Reviews for Harry Potter And The Fire Of Ruby Jewels
kittyatza chapter 1 . 7/26/2004
I liked what I read so far. I will be reading the next chapters
Sirius Lover for Life chapter 1 . 7/26/2004
Just a bit confusing...putting spaces between your paragraphs will help IMMENSELY, as they'll allow for easier reading. As of now, it's a bit hard on the eyes.

The story itself has potential, as you do as an author, but you need just a few more adjectives, etc., here and there. More detail!

"Harry took Ron's essay, and handed it over for him" could go:

"Yanking the parchment from Ron's hands, Harry handed it to an impatient Hermione."

See how that spruces it up?

Try it!

-SLfL