Reviews for His and Her Fairy Tale
DeepBlueInk chapter 10 . 9/30/2008
COOL!
kari chapter 1 . 8/15/2008
good
pinkatailmon chapter 10 . 7/5/2008
Cute,but the story doesn't really match the storyline in Naruto and Naruto can't fall in love with Hinata that has a crush on the pink-haired still,good job!
hopelessromantic121 chapter 10 . 5/23/2008
Youre right, your very good at comedy/fluff, I couldn't stop laughing when Naruto burst into the wedding reception. Keep writing.
braindamage730 chapter 1 . 5/11/2008
nice story
Wittgen chapter 1 . 4/6/2008
I like how it is written, and I like the fluffiness with a smidgen of angst. I hate the messed up chronology which painfully and unnecessarily detracts from the story. When Naruto is reflecting on being alone, he mentions his team and how none of them pay attention to him. Then he talks about the seal, a seal he apparently knows nothing about. But wait! Naruto learned the truth about the Kyuubi before he was put on a team. Similar confusion between schooltime and team time occurred with Hinata. It's jarring and it's stupid and it almost ruins the story.

Other than that, well done.
Laine Squirrel chapter 10 . 3/4/2008
Aww, oh Kami, what an adorable story! So cute... XD I'm a little upset with Ryoki's reasons for not wanting to marry Hinata - he could have said something disgracing in regard to himself - but I guess, as long as she's happy. _ And I was so happy when Naruto barged in. And he's so protective, you know, when they're married. D So adorable...

Great job on the story! (Even though you really just wanted to finish it towards the end) ) I think it's a pretty good ending.

Laine

Squirrel
sshhhhhhhhh chapter 8 . 12/13/2007
Aw naruto SHOULD'VE BEEN like THIS then it would have been cute...but then it would've turned into a love story...

GREAT WORK

THUMBS UP
sshhhhhhhhh chapter 10 . 12/13/2007
Aw very cute liked al of it makin hanabi nice was a nice touch
sshhhhhhhhh chapter 1 . 12/13/2007
Aw so cute loved it :)
Larie-chan chapter 10 . 11/25/2007
Aside from your use of the present tense, this was very good (though I would have liked to have seen more details and descriptions). I especially liked the character Ryoki. Most people would have painted him as an evil pervert, but it was nice that he was actually able to help Hinata.
Larie-chan chapter 2 . 11/25/2007
I really, really like how this story is progressing, but I've noticed something. You write using the present tense...bad, very bad.

Please, please go back and correct your verbs!

May the Muses visit you often.
Slashfilled-mind chapter 1 . 7/26/2007
*sight dreamy*
Kagura chapter 10 . 7/10/2007
i luved it i wish u would write more to the story but i can sorta see that it would b difficult to do that. i enjoyed reading it.
Houtori chapter 10 . 6/5/2007
Wow... that was so amazing...
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