She forgot the clothes. XD I like the lake spirit. Trutho is very amusing too. Fakir and Athor sharing a room! That is going to be fun. Pendents are dimming! Wonder if that means she can becom Princess Tutu again? And what about Sagi? 0_0 This is great. I recently found some fanart of this. Have you seen it?

XD Rue the Ruthless! That has got to be my favorite line so far. He understands her! That's an interesting twist. To the next chapter!

Wow. I always wondered what happened after Rue and Mytho left, leaving Fakir and Ahiru. And this seems so possible! I am really enjoying this and it's only the first chapter! I like the writing style as well. I'll be sure to comment on every chapter if I can. So beware! ;D

Most beautiful. I must say, I'm not a big fan of OC's, but this is a really well written fanfic. Very nicely done. I hope I can read what comes next soon.

Sorry it's taken me so long to review. X_x. *wish she had something constructive, let alone relevant* to say. I really want to see Helmina's play, it's so awesome how you wove a real person inside, I never would have thought she was real. *ttly amazed*

When is the next installment coming? There must be more, it can't end here.

~*KA*~

Helmina...I think she is my favorite character, I know exactly what she's going through. *hugs Helmina*

Princess Tutu, hurray! I wonder what Sagi's Princess name will be. Next chapter, can't wait can't wait can't wait~

~*KA*~

Another wonderful chapter. Haha, this makes me like Rue now, amazing! I'm glad she sent those girls running. It's so late, my thoughts only keep replaying the end, not the beginning. *dies* I hope Ahiru and Sagi can both transform, magical girls, hurray~ And is Autor an original character or from PT? *not sure* Next chapters tomorrow.

~*KA*~

I find your uh... *trying to phrase it* in-character-ness amazing. You've created believable original characters that are interesting. I'm especially excited by the Mytho/Komaro back-and-forths. I think the only thing I'm not fond of is Trutho's name. *sorry, it's been nagging at me* But hey, it's not my story. This is an enjoyable read, I really want to find the boxset now so I can know all of the PT characters you keep giving cameos to (though I dearly miss Neko-sensei, he was the best). ~ Keep up the great work.

~*KA*~

Ballet a la duck must be fun to learn. *can't think of anything decent to say* ...next chapter, yay!

~*KA*~

Everyone's named after birds, that's cool. I'm waiting for Sagi to appear though. That's soon, right?

Whoa. I tried to print this so I could go to sleep, good thing I did a preview. Sixteen pages? My printer doesn't have that much! *dies* Well, it's forty-five minutes after midnight, my butt is sore like nobody's business, and I'm sneezing so hard I'm getting whiplash, but I am EXCEEDINGLY intrigued by this first chapter. I cannot wait to read the next chapters and I am VERY HAPPY that you broke up these chapters into two chapters, I would not be able to stay awake another second. I hope this gives me sweet sweet Tutu dreams, you and mangaka-chan have rekindled my love of Princess Tutu, I HAVE to find some DVDs or a boxset now. *hugs*

~*KA*~

And now to sleep! Oyasumi.

I first looked at the art that Mangaka chan did of your story so I decided to check out your story and personaly,you have me hooked. It makes me really wanna draw fanart as well. personnaly my favorite character that you made up is trutho. I love his personality. Please keep on UPDATING! It's addicting!

I'm sorry I haven't responded to either of your messages for such a long time-I've been flooded with work even more than usual.

I thought I'd read your story in installments, somehow the first chapter alone took quite a while. This is not very helpful criticism as I can't pinpoint it, but it's hard to become engaged in this story. Partially I'm sure that's because I've only finished the first chapter. But I also think you might be jumping around between too many characters too quickly without developing any of their thoughts or interiority before cutting to the next scene.

Some other, scattered thoughts:

The image of Ahiru perched on Fakir's head as they try to see through the crowd was absolutely *hilarious*.

The Mytho/Trutho gag, Uzura thinking Drosselmeyer's name is "tussle-mayor," was equally brilliant!

I know nothing of music or german really, but I did appreciate the thought that must have gone into selecting a classical piece as you do for each chapter.

The interlude where you introduce Sagi was a little odd since it seemed to be Ahiru POV as there's no way Fakir could no about avian conversations between a heron and a duck about directions. But the overall paragrpah seemed to imply it was Fakir POV so it was jarring.

The story seems too intentionally cryptic-Takako announces herself as fortune teller, but then tells no fortune. The Mytho/Trutho thing is interesting but I think you play it up to be too big. As I said earlier, I haven't read the rest yet, so disregard this comments if they're inappropriate, but I also feel you're introducing too many OCs all at once. Trutho, Sagi, Takako I can understand since they feel like they'll have quite some influence on the plot. But I'm not sure about the manager Komaro or whatever his name is and other such minor interludes. Such moments give glimpses into Rue and Mytho's characters by nature of their interactions with the OC's, but that seems almost insignificant. More of your effort seems to be spent in developing these OCs than in providing Mytho's or Rue's characterizations.

I don't yet know how I feel about the idea of Mytho having a younger brother...

Finally, I don't know if you care for such comments-and if you don't please let me know, I will stop right away-but while the grammar is impeccable in this, I think your writing style could do with a little more finesseing. Generally, I critique poetry which is why my focus on words tends to be so microscopic. Your work shows a tendency to use unnecessary words. For example, just in the opening lines, "with puffy cotton ball-like clouds adorning the orange sky," would be more concise and descriptive if it were "with cotton ball clouds floating in the orange sky." In this case, I think floating would be a better choice since it would develop the cloud as cottonball analogy further. All cottonballs are puffy, and therefore that word is redundant.

This sounds very nitpicky, but if such attention to detail is paid consistently throughout a piece, the difference is appreciable. In many places I thought you used two or three sentences where one would suffice because really, those sentences were simply full of unnecessary filler words and the meaning could be conveyed much more succinctly.

I didn't mean to inundate you with such a lengthy review, but I thought I ought to explain my comments since there's nothing more irritating than someone critiquing your work without clearly explaining what they mean. Lastly, I'll add, I hope you don't think I'm simply attacking your story. I'm really impressed by it-your imagination alone is stunning; this story in terms of plot is unlike any of the stereotypical PT fics. The idea of the Prince and the Pauper story was very fitting and well played. I think, however, there is room for improvement in your characterization and even a little in your writing style.

to many words 6 chapters 56 thousand words um 6 something thusand per chapter long very long

Konnichiwa, tomoyo-san

tomoyo-chan desu

i love ur story! -squeal- but i would love more Fakir and Ahiru moments this is the best Princess Tutu fanfic i've read so far, and will probably remain that way

.. but whats this? you've published this in 2004 and now its almost 2007? shame!...

... but i can let this pass if you work hard ur reward shall be chocolate! -points to stack of chocolate in corner-

aanta no story wa daisuki desu.

tomoyo-star yori.

Had a wonderful idea. I can use your story and draw it out! _ I'll work on anatomy.

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