|Reviews for Forever|
| 1Angel Fallen chapter 1 . 7/13/2007
I liked your fic
| Craz Lollipop-Imp chapter 1 . 5/22/2005
that was definitaly kidish w/ kid logic
| MikaelaCheryl chapter 1 . 10/24/2004
This is good too!
I like the way you bring out the character in the characters (lol :S).
| roaring-chicken14 chapter 1 . 10/19/2004
very good but it was dificult to read beacuse of the font and the dialog wasnt sperated.
| just lurking chapter 1 . 9/28/2004
apparently some people got up on the wrong side of life to be that rude to a complete stranger (other review)...
i thought it simply needed a little cleaning up, such as dialogue and thoughts by one person go in one paragraph or so. then when another person thinks or says something you skip lines and start another paragraph. even if it is only 3 words in that pragraph it is ok to do (proper english grammar). if you do that it will make it easier to read. keep writing you will get better and better each time you write anything at all, i promise. constructive criticism (spelled?) is what i hope this sounds like and not rudeness like another reviewer...
| Caelum videre iussit chapter 1 . 9/26/2004
Okay. You want a review? Your story is immature and so far out of character you might want to relabel it "Original Fiction" and resubmit it over at Fiction Press. Line after line of inane dialogue does not a story make. Why don't you actually watch the show, familiarize yourself with the characters and their personalities and motivations, and then come back and write another story.