Great story, heading to part two! Thanks!

Honestly better than I was expecting but worse than I hoped, mostly because of Leon. The relationship between Tonks and Harry is a pretty fun one. They are definitely a good duo.

However, they ARE a duo in this story, and which makes Leon’s inclusion all the worse. My first reason not to like him is that he is an OC. That may seem like a petty reason, but as stated before, this story is very much about the duo of Tonks and Harry, and as such, making a new character to try and slot into their group feels out of place at best, especially when there are plenty of pre existing characters that could have been used instead. I also have a pretty bad memory, so using a pre existing character would have helped me out for appearances sake. I already have a good idea what the rest of the cast of HP looks and acts like, but for him I had to keep the chapter he was initially described in open in the background and constantly refer back to it to keep his appearance in mind.

Then there is also the fact that his name is not great and kinda hard to read, and he asks to be called Leon, but you insist on using his real name the whole story, so I already don’t like him twice over for that. Then there is the fact that again, Tonks and Harry are very much written as a duo, which makes him feel like a third wheel that occasionally butts in throughout the whole story, yet every character acts like they are a trio for some reason. His inclusion into their friend group comes across as very forced solely for the sake of trying to create a trio, which was not necessary, as Harry and Tonks have such better chemistry with each other that it’s kind of insulting that you shoe horned Leon in.

Also in some of your AN’s, you said people thought he was a werewolf. I don’t know why, because he’s clearly not. Every HP werewolf is described as having scars, Leon is not. He is described as paled skinned with odd colored eyes and never seems to eat. He also seems to be nocturnal and visits the hospital wing several times a month instead of once a month. He is probably a vampire

Overall though, the story is decent. I would have appreciated some more deviation from cannon. Harry didn’t really need to be on the quidditch team, especially because you only wrote one short game, only a few paragraphs about it. I would have liked some more metamorphmagis bonding/training between Harry and Tonks. They did have a whole school year together, but only had two or three sessions written out. And I do sincerely think you should have either kept Harry and Tonks as a duo, or used a pre existing character for their trio, who is already more fleshed out than an OC. And you should have put more effort into making the third person a member of the trio, and not just a third wheel that occasionally butts in and acts like a member of a trio

The way this chapter was written is horrible for mobile readers. Everything is all crowded together. Use some actual spacing in your writing and preview it on mobile so you can see what this looks like.

I like the story so far but i dont like how leon seems to be being set up for the super competent member of the group. Feels odd

Last chapter you said it was a gang of hoodlums that broke into Harry's folks house and killed them. Now he says it's a car crash? And what happened to Ted Tonks?

What on earth is up with the formatting? This has to be one of the most unpleasant reading experiences ever just because of that.

My god hes such a pussy

Harry is pussy

I thought Harry was going to experiment with changing his appearance like Tonks?

Story format still needs editing though. there are breaks in sentences where there should just be a spacebar.

I've really enjoyed reading this. Thanks for all of the hard work you've put into this.

No ww knowledge

Why are they just not acknowledging the fact that narcissa and andromeda are sisters? Like Tonks said dracos parents are brother and sister and it’s like… no she’s your mums sister bruv… insulting your genetics lowkey. And then Andromeda comes in and says huh narcissa Malfoy looks crazy out there…

Well, my journey ends here. I was hanging on, but the dialog was a bit too much for me. Writing for excitable 11 and 12 year olds isn't for me, I guess. Especially ones that seem to know some things they shouldn't and are out of their utter depth on other things.

Couldn't really tell what direction we were going at some points, and thought we had already gone through an entire week at the school with the way the prose was going.

I've been reading through the comments over the years and can't help but shake my head at several of them. People, this fic was last updated in 2004. That is between books five and six! So next time anyone complains about food being unable to be conjured or whatever, try to look up which books revealed that information.

You'd be surprised how many things only came out in the last two books, or in JKR's website writings and interviews.