Reviews for Motherly Love |
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![]() ![]() well... Dumbledore found out... I think... I like the little connections you're making... |
![]() ![]() ![]() i loved this chapter. it was so great. i love this story so far. how dear you end it like this. please add more to this story soon. i have a request-will you add karasu from the dark tounament to this story- p.s. happy new year. |
![]() ![]() ![]() nice |
![]() ![]() For some reason, FFN won't let me log in. Anyway, I've been following this story for a while, but I'm horrible about reviewing. I beta read for a few people, and would volunteer to Beta for you, but I'm a bit busy. However, if no one else volunteers, I would be glad to help. I just can't guaruntee my speedyness in getting back to you, at least until Shakespeare performance is over (January 17.) So, consider me an alternative. Anyway, wonderful chapter. I'm certainly enjoying this story. I would review, but I need to make a birthday card for my sister. Just watch your punctuation, and it should be good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() "begging of this summer" - beginning Loving the idea of Kuwarbara as a (distant) Weasely. My child suggests Kuwabara try his blue string of companionship,instead. |
![]() ![]() ![]() how does dumbledore know that kurama is the fox demon? and is kuwabara the cousin person the weasleys are expecting? update soon |
![]() ![]() ![]() Shorter than I would wish, especially after waiting to see Shiori and Kurama interact, and not having much of them in this chapter. Well, at least Dumbledore has shown up, and things should really begin happening. More Kurama in the next chapter, please. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I volunteer! I volunteer for beta-ness-ing-thingie! BTW, go Dumbledore. Way to scare Kurama out of a year's fur. I like how you're handling Kuwabara so far, very nice. |
![]() ![]() ![]() O! Good chapter! I really loved it. Just when you think you know what's going to happen you throw something else in there! Fox-san? Man, I cannot picture Dumbledore saying that. That's who it is, right? I liked that pinky string of love part too. Anyway, there was one error you might want to fix. You have a line at the bottom a paragraph before the scene actually ends. Right at then end when you switch from Kuwabara to Kurama. Just thought I'd let you know. A beta is, like, a grammer checker right? I could do it if you don't get any other offers, but you'll have to explain to me what exactly the job entails. I'm glad you sorted out your plot, I really hope it makes your updates come more often. Thank you for reviewing my fic and I hope you update soon. |
![]() ![]() are you sure his stepdad's name is kazuya? ... last time i checked, his stepdad and stepbrother are both "shuichi"s ... shuichi hatanaka senior.. shuichi hatanaka junior... and shuichi minamino... ... i wonder how shiori's putting up with the name confusion... |
![]() ![]() ![]() PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE SOON! This is just getting so good! I NEED MORE! :D TK Twin Kats |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yeah I finally was able to log in and review! I like how this chapter turned out! Interesting having Kuwabara related to the Weasleys..."the red heads have to stick together!" ;P Ah too bad we can't see the sketched out drawing of the final story...good times. *death glares* And what happened to ME being your beta? I was...then you stopped letting me read them! Maybe I kidnapped your Kurama plush from you too much...lol oh well. Good job on the update! I will put my story up eventually...when I finish writing the first chapter or prologue or whatever it was... |
![]() ![]() ![]() i love it. update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved this chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() um...i THINK his name is Kazuya Hatanaka but i'm not sure. his last name is definately hatanaka though. |