cool story

Ah, Keno finally arrives.

Movie 2.

Well, Mike's humor is still a testament to his funny ways.

I never saw Mike 'not as skilled', but then compared to Leo, none of them are, I guess.

I was a bit surprised that Ally would be so bold to just walk outside like that so soon after the chase. Just a thought.

Great chapter, again!

Be blessed.

Another great chapter, although Ally seems a little MS right now. I'm sure her ablities will be explained and justified later.

Anyway, great chapter!

Be blessed.

Hmm...hook, line, and sinker, and getting reeled in like a fish after an hour's worth of fighting to get off the line in question.

That's about how I feel, only - unlike the fish - I don't seem to mind!

Another great chapter. However, tough as Alley is, it seemed horribly cold not to have her at least gasp in horror with hearing about her brother's death. At the very least, it should have shocked her enough to do that, before shutting herself down. Just my thoughts.

Well, you've set up the conflict between her and Raphael. Leo's coming in a close second, with Mike trying to be number one in the romance department. Aw, he cares enough about her to follow her, keep her safe, and then get himself in trouble so that he has to be rescued by his bros.

Yeah, typical Mikey.

Well, onward and forward - for later. I really need to get back to finishing the touches on my next update.

Chaio!

Be blessed.

Okay, here I am, at the end of chapter three - and - gasping for air.

That was another 'tightly' written chapter. You said much without resorting to alot of words. Although I love 'filler adjectives' that describe scenes and emotions, this is not that type of story. It's an action story with witty dialogue and suspenseful scenarios.

Loved Zach's aplomb confidence with Dan at the dance. Typical little brother attitude! ;0)

Well, seems our Miss Ally is in deep in an - alley. LOL

Hope she can run fast!

Well, as I said before, I will attempt to add this to my regular diet of reading until I can catch up to this story in the sequel.

Be blessed.

GAH, I apologize for my remiss in not keeping up with this fic. I did read the first chapter, but then forgot to get back to the story after I returned from the 'Orient' (humid Philippines).

So, with my groveling out of the way, I love this second chapter. Great visualization. You're still doing a fine job of keeping the guys in 'movie' character. The humor is there, the silliness. Everything. Your writing is tight without an abundance of words to weave around (a true gift and one that I do not have!), and you segue into the next train of thought very well.

So, as time permits, I will commit myself to maintaining some semblence of regularity in reading your turtle tale.

Maybe I'll even mosey on over to chapter three, where your chapters aren't marathons to read? Yeah, sounds like an idea.

Oh, I also noticed - unrelated to this story - that you no longer maintain your 'homepage'. Hmm... Just wondering where it be, or did your new e-mail group replace it?

Anyway -

Be blessed.

Aw, cute! Leo's flipped his lid; the good way, anywho. Awesiome series. I regret that I left it alone for so long, and now I'll pay attention to Ronin!

LN

Oh man, sorry about the late review, but I just couldn't stop until now! Maybe I did ignore this fic for the time it was being updated, but not anymore!

Allie's too inhospitable. Gee, give Mikey a liddle slack, girl. I swear, you're as bad as...as...oh, I don't know. I got nuthin'.

Tarzan? Now I know that this is definitely the 1987 TMNT.

Y'know, you never see Mikey cooking in the new cartoon. Why is that? No pizza, no eating for that mater. Except for "The Entity Below". Although I guess donuts playing planets doesn't really count. Mikey ate Pluto and Earth.

Technodrome. 'Kay, so this means it's the 1987 TMNT. My suspicions have been confirmed. Yep, I do say it like it was the stone age, because I wasn't even livin'!

I'll be back tomorrow. I'm being pestered by PARENTS to go to bed. Not that I don't like sleep, but when I get into a stroy, I REALLY get into a story. I think one time I read Reinbeauchaser's "The Yosetubito Daughter" in five hours. That thing is fifty somthin' chapters, and those are long chapters. Gee, now I'm procrastinating. GO TO BED.

The crazed reader,

LN

::lets out a very satisfied sigh:: Ah... From start to finish that was a wonderfully written story and there wasn't a single chapter that I didn't enjoy thoroughly. It was wonderful to see the characters so in-character, and the humour kept me laughing throughout the whole story. And you tied it all up perfectly.

Thank you for writing such a wonderful fic.

Aw! I'm glad April adopted them :)

::picks herself up after falling out of her chair from laughing so hard::

It's past 5am and here I am sitting at my computer trying desperately to keep the howls of laughter trying to break free down to a nearly inaudible snicker that won't wake my parents. Considering how rarely I laugh out loud at a fanfic, that is more of a compliment than it might appear to be _

I don't just read these chapters, I devour them. Your skillful writing and your knowledge of the characters is a real delight to encounter. I know I've said that before but I think it's worth saying again because after all, isn't that what fanfiction is all about? Knowing the characters and writing them true to their natures, so as to keep them alive in our hearts, and in the hearts of those who read the stories.

Anyway, I hope you keep up the wonderful writing and I'm very much looking forward to the next chapter of this story.

Your a GREAT story writer DUDE

And it'ld be good to see the Foot clan restored to the good side again...

*eyes widens* WOW! I lost track of my fav fanfics when I was reading another sites...All I have to say is awesome! So Allie and Zack are Yoshi's grandkids...Splinter has some of his master's family left after all...

Woohoo, the technodrome! Oh no, Allie! MIkey!

'How do you feel about getting caught,Raph?' hehe. That's great, and I LOVE Raph's response. Raph always has to do the crazy stuff. hehe. And only Donnie would be carrying around something like explosives! hehe. *claps hands excitedly*

Oh Raph's line when the foot take him away is absolutely PERFECT! Amazing little story so far!

Cheers,

~pacphys~