Reviews for Dark Robin
Killer Jeff chapter 1 . 6/6
This reminds me of The Wrath of Jaufredus by Rainbow Kitty on DeviantArt Robin is Jeff and Dark Robin is Jaufredus like Jaufredus Dark Robin drains his friends' powers and the Teen Titans Batman and the others are Jeff's friends and Slade is Zalgo
Killer Jeff chapter 10 . 5/6
Dark Robin: NNNNNNNNOOOOO Dark Robin is turned back into Normal Robin Starfire wakes up laying on the ground Starfire sees Robin passed out facedown on the ground Starfire and the others see Robin lying facedown on the ground Starfire: ROBIN Starfire runs over to Robin and turns him over holding him his eyes are closed and he appears to be unconscious Starfire: sadly Robin Robin: coughs and slowly opens his eyes Starfire: sadly I'm here Robin Robin starts crying Robin: Starfire I'm sorry I'm so sorry I didn't mean for any of this to happen Starfire: It's okay Robin it's over now you're back to normal Robin stands up happy but also sad Robin: Will they ever forgive me Starfire happily with her eyes closed Starfire: Yes they will and so will I Robin and Starfire hug while Robin cries tears of happiness
Killer Jeff chapter 10 . 5/6
Robin: It used to be simple It was a world I understood I didn't know what I didn't know and life seemed pretty good But now the Darkness rises from somewhere deep inside of me His power overtakes Can I keep this monster from getting free If I can stay with the light I know I'll be free and I can start to be Whole I can start to be me But instead I am struggling with all that I see and these friends mustn't see THE MONSTER IN ME The Monster in Me They mustn't see The Monster in Me Robin starts to cry
Killer Jeff chapter 10 . 5/6
Robin's Nightmare Robin is all alone in the Tower in the dark Dark Robin: Here I Am Robin turns around looking for Dark Robin Dark Robin: Over Here Robin turns around and sees a mirror then Dark Robin jumps through the mirror at him Dark Robin: I'M ALWAYS HERE Robin wakes up screaming covering his face with his arms Robin: NO Starfire wakes up fighting with her eyes closed Starfire: Robin what is it what happened Robin sits up Robin: timidly Nothing sorry Starfire
Killer Jeff chapter 10 . 1/22
This chapter reminds me of Rainbow Kitty's Creepypasta Show comic Jeff vs Jaufredus but Jeff replaced with Robin Jaufredus replaced with Dark Robin and Rainbow Kitty replaced with your OC Star
rainbowspring chapter 11 . 9/30/2015
I love the ending, and the conflict between Robin and Dark Robin, especially their feelings for star! Great job!
Guest chapter 3 . 8/23/2015
There are many flaws in this fic I will give you points for coriginality.
Adrenalized chapter 11 . 11/22/2014
YAY MORE DARK ROBIN!
Adrenalized chapter 10 . 11/22/2014
Aw, I miss evil Robin.
Adrenalized chapter 7 . 11/22/2014
This is really good :-) Some grammatical errors here and there but I love the concept!
Adrenalized chapter 2 . 11/22/2014
One correction - Starfire used a contraction while saying "Just because he isn't in control of himself . . . " It's not a big deal - just something I thought I'd point out.
Jamila chapter 11 . 8/2/2013
Make a teen titans dark Robin and Slade Returns as Father and son
Anthezar chapter 11 . 7/11/2013
What a interesting little story. I enjoyed it very much. It was really cute and quite the accomplishment for your age at that time. Well done!

Once again, as I've told you before, the only thing keeping me from fully enjoying your writing style is the format of your dialogue. We as readers, we gotta admit, we're pretty slow. You have to tell us things straight or we'll miss things or get confused. Clarity is always a writer's best bet. So, when you put who's talking at the end of blocks of speech, I get really confused who is talking with who. Especially when so many characters are involved. Not to mention, I don't know the Justice League, so I get even more confused.

When speaking, people do things. Their tones change, they move, they smile, they feel things. For you to fully evolve in your writing, I'd say altering your style with your dialogue will make your writing exceptional. You've got amazing ideas, plots, well written descriptions. The dialogue is the only think that I personally think is holding you back. I know you told me your reasoning, and it's a very good one at that; however, I've had to flick my eyes downward to see who's talking before I go back up and go, "Oh, it's so and so talking." That's just not something you want your reader to be doing. People's voices in writing aren't that discernible like they can be in animation. Just isn't gonna work out. But you can do all sorts of things with the dialogue tags to help make it more than he said, she said. :)

I truly hope this helps you. I say all this in honoring of you, because I think you're a great writer. :) You've done so much already and I only wish you the very best. Well done and happy writing!

Anthy
FlowerBlooms chapter 11 . 5/2/2013
This story was EPIC the finale was AWESOME! :D I LOVE THIS STORY! Your really a brilliant writer :)
FlowerBlooms chapter 8 . 5/1/2013
Awesome chapter :D
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