This is VERY good. Any chance you will finish it?

please update even if i know you probably will not

I really liked this fiction. You have a lot of talent. I especially liked that you kept characters in character and concentrated more on who they were, rather than what they could do (like other authors).

Since I like to leave meaningful critiques, here are a few points that bothered me.

What do you have against firearms? Amy looks at Roger with "disgust" when he mentions his shotgun. Why? It's a tool, and a damn useful one. They're going 'hunting', after all. Is she just an uptight bint with a death wish? A dead and unarmed person is not morally superior to an armed and living person — they're just more dead.

Guns don't kill vampires? Guns kill EVERYTHING (if it doesn't you're not using the right gun). A shotgun will remove a vampire's head at the neck far easier than any axe. The force behind a bullet is many times greater than that of a crossbow, and a gun requires less man-power and time to arm and fire. Bullets can also be hand loaded. What I mean by 'hand loaded' is that you can design your own bullets to meet whatever specification you want. For instance, you can load a shotgun SHELL (shotguns don't take 'pellets' as ammunition) with sharpened wooden flechettes or, in a conventional bullet, you can use a half-copper jacket and mold lead around a wooden sabot. Either way, you can deliver wood to the heart of a vampire with a gun far more easily than with a stake (I still think it's ludicrous to expect a normal person to be able to drive a wooden stake through a ribcage with just the force of their arms). High-energy rounds will tear a human body to pieces regardless of what you're using for a bullet, vampire or no.

Your later chapters (Slayer History 101) dragged on like a classroom for me, and I found myself skimming over the majority of your text — waiting for you to arrive at your point. I was quite disappointed when I reached the end of the fic without arriving at any sort of resolution. When you arrive at a cliffhanger like you did with Xander, then skip the required explanation and dangle it like a lure in subsequent chapters, you should probably at least continue the fic far enough that we get the answer we seek. We've read through over forty chapters of your story only for you to give up on us. That is highly fucking annoying...

There were several errors in your text, but nothing I couldn't read through and understand. I hope you decide, one day, to continue this fiction.

Truly a wonderful story. You explain how things got started. I love how you also leave somethings unknown even to the people who had lived in the past times. And how many of events are just unfortunate or unseen consequences.

I love how you defined how the demons came to be. I love how the original demons came from possibly hundreds if not thousands of different dimensions, not having a single bit of humanity in them. Then how humans tried to turn them into weapons, first by stealing their powers and giving them to other humans, which failed. Then by trying to breed them, this time sometimes succesfull, other times failures. Then they learned how to steal the essence of the new hybrids and in turn created even more new demon-species.

Then came the Turok-Han, my ques they were propably created by humans as well, another unforeseen consequence. Yet it was something new, instead of breeding, they infected all humans. And thus they needed a new way to deal with the threats.

I love how there were powerful humans, so much more than what were before. They came up with a plan, create a weapon and a warrior. A weapon to deal with all threats and a warrior to live on and fight forever.

Sure they ment for the warrior to be immortal and think they failed but in my opinion, it simply worked in a different way. The warrior line was eternal, granting rest to the previous warrios when they became too tired to fight anymore, allowing another to pick up the mantle. I also like how other people tried to help besides Brouhm and his wife, but were eventually misguided and caused more problems then they were worth. I also like how they designed for a way to help each slayer learn what they were supposed to do.

I also love how it was Buffy, Xander and Willow who messed it up. Xander revived Buffy and that brought Kendra, whose death i turn brought Faith. And how it was Faith who was the destined one (I'm bias towards her, I always did enjoy her character).

I also like the second and third slayer lines. Two lines for women, one for young ones and the other for adults and a third line for men, to act as a balance (Granted, Galed was misquided by the First but what if that played a part. Two warrios to fight together and to stop the other from going to far).

Now we to the last chapter. Only someone touched by a Slayer could enter the cube. Xander was the one who sees, so either hes like Brouhm, a descendant who is ment to be a part of a new weapon or he's unknowingly the next male slayer (I don't think it's a coincidence that Faith also enters the cube after him).

Xander coming back and seeing the fight with Amy and Roger. Picks up a weapon and fights, Amy feels a coldness rush towards the fight and a cliffhanger. And an agonizing one at that. My ques is that Xan is about to get a power up and he and Faith will now be alot more alike.

I don't know if you plan on continuing this or if you even come to this site anymore. But if you do, please consider finishing atleast this part of the story. You don't have to write the whole future, just finish this arc, so we have some answers and then consider finding someone to wrap it all up. Or simply let someone else adopt the story because it's too good to pass up.

Anyways, I'll be putting this on story alert just to see if anything happens to it. Hope you do decide to continue, I hate seeing good stories abandoned. It leaves a bad taste in a reader's mouth.

c'mon you've got to come back and finish this, its amazing

great story please continue and are you makeing xander the next he slayer? dont answer if you dont want to

Good story. I enjoyed it very much with your take on the mythology. I can't believe I read all that and I ended up short of knowing what exactly Xander received as an answer to his question (and the freaking out before running to the portal)!

Just finished re-reading this for a 2nd time and have too agree with the other reviews this story is superb, love the slayer origin theorys! Hope you eventually start writing and posting the rest of it and don't leave it incomplete, i still hold out hope even though it's been 9months since the last update.

what a wonderful story!...i hope you update soon!

your details on the history of the slayer and tying in so many of the myths is brilliant!

dye

Good to see Xander back with his team, now get Faith home...

I'm really digging this story. I loved your explanation as to why Xander went to Africa to begin with, but the expansion into the slayer mythology and the scythe has been awesome. Confusing at first but it makes a lot of sense as the pieces come together.

Keep up the good work, I'm really looking forward to more.

Enjoyed how Caleb was turned by the First.

Nice, steady chapter.

did i mention that i like the Xander that you flash out on the paper? it seems he and i at times share the same confusion :)

Looking forward to the answer to the last question in chapter. i can see his reluctance to finding out :)

OK, another beutifull chapter and you moved the story a little bit further with important revelations.

Really looking forward as to connection regarding Caleb/Evil Slayer is.

Another whhiplash revelation and one I didn't see coming, Caleb as an evil Slayer. If you're going to have a negative Slayer, it would almost have to be a man to be a complete opposite.

However doesn't that contradict canon? Didn't the First empower Caleb?