|Reviews for A Friend in Need|
| Feather32 chapter 5 . 9/13/2004
Great keep updating
| Lisa66 chapter 5 . 9/13/2004
Very cute chapter that displays the bond between Steve and Jesse. And Jesse is right he does resemble that remark! Nicely written!
| Chikory chapter 5 . 9/13/2004
Love this story, but are you going to get to a point sometime soon? I mean call me impatient, but 5 chapters in and still no plot.
Also, you said resemble that remark. I think you might have ment resent. Just thought I'd let you know though, just incase you didn't. Yeah, shutting up ...
| Lauren chapter 5 . 9/13/2004
I meant to review before and say thanks for taking the swearing out. It's so much better now and much more true to the show. All of the characters are brilliantly written and you're a great writer. You use humour so well.
I can't help wondering when something's actually going to happen? This is quite fun to read, but is doing nothing to get on with the plot. And I wonder how many times you need to point out that Jesse's air-con is broken. I think we've figured that out by now.
If the chapters were longer it might work better, but this is just sort of strolling along at the moment. And there's nothing going on to leave me on the edge of my seat.
I read a chapter and think "ah, that was cute", which is nice, but I'm sure there must be more to the story than that.
Sorry if I sound negative, but I think you're trying too hard to be funny now and it's starting to get a bit tired because that's all there is. There's no action to balance it out.
| LabRats89 chapter 5 . 9/12/2004
I loved this chapter! Update ASAP! Stacey :)
| StrangePenguin chapter 4 . 9/10/2004
Loved the descriptive parts of this again, it's about as hilarious as it is intriguing!
Please write more soon!
| Jesse'sBIGGESTFan chapter 4 . 9/7/2004
I really like this story! This is so good! PLEASE UPDATE SOON!
| Lisa66 chapter 4 . 9/5/2004
More fun! I loved the scene with Amanda and Jesse and then on to the beach house where Jesse's dinner ordeal was a joy to read. Do I detect a branch in the story with Steve's assignment? And I'm thinking it's going to be difficult to keep Jesse out of the mix with Bob's being involved. I loved the last section.
| Lisa66 chapter 3 . 9/5/2004
Another fine chapter! Jesse is certainly coming to life with your words. Wonderful touches of humor that had me chuckling.
| texas2step chapter 4 . 9/5/2004
This was a really fun chapter. The way you show Steve and Jesse's relationship is a scream. The dialogue was great. (I'm sure I didn't spell that right.) The undercover assignment for Steve is a sure promise that some thing exciting is about to happen. That is if the two boys don't kill each other first with their rowdiness. I hope you update soon. Thanks for this great story.
| LabRats89 chapter 4 . 9/5/2004
Update ASAP! Stacey I love this story!
| Lauren chapter 3 . 8/31/2004
I have to agree with "Chickory" here - the expletives were totally out of place (particularly coming out of Jesse's mouth) and ruined what was a decent chapter.
I know you've given a PG13 rating here, but there was no need for them - and they were not in keeping with the story or the show.
I don't want to discourage you from writing - you have a great talent and I never want to discourage an emerging DM writer - particularly a good one!
But how about using "Jesse cursed" instead of actually using THAT word?
Other than that, you're doing a really good job and I hope you continue. This was a very minor criticism. Just because you're a teenager doesn't mean you have to like swearing.
| Jesse'sBIGGESTFan chapter 3 . 8/31/2004
Please, please update soon! I want to get to the action!
| Chikory chapter 3 . 8/31/2004
Am I the only one who didn't like this chapter? The others were great, your writting is great, you're funny I'll give you that. But (and I know I'm one too talk here) is that "f" word really necessary? I know it's your story, and you're entitled to use it if you like, but it's just kind of a put off. I mean, bad language is ok, but when it comes to that dreaded oh so nasty f word coming out of the nice wonderful cute Jesse, it's just so wrong!
But by all means, don't stop writting! I just thought I'd let you know... Guess I'll sit back and wait for the angry people to go on at me for being truthful now...
| StrangePenguin chapter 3 . 8/30/2004
HAHA! Awakens some great memories of one week LA without air conditioning in the hotel room. Boy, you gotta love it...the story, I mean! I like your comedic style and descriptions, but I still have the feeling there is something going on. I wanna know what, please update soon!