Reviews for An Afternoon Of Love
punky warhammer chapter 1 . 10/9/2014
that is how you get ants!
Arien30 chapter 1 . 1/12/2005
Legolas, chocolate pie... nothing but an apron on... oh my! And after everything, they are blessed by the Vala! Awesome... simply awesome storytelling.
Aryon O Huine Child chapter 1 . 11/16/2004
Well... pretty well written, but all too sweet. Such as "Wordlessly, he scooped out some of the pie and fed it to her, being sure to leave just a bit for him to kiss away. Which he did, teasingly slow. She caught on to his game and did the same for him."

I mean, c'mon! Talk about topped with too much sugar. Anyway...

The slight sexual scene is neither intriguing nor romantic; it reminded me a bit of very mild porn, so to say. I don't mean to flame your story, but I didn't appreciate that.

I think it stops too abruptly also, as I would've made it a bit longer.

Overall, I didn't find your fanfic very interesting. Nice try though!
satismagic chapter 1 . 10/20/2004
Another almost 30ish fangirl checking out a most delectable story. I loved it, and could picture it so vividly in my mind...

*Sigh*

Elves and chocolate...

*deep sigh*
Kathy chapter 1 . 10/9/2004
I enjoyed reading this story and the only thing that could be improved would be more detail, but that would probably change the rating too!-Kathy
Mary chapter 1 . 10/9/2004
aw that was cute in a weird way but very cute. write more pwease
lilyrose16 chapter 1 . 10/8/2004
that was really good and i can't wait to read more. please hurry and update and if you ever need help just ask.
angel13 chapter 1 . 10/8/2004
the story is greatb can't wait for u 2 update
Arianlee chapter 1 . 10/8/2004
Oh Isil, I know for a fact you have been impatiently waiting to get this story out of your system for a very long time now! Now with the additon of the chocolate pie, I can see it made it so much more fun to write!
Rhapsody the Bard chapter 1 . 10/8/2004
Oh my... well written. I love build up of this short story, very simple, but powerfull. And then at the tail of the story, the names of the characters. Perfect timing!

Now where is my chocolate ;)
Isil Elensar chapter 1 . 10/8/2004
Thanks, CountryChick928. I appreciate it. I did change the rating, although I don't think it's strong enough for "R". I erred on the side of caution. Thanks.
CountryChick928 chapter 1 . 10/7/2004
you really should consider changing the rating on that one...