Reviews for A New Light
SoaringEagle13 chapter 8 . 7/9/2014
I just found out that the author is dead. Even though I just found this fic, I have to give my respect to Michael. May you rest in peace.
SoaringEagle13 chapter 4 . 7/8/2014
Interesting fic, but I do keep on finding grammatical errors. I suggest that you fix them. I'm sorry for being a grammar-Nazi.
tealc176 chapter 10 . 8/9/2012
ok i saw the name Makie Sasaki it's a crossover
tealc176 chapter 6 . 8/9/2012
tealc176 chapter 2 . 8/9/2012
that can't be the same asuna from negima can it!
MangaObsession chapter 61 . 8/8/2012
Please come back!
Littica Marek chapter 4 . 7/29/2012
Yeah.. a 10 year old stopping a Ki attack from Motoko... equals me reading no more of this fanfic.

I like a bit more realism in what I read, thanks anyway.
chronodekar chapter 1 . 11/16/2011
Read the first few chapters. Interesting idea, to have Keitaro adopt 2 little girls. However, those 2 kids are too overpowered. Regardless of age, I find it too unlikely that they would just ... well, be left alone like that. Then again, we've seen odder things in anime.

Ignoring that then, your writing style needs improvement. I stopped reading because of it.

Gotta Buy 'Em All chapter 1 . 5/2/2011
Damn, I've been looking for this story for awhile now. I just couldn't get it out of my head. Those two twins have to be some of the biggest Mary Sues in fan-fiction history. Seriously, Sakura and Asuna are perfect at everything they attempt. Also, there seems to be some kind of repressed pedophilia on the author's part (Keitaro and the twins bathing together, seeing the 10 year old naked, etc.). Not that your writing itself is bad, but the two OCs completely took over the cannon for Love Hina (as well as Negima) and ripped the limelight away from all the other characters. Well, that being said, your writing style is good, but the sueishness of the twins (as well as Keitaro) killed what could of been a good story.
A raging Ghost chapter 18 . 4/19/2011

I read up to this point and honestly... I don't really know why i kept reading. Not saying the story is horrible, it's just Asuna and Sakura are major mary sue's. problems rise and are taken care of in little to no time. so conflict really means nothing. It's a crossover now. There are just so many things wrong with this fic i Honestly have no idea how I got this far reading it. I'll attribute it to boredom, but after reading that last part. A naked ten year old being looked at by a 21 year old even if it is there adopted father somehow, is never alright. That was the last straw, then Naru backing down after being told that. Asuna is 10, this isn't crack so it just wouldn't happen. Eeh... thats all i got. definitely no where near the worst thing i've read on here, but in a scale of 1-10 (10 being the best) I'd rate this about a 3.
TakeshiKovacs987 chapter 3 . 11/10/2007
An excellent story that will sadly not be finished. My condolences to the father of a talented writer.
Totoro-Likes-Cakes chapter 7 . 11/2/2007
Kei /Naru


Motoko / Keitaro
glancer009 chapter 6 . 10/17/2007
I got that the name Negi and Asuna came from Mahou sensei negima. but what about Sakura? Naruto? or did I just forget one of 3-a's students?
glancer009 chapter 3 . 10/17/2007
Nice plot.

Hope to read some more soon. Really have to go its getting late
Hourou shunketsu chapter 2 . 9/13/2007
Asuna sounds very similar to Asuna of negima...
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