Reviews for Midnight Guardian
asdfghjkler chapter 1 . 7/14/2016
This looks absolutely awesome.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 20 . 7/10/2016
Definitely a better resolution than canon. Sirius is now a free man! I would have liked to have seen even more changes from canon. I was never able to buy into the foolish idea that nobody, absolutely nobody, was willing to question the received wisdom that Sirius Black was a danger to Harry despite all the evidence to the contrary. When the summary says "changing everything" I would really like to see a fairly radical departure from canon events.

A stag is a powerful patronus all on its own. It doesn't really need the addition of a wolf and a grim. That feels like a superfluous fan addition that mildly degrades the story by overpowering the hero. That being said, it does have symbolic significance. It says that Harry has three spiritual "fathers" who love him, who's love he feels, not just one. If Sirius and Remus are truly there for Harry and fighting side by side with him throughout the rest of the series, then fine. But if they're isolated at Grimmauld Place or Lupin's cottage while Harry fights his battles alone at Hogwarts for the next few years then not so fine.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 19 . 7/10/2016
I like that Harry had studied up on wizarding law all on his own without any nagging or help from Hermione and knew exactly what to say to get Fudge to stop railroading Sirius.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 18 . 7/10/2016
Ta Dah! The big reveal chapter.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 16 . 7/10/2016
"one and the same", not "one in the same".

Finally! Of course, that's just step one, but still, it's been a long wait for that first step. This is chapter 16 after all.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 15 . 7/10/2016
I keep wanting to say "get on with it Harry". Why isn't he out in the woods looking for Midnight?
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 13 . 7/10/2016
Hermione isn't any more logical than any other wizard or witch, apparently. Sirius Black has been labeled "dangerous" so of course no matter what he does to prove he's not after Harry, she's going to believe the stupid label instead of objectively examining the evidence for herself.

It really shouldn't take multiple weeks to examine a broom for hexes and jinxes (despite canon). There can't be that many diagnostic charms that can be cast on an enchanted object to determine the exact set of enchantments. If it's anything like magical medical diagnostics there's a single diagnostic charm that causes an enchanted quill to write down the list of enchantments on a piece of parchment. Then it's just a matter of looking up any that are unfamiliar in some catalog of enchantments to determine what they do. Given that it's the holidays and the teachers have nothing better to do, it should provide no more than an afternoon of pleasant diversion. If it truly took more than a day or two or involved proprietary information they should call in an expert from the Firebolt factory to look for anything that wasn't applied at the factory. Or the factory rep could just trade a known clean broom for the suspicious one.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 11 . 7/10/2016
Common room? I thought you said Harry was moved out of Gryffindor Tower after he was attacked in front of the fat lady!?
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 10 . 7/10/2016
Hermione was sooooooooooooooo selfish about Crookshanks! She shouldn't have bought a pet that introduced itself by pouncing on Ron's pet in the first place. To do so was disrespectful of his feelings. Then her defenses of the cat's behavior were so outlandish too. How would she feel of the situation were reversed and Ron's pet was a dog or crup and was attacking hers? How would she like that? Would she just excuse it as being instincts? Of course not! She would insist that he control his animal, so why is she not taking responsibility for her animal? Why does she think she's so privileged that she can let her animal roam free and terrorize other pets in the common room and dorms? Her lack of empathy and responsibility and maturity are just mind-boggling.

Misuse of "brake" for "break".

You don't think Sirius would tell Harry something intelligible like "the rat is the traitor"? Cumo-o-on!
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 9 . 7/10/2016
Good analogy comparing the relationship between Snape and James to Draco and Harry.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 8 . 7/10/2016
Another misuse of "discrete".

Misuse of "slopping" for "sopping".

Sybill Trelawney wasn't hired for Divination until after the Marauders were out of school. James was not the type to take duffer courses. He and Sirius were smart enough to make good grades effortlessly.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 7 . 7/10/2016
Misuse of "discrete" for "discreet".

Misuse of "statue" for "stature".

You promised in the summary to change everything. But so far it doesn't look like much is going to change at all. Harry spent the last half of the summer training at Hogwarts instead of exploring Diagon Alley, but other than that everybody is still acting like zombies from canon.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 6 . 7/10/2016
You can't conjure food, including hot chocolate. It's the only one of the Gamp's Laws that we know. You can summon a house elf to provide it.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 5 . 7/10/2016
Potions taste vile but they are packaged in vials. Do not use "vile" for "vial".

I can but beg for one of the characters (including Harry) to have an ounce of sanity and realize that Sirius Black is not a threat to Harry.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 4 . 7/10/2016
What's Remus really trying to do here? He has to have realized that "Midnight" is really Padfoot. Indeed, after the howler in the Great Hall it should be obvious to everybody that Sirius Black means Harry no harm and acted to protect him. Why is everybody on automatic pilot and still trying to protect Harry from Sirius Black and planning on telling Harry all the old lies about him?
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