|Reviews for My Immortal|
| Embrace of Destiny chapter 4 . 5/30/2013
This was my favourite story many, many years ago. And you know what? I still love it just as much today.
The characters and the pacing were perfect and the way you handled Malik was absolutely beautiful.
| thebestdancer chapter 4 . 3/24/2007
| WallofIllusion chapter 3 . 1/5/2005
E this is such an awesome fanfiction such wonderful angsty feelings floating around... (Yes I need help, why do you ask...?)
Malik's reaction to everything was very well handled; the scene where he finds out his siblings are "dead"... er... the multiple scenes in which that happens... are all very powerful. This is going on my favorite stories list, and I'm also adding you to my favorite authors.
On a rather unrelated note, you wouldn't happen to like Fruits Basket, would you? XD
| Asho chapter 1 . 9/23/2004
I really like the story so far, but when Yami Malik was doing the circling thing around Malik, and all the talking the did, it sounded kind of like The Lion King, with Scar and Simba's dad. I don't know if that was deliberate or not. But don't get me wrong, I am not criticizing your story, I really really like it!
| LuckyLadybug chapter 4 . 9/18/2004
EE! OHMYGOSH! THIS. IS. SO. PRECIOUS. I adore your idea of having Shadi come and for Ishizu to know that Marik and Rishid had to leave. That's absolutely a stroke of genius. And Mrs. Ishtar coming to Marik and the scene on the porch. . . . My favorite part is when Rishid acknowledges his siblings! YAY! O And the last line . . . so fluffy! ALL HAIL THE FLUFF!
| intheinkpot chapter 4 . 9/15/2004
This was a really good story. I thinks it's your best so far.
Lupe191919: Hey! You're not supposed to be the emotionless one! That's Pemdas' job!
Seth: (shivers) Pemdas...He's scary.
Lupe191919: Bleh...Anyway, I reall liked this story. Sibling Fluff!
Malik, Isis and Rishid: (back away from the crazed authruss)
Malik: She scaries me...
Isis and Rishid: (nod)
Lupe191919: (waves) Ja ne! (turns to the Ishtars) (begins twitching) Need...more...SIBLING FLUFF!
Seth: I really hate it when she gets her hands on sibling fluff...
| LuckyLadybug chapter 3 . 9/4/2004
YAY! Oh wow. . . . Where do I begin the praise? The flashbacks. . . . DANG! So cute! Especially the first one, about the storm. AWW! And Mrs. Ishtar's appearance. . . . And Rishid just forgetting the whole "sama" thing! And Marik winning by using a card that had been used against his Yami. . . .
The friendship cuteness bits with him and Mokuba were so sweet! And I adored the scene where he decided to let the Rare Hunter go. 3 I can hardly wait for the epilogue!
Oh yeah, I also like the Kaiba brothers cuteness and Joey helping Seto up. X3 And . . . oh yeah! Mai's scene was too priceless. LOL.
I am so just gonna keep raving. XD; Every single part of this was good! I only have one complaint: I wanna see so much more! MUWAHAHAHA!
| Daricio chapter 3 . 9/3/2004
. yay, yay, yay, yay!
It's so kawaii!*insert more exclamation marks that will not be shown here*
I'm sorry you're stressed. ' I'm also sorry I wasn't on today, I tried, but I had to go to my grandma's house, and then I had a friend over till 10:00 PM my time...
But enough excuses, and more story praising. _ happy happy happy ending, for everybody but the stinky ghouls.
And yaay on the duel! . Is muchly good job! Cool you stick in Devil's Sanctuary.
Malik: -.- Cool you stick in...? Daricio, where'd your grammer go? *looks for it under a rock*
Daricio: It ran away. Er rennt weg. nyeah. Anyways, must go... getting teased by my dad...
| Daricio chapter 2 . 8/20/2004
Yay! I finished reading it! _ that was long. Nice and long. Very nice. *noddy*
Malik: *sigh* You have had WAY too much candy.
Daricio: T_T I have NOT! *eats skittle*
Malik: *rolls eyes* I'm taking that away from you. Right now.
Daricio: Nu! *throws temper tantrum*
Malik: Uh... fine, I won't take your candy...
Daricio: . I wuv you Malik. *gives him a hug*
Malik: Lissa! Help me! She's crazy!
Daricio: . Anywhos... Only real critisism for this chapter being that when you're writing a Malik-fluffy angst story, you're not supposed to stuff in Ryou angst. ' Malik angst and Ryou angst goes in different stories. Malik angst and Kaiba brothers angst CAN go in the same story, but usually Ryou angst doesn't fit with that...
Malik: ... Say what?
Daricio: Never mind, ignore that. _ I'm just talking too much because I haven't been on my computer for a week.
Malik: -.- AKA I have to go and give her some anti-sugar rush pills... *hits submit review button*
Daricio: No, wai-
| Just Another Soul chapter 2 . 8/19/2004
I just recently read this fic. I love it! The characters seem very IC. I liked the Isis/Rishid sibling fluff. You never get enough of that. u_u Update soon!
| Dyzmal Angel chapter 2 . 8/16/2004
Hmm...Yuki...and Kyou...I'm seeing the connection...*cough*FruitsBasket*cough*
ANYWAYS...nice chapter. I really liked this one...and I was wondering what Yakuza meant...*flashes back from watching Kill Bill*
| LuckyLadybug chapter 2 . 8/16/2004
AW! Sibling cuteness ABOUNDS AGAIN! O Flashbacks . . . Ishizu and Rishid talking . . . (Ishizu and Rishid fluff is rare!) Kaiba getting abducted . . . AW! Bakura is thinking about Amane! I luv the Yami B and Bakura scene. XD So cute!
O_O! Marik's going alone! That's to be expected, but oh wow. . . . INTENSE! Oh yeah . . . and Hikaru's the most awesome character! YAY!
| intheinkpot chapter 1 . 8/16/2004
Lupe191919: (stares at screen)
Seth: (waving hand in frint of her face) Hello? Anyone home?
Lupe191919: (starts taking a deep breath)
Lance: (sighing) Here we go again...
Lupe191919: (finishes taking a deep breath) (pauses, then) !
Seth: She finished?
Seth: (sighes while taking cotton balls out of his ears) Good.
Lupe191919: This is a really good story, you HAVE to continue! If you don't I'll set my army of rabid squirells on you! Muhahahaha!
Seth: (-_-) I think she's lost whatever sanity she had left.
Lupe191919: I've also noticed that your writing has gotten MUCH better! But, back to the story! (Which I'll kill you if you don't finish. Maha!) The Ghouls are so evil! Kidnapping Isis and Rishid and then making Malik think they're dead and then making Isis and Rishid who are alive think that Malik is dead! So EVIL! (she managed to say in one breath and NOT trip over her words)
Seth and Lance nodded just to make her happy and save their skins from her rath (she can get very angry in they don't agree with her).
Seth: 'Sometimes I think that's I we were made for.'
Lupe191919: (hugs him tightly) NOT true! I love you both!
Lance: Then why aren't you hugging me? (he whinned)
Lupe191919: (_) Because I like Seth better than you!
Lance: But I was our OC first!
Lance: (V.V) I'll get you Seth. I really will.
Seth: (chuckles nervously) Heheh (sweatdrop) Lupe could you please let go of me? I can't breath.
| Daricio chapter 1 . 8/12/2004
_ Ok, let's try this again and hope that 1 my computer doesn't puke and 2 YOUR computer doesn't puke!
As I said in my OTHER deleted review, *glares at dead wevoo* I think this story's great!
As I read it, I was like "Woah... This is almsot exactly like one of Daisy-san's ficcies!"
. Really coolness. A little much diologue in my opinion, but then that's just the way I think... ' I'm not mainly a Dialogue writer, I go for more context in the actual stuff...
Which sometimes leads to me being rather boring, but OH WELL.
I think you've got a pretty ok balance of dialogue and detail, just need a tad more detail.
Glad to see that you're still writing stories, though! ' A few of my other friends have stopped updating their ficcies altogether. I feel so alone in the updating world...
' But yeah, enough of my complaining...
I have quite a few little plot bunnies in my head that I'd like to capture... When I finish my Joey-turns-into-a-dog story I'm going to do an angsty one-shot using "Forgotten" a song-fic thing-o. .
Yay for updateness!
Malik: I was ignored again. I'm starting to think she's doing this on purpose... *is huggled* ... I feel so loved.
| Blue Mystic Moon Warrior chapter 1 . 8/12/2004
_ SQUEE! you put it up! MUY BIEN! It's like Daisy-san...just...different. ; if i say better, will she kill me? hope not...
Meht: *eats chip* ya, she already has to kill you for the Ishtar S&M thing
Me: o.o *chases after her*
Meht: o.o *runs* WHAT DID I DO?
Ryou: *scratches cheek* ; loved the next time thing. see ya later
Meht and I: *run by* BYE!