to give them a ride. but you know, Kaiba's copter seems kinda small. how could they all fit in there?

Wow, good story!

Poor Tea - that must've been embarassing for her... and there must be something wrong with me, I cant seem to imagine Kaiba in a frilly skirt... lol, okay I partly can, but he has his trenchcoat on :p ...hehe, now that's a wierd costume... .

Update soon!

Crushcomix: Wow a very good story. Kinda fnny about the costumes and stuff. However, Yami's name was not known until a little before Battle City.

Merik: (Wacks Crushcomix in the head with his Millennium rod) What the hell are you the blooper patrol?

Crushcomix: No...

Funny! I would have liked to see it! Finish soon. Is Joey going to show Kaiba the cards? Describe his face!