Reviews for My Dream
kitanalao chapter 5 . 11/23/2014
please consider my suggestion in my previous review.. i'll stop for now to clear my mind but i'll be back again. hopefully you made an improvement latter. see you...
kitanalao chapter 4 . 11/23/2014
sugestion again use (") sign to make a conversation because seriously. it is confusing i need one minute to understand it. and use past tence when writting it. i know you maybe not use english as your first language. but for them this will be annoying and trust me they will stop reading and then making the potential from this story to be wasted. i still support you of course because no body is perfect. but we could always learn. you have a lot to learn. i suggesting you to read another story and compare them. and perhaps also find a beta reader... i believe some reader will be willing to help you.. i do encouraging you to . and hope you could be excellent author someday. good luck.
kitanalao chapter 3 . 11/23/2014
ok..sofar nice progress... nice job.
kitanalao chapter 2 . 11/23/2014
well... so far is nice. but i have siggestion for you... made an author note if you made thingking conversation. because here i need a few second it. but i am afraid another reader and stop reading. because reading a confusing story will only give them head ache. so becarefull next time...
kitanalao chapter 1 . 11/16/2014
intriguing idea. i'll put this into my fav list...
WittyMitty chapter 11 . 7/30/2007
Not bad. I like it alot. This is going to my fav. Sequel eh? I may consider to read that. I hope its good as the first one.


(My name is too long I get tired of writing it over and over again)
Tears Of Us All chapter 3 . 7/13/2007
Uh oh...I have to find out what happens!
Tears Of Us All chapter 2 . 7/13/2007
Funny! I like the flow of the chapter!
Silver-WindScar chapter 11 . 12/2/2005
Okay. Awesome story. All you need to do is make paragraphs when someone different is talking and put quotes in for when they are all the chapters. I just thought I would give some helpful critizism (sp?). I just never thought Kaiba was evil, well...not that evil anyway. {[I watch the series, which a new episode comes on tomorrow morning. (I just remembered that.)]} (Kaiba cares, but he shows it in his own special blocking it out with the 'tough-I-don't-need-any-friends-guy' act.) ~{[(THUMBS UP!)]}~
greendayluvr chapter 3 . 6/17/2005
wow, a cliffhanger! this is getting interesting! write on! (get it? write? ha ha!)
greendayluvr chapter 2 . 6/17/2005
does yami like tea? it still is a mystery... great chapter!
greendayluvr chapter 1 . 6/17/2005
short, but sweet! loved it!:)
Seto's Other Sister chapter 1 . 3/31/2005
good start
EricDal chapter 1 . 2/21/2005
you need a bit more grammar but who am I to judge my grammar sucks as well
d'Anima chapter 11 . 9/27/2004
Yeah, go Moki, it's ya bday,uh huuh, uh huh...anywho, nice fic ya got there. Read it from start to finish. Phew! I'll read your other fic when I have more time. Gotta go!

P.S Thankies for the review!
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