Reviews for The Philosopher's Stone Retransmuted |
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![]() ![]() Kinda sad Fluffy had to die ;-; |
![]() ![]() ![]() loved it |
![]() ![]() I think that Leon is a vampire. This story has been up for ages, but I want to make my suspicions noted before it's confirmed. There are a few things that bother me with this solution, like the ability to know all these things. And by the way, Hermione seems to have practically disappeared. I love this story, keep on writing please! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i have to say that i just started this story because i LOOOOVE tonks...the pairing is creeping me out...whatever i really love the story :) good job ! *thumb up |
![]() ![]() ![]() as in your first chapter, you are getting the weather and climate wrong. England and Scotland are windy and wet. In the overnight scene in the first chapter Harry needs some shelter from the ground, a wind break and some shelter from rain. Sleeping on the ground as described would have him in hypothermia the following day. An off the ground playhouse with a roof and at least two side walls would be enough, if it isn't to drafty. The scene in this chapter is more problematic. A bit of snow will turn the ground into mud. In November and December there is lots of rain and wind in Scotland. The ground is not cold enough for snow to last. The outside scene would work in a cold and windless weather, which rarely happens in Scotland. An afternoon without rain can happen, but they would need a dry piece of ground and a very good wind break. The only dry piece of ground I can imagine would be a stone breaking through the ground. But that would be to cold to sit on unless heated by a fire for a while. Harry bringing a heavy duty blanket with an oil cloth on one side would be the easiest for me to imagine. This doesn't influence the overall story, both scenes can be made fit to the local conditions. As it is, it breaks the flow of the story to a reader being used to the local conditions. (I am from North Germany and winters in England and Scotland are warmer and a lot more wet than winters here.) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Brilliant absolutely brilliant much better than some where a character has just been added or others where its instant love it its spectacular utterly amazing bloody good read worth ranting over like im doing I apologize. Say that at hermione speed and that's me right now |
![]() ![]() I know this is finished. But I have to point out its ridiculously obvious that Leon is a vampire.. I mean come on. Never hungry. Up early... Last name Reinhardt... Obvious! Its ok, I mean I like it. Just had to comment... Stupid reviewers thinking he's a werewolf and all... Ok... Well thanks! Love the story so far! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good Story! Looking forward to the rest of the series! |
![]() ![]() if i had to guess id say leon is a vampire |
![]() ![]() ![]() Huh, Snape was even harsher on Harry than in canon; wasn't he mostly perturbed with the resemblance Harry shared with James and therefore thought he would act the same too? In that case wouldn't Harry being in Ravenclaw and not Griffindor go a small way to deter that line of thinking? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yeah... Soleiyu's a vampire, or half-vampire at least. You sir... seem to have an odd fixation on toilet seats; I wonder what's up with that? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmmm, shame you wrote this as early as you did, what with all the knowledge we gained on Ravenclaw house in the Deathly Hallows; plus the knowledge that the Bloody Baron killed Helena Ravenclaw, which is where the blood came from (doubt the pale lady would be happy to talk about it) |
![]() ![]() ![]() What happened to immediately finding out if Harry was a metamorphmagus? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ravenclaw... okay so in this story Andromeda was never Andromeda Black? Because she was most definitely in Slytherin, as all Blacks before Sirius were. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Why is Andromeda talking about Narcissa like she's some random stranger? They're sisters... and Draco is Tonk's cousin, surely she would know that. |