Awesomeness

Wow, just finished reading. GotA say, I'm hooked. Too bad it seems to be dead/on hiatus. Oh well, a fan can only keep on hoping for the best.

Haha! Your Omake reminds me of one of the stories here on the LH pages, pointing out the probable outcome of harem 'fun time' - lots and lots of underage pregnancies! Funny Omake, though, even if the only series I recognized was Negima.

Anyway, now to review this story, as well as it's predecessor. The story is well-written, and the characters read true, even with the ooc aspects. The plot development is steady, and moves at a good clip (something I occasionally have problems with), and all ooc moments are solidly explained and accounted for. You have a very well-developed grasp of words and imagery, lending credence to the story laid out before the readers, one that grips us and compels us to keep pushing forward, to keep reading. I also like the fact that you gave the characters that feeling of 'reality' in their reactions to how things have played out. In that vein, you did a marvelous job of dealing with Naru, without 'bashing' her too hard, though a little hardship would be expected from the circumstances surrounding her loss of Keitaro. It would take her a long time to readjust her thinking after that, especially with the way she kind of saw him as property belonging to her, to handle how she saw fit and when she was darned good and ready. So easily she could have lost him - several times over - in the anime and manga because of her indecisiveness and pride. Any one of the other girls would have stepped into her shoes willingly.

Overall, a wonderful 'what if?' fic, and one that I would read again... especially if you should choose to finish it!

I love your omake at the end, I feel really sorry for Negi. You make great stories but why have you given up on this one? It's the best Motoko and Keitaro romance fic there is.

hahahahahahahahaha

It's been an excellent follow up to "Loss and Redemption." I was wondering if you would include Kanako to the story before reading through it. While it is incomplete, it has been a great read. You have a knack for writing great stories. I guess the conclusion to this story can be left for the readers to come up with their own.

Wow, it's been six years since the last update. I hope you can get around to continuing this one, it's really good. That little Omake at the bottom is awesome too.

hi!

i loved the first story and this is awesome to!

i look forward to your next update

Still awesome!

This story on a whole is well written and this is first and foremost the most enjoyable post marriage fic of motokoxkeitaro i've read. Even though it has been years is there any chance of picking up were you left off and finishing this wonderful story. But I implore you only to add chapters not to finish it but chapter that are equal in quality to all of the previous chapters. Once again fantastic writing and praying for you to finish this story.

It's been years, is there any chance of updating this story? Please ()

please continue

hey Hawker

this is the jabberwock

i just want to say thank you for making this much of the story

i felt it was going good but when i saw the date counter i realized that either ideas are not coming, or some other type of problem

but that matters mot

i just wanted to say well done my good sir...or ma'am

loved it when negi and the class showed up. gotta feel sorry for the docter though.

personally, kit has no right to act the way she is.