Reviews for Two Angels
Game777Guy chapter 19 . 6/23/2014
I really liked this story. Normally, love stories aren't my thing, but this one was exceptionally well-written and offered an in-depth view of the character's emotions. On top of that, by mere coincidence, I'm listening to Attack on Titan music, and the tracks that accompanied this final chapter fit the tone more beautifully than I could have imagined. Truly, this story is an amazing example of what a talented writer can do with interesting characters who are in love. I'm glad I came across it.
Cormag Ravenstaff chapter 19 . 3/17/2013
Wow...
leithalweapon chapter 19 . 2/20/2013
Well... it looks like I'm eight years late for this party, but I'll give my review anyways. If you do end up seeing this, I just want to let you know that I really enjoyed reading this story. It was excellent!
Shadow's Interceptor chapter 19 . 10/31/2010
I started this fic with the intention of reading only the first chapter, then perhaps putting it on the back burner for another day. But nineteen chapters later, here I am. This was beautiful. Your characterizations of not only Jaffar and Nino, but every character you mentioned were well done and spot on. You integrated game dialoge so well into the story that it was difficult to tell where your words ended and the game's began. This is the best Jaffar/Nino fic I have read.

This story has been added to my own personal cannon for Fire Emblem. Grand job. If you care to write another story for this universe, I will be there reviewing it.

Write on, TheOneAndOnlyT, write on.
Celeborn00 chapter 5 . 7/22/2010
Hmm...male romance writer eh? Well, go with your strengths I suppose. :-)

Overall I think you're doing a good job with this story, although I do believe a couple things could have been stronger. First of all I can't see Jaffar questioning Sonia's decision as much as he did, and I especially can't see him going for his weapon. Maybe you took that from the game (I can't remember), but I don't think Sonia would have assigned him the task once she saw how torn he was.

Second, Jaffar seems a little soft overall, but I guess that's just a matter of opinion.
L.C. Li chapter 19 . 5/19/2010
Bravo! Absolutely wonderful.

I love how accurately you portray Jaffar. It's very realistic for him to be completely clueless when it comes to things such as emotion. It's also very funny. :)

Such a good fic! I love it.
Esmina chapter 19 . 1/3/2010
my GOD. i'm not one for mush - any of my friends can tell you that i hate mush. yet i always had a soft spot for jaffar and nino. you captured jaffar's characters so well! his reactions his confusion, his stubbornness ... so perfect . haha it was unbelievble. jaffar's feeings for nino are just so tnder and sweet.
ThorHammer17 chapter 19 . 8/30/2009
First thing I noticed...

If he stayed any longer, than he would never be able to do what needed to be done.

It would be "then" and not "than," unless I'm very much mistaken and my A in AP Lit is unwarranted.

Absolutely beautiful. I can't imagine writing something like this. So much buildup, let-down, inspiration, AH! It makes me think of these romaniticized images of a girl dancing in white silk, moonlit nights, rain on the quiet leaves, and snowswept plains. I give this the edge over Angel/Slayer. There's too much emotion here to give it anything less than the best. I know my reviews probably don't mean much with the other three or four thousand I'm sure an outstanding writer such as yourself surely has, but this is the highest form of praise I can give. And, yes, I know you wrote this years ago, and that it may even embarrass you, but it is still beyond my ability to describe.

A tip of the hat, and a bow to you, sir.
ThorHammer17 chapter 18 . 8/30/2009
Wow. You created that scene in the woods... Man, you make this look easy. I could hear the rain falling, like a scene from a movie or something. I've never read a story this well done, except maybe Angel/Slayer.

Just a random question, but are you really obsessed on the image of an angel? I see it a lot in your writings.
ThorHammer17 chapter 17 . 8/30/2009
Eh... You could have ended that better. -I- Couldn't have, buy -YOU- could have. It seemed too light-hearted compared to the rest of the scene.
ThorHammer17 chapter 16 . 8/30/2009
Very nice. I like "old Nino" better too. You really do this well. Call it flattery if you want to, but I really do enjoy your writing. It's been an hour since my last timestamp, so...

- 3:14 A.M.
ThorHammer17 chapter 15 . 8/30/2009
I do think you could use some work on the death scenes. Its hard to do, unless you think about death in a sort of... Passive sense, so to speak. When I try (although none of my written death attempts are on this website), I usually listen to a piece of music that reminds me of loss. It could be something like lost innocence, or something like that, but it does help you get in the right mood. The focus of a death scene should be the dying person. Its hard to write one from the point of view of people around him or her. I grant you that.
ThorHammer17 chapter 14 . 8/29/2009
That seemed like an awkward start. You did do a fantastic job of deviating from the support conversations, although I am a little upset you decided to throw the love question in with the C support. It didn't fit well, I don't think. Legault and Jaffar is one of my favorite supports in the game, and it has a message all its own. I hope you finish it well, otherwise I will probably be upset. But no worries. You are the author. I always give benefit of the author.
ThorHammer17 chapter 13 . 8/29/2009
Your question about Lyn's in-characterness...

It depends, I think, on her "support levels" through the game. I think that, in absence of a HectorxLyn (given that Eliwood is taken, and there have been no hints at a KentxLyn) relationship, you've put her into a very good place as a supporting character in your story. I think the way you make her more delicate when dealing with someone like Jaffar than with someone like Hector is very telling as to your insight. Think to the boat scene, with Hector and Lyn, before Ch 19, Pirate Ship. It fits.
ThorHammer17 chapter 12 . 8/29/2009
This was better. I think I can see where you are going with this, eh, thematic element here. Maybe. I might be way off mark. We'll see.
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