|Reviews for Painting an Oyster|
| Madeye Missy chapter 1 . 1/21
I'm with the other reviewer about the writing style. I'm trying to get into the story, but the narrative is tough to get through. There's way too much introspection going on here for just the first chapter. And a lot of it is unnecessary, like the amount there is just talking about boxes and why she hates them, why she needs her brothers for them, why her mother was there. That's just one example, it takes up too much, and serves little purpose.
When using first person, character voice in the narrative is expected, but using words like "bestest friend" outside of dialogue really takes away the quality. I can see some of her introspection is supposed to be humorous, but it's just... Weird. She goes off on odd, pointless tangents sometimes that the reader could lose sight of what's actually going on. Info dumping comes to my mind.
But basically, one thing that's bothering me most about the writing is your lack of contractions. "I will tell her..." "It is something..." "I am going to..." I mean, if you're attempting to write a specific way, like really formally, then I suppose not using contractions would fit. But the problem with not using them is it's tiring to read, the writing becomes stiff. It's such a simple thing to just have "I'm going to go..." Instead of "I am going to go..." Like I said, it reads off too that's your thing, then it's alright, but it should be consistent through the narrative and dialogue, which currently it's not. One sentence you'll have "I am going to..." And the next you'll have the contraction "I'm" which it's just like, why not bother using them most the time?
I'm not saying never spell out a contraction, I'm saying for the majority, since this writing is not so formal, it would read so much more smoothly and less stiff.
That's just my opinion though.
| BeauDisaster chapter 1 . 10/20/2012
Definitely one of my favorite fanfics, I've read it several times and I love it more each time.
I love the storyline, the characterization and the Draco parts, because I love how you wrote him. I wish this had more to it; like marriage and kids and happy ever after, even though it's implied, I'm greedy.
I realize you're done with fanfiction and I sincerely wish you luck in publishing your novels. I'd like to one day read them if I had any idea who you actually are. So I'll just have to hope I one day stumble upon a book that matches your writing style. Imagine that.
| JaneA0202 chapter 15 . 8/31/2012
the story was interesting, but I had problem with the way it was written...I wish it was from 3rd POV...this first POV, especially Ginny's POV was so tiring...she was always thinking about strange things, analyzing them with weird humour, she often reminded me of those strange teenagers I remember from my school days :D
The length of the chapters was great, but half of chapter was always about her thinking and thinking...I guess this writing style isn't my cup of tea...
| Lisa94 chapter 15 . 4/24/2012
This story is absolutely amazing!
I loved reading it and will probably read it again sometime :)
| 732 chapter 15 . 12/7/2011
The constant interior monologue saying "I am not thinking about this" is tiring
| Thia chapter 15 . 11/5/2011
fantastic as always
| lensman chapter 15 . 8/3/2011
Great story. It has been a long time since I have read a single story with two first person narratives. Very clever and very well done.
Thanks for the read. Good luck with your own books and manuscripts.
| anabanana chapter 15 . 3/22/2011
Throughout the years I've been reading D/G fics, I can't believe I have just stumbled upon this story now. The story is wonderful! The plot was very clever and entertaining and the characterization is very good as well. What really keeps me stuck into reading a story is sensible, flowing dialogue and this fic certainly had this. Overall, I'm glad to have read a wonderful story like this. Keep up the good work!
| Amy Christina chapter 15 . 10/8/2010
This story was completely amazing.
You did a great job, and I enjoyed reading it thoroughly. (:
| alicecullenlvr chapter 15 . 5/13/2010
I do hope to find ur work on the shelves soon. ;D And am sorry that u r stepping away from fanfiction...it's very hard to get any half-decent writers. Anywhoo, good story...and, yeah...'K, it's late and I'm tired and that's the best I've got right now. :P
| alicecullenlvr chapter 12 . 5/12/2010
Drunk Draco? Oh boy! Though I am worried about what could have him getting drunk in the first place?
BTW, the whole 'three foot hula-hoop bubble' thing? Hilarious! Luved it! And I always say, 'Hearing voices doesn't make you crazy, nor does talking to them or arguing with them. You know you've gone crazy when you start losing the arguments.' :D
| alicecullenlvr chapter 4 . 5/9/2010
Gotta luv Draco. :P I can kinda see him wearing glasses, but I'm having a hard time wrapping my mind around it. Maybe, just maybe, I need to keep reading! Fancy that! lol! Anywhoo...oh yeah, my aunt's dogs all do that. Lick your pants or legs. It's weird. Yeah, okay, so gonna go read more.
| Anon chapter 15 . 11/25/2009
Oh my gosh, I loved this story. It was incredibly well written and I've always loved the D/G pairing. :) I couldn't stop reading this. I even stayed overtime at work (yes, I'm reading it at work.. it can't be helped) to finish reading this addicting piece of literature ;) Keep writing!
| crazy waterbending miko chapter 15 . 7/28/2009
This is just an amazing story!There is really nothing else that I can say. This was one of the best Ginny/Draco fics that I have read I a very long time. I especially liked the ending where you managed to make everything come together. I'm sorry if this review makes no sense, but its about 6am and I've yet to go to bed. Thanks again!
| 007 AgentSpuddette chapter 3 . 7/22/2009
I am really liking this story. Its well writte. The characters are good, I like Narcissa especially. and this chapter was the best so far, with only one blatant problem that as much as i'm trying to ignore, I HAVE to comment on.
Finnigan is Scottish? Really? Are you sure he's not...you know...Irish. What with him being Irish and all. And him having a name like Seamus. And speaking with an Irish accent.