A very good McKay story, with some truly lovely insights - his inability to handle friendship and concern rang perfectly true. Watching his teammates through his eyes was neatly done as well; you caught Sheppard and Teyla, in particular, very nicely.

The only thing that kept me from truly enjoying the story was being consistently thrown off by the need to mentally fill in missing words or punctuation, or fix spelling or punctuation. Given into the hands of a good beta-reader, this would be a much stronger story, and one I would happily recommend to all and sundry.

this is really good - please keep writing... just one little thing that I'd like to point out.

Since I'm assuming you're american, I'd just like to mention that you don't need to write 'zedPM'... you can still do the good ol zpm... its the same thing, different pronunciation. kinda like how lieutenant is pronounced 'left-tenant' in Canada (and pretty much all english speaking countries in the world except the states), napkins are serviettes, couches are chesterfields, the correct spelling of color is colour, 'hoodies' are bunnyhugs, and 'knitted hats' are toques.

yayness!

This brilliant as is all your work that I've read. I'm not good at compliments... let me pause and find a thesaurus. Odd that I know about 40 different words for bad but not so much for good...

OK I have some words: Remarkably Spiffy! (and apparantly strange is another word for wonderful)

On another wordy note, my spelling isn't great but I'm pretty sure cowardess cowardice

Liked your story. Don't let it end now, you should write an aftermath chapter(s)or story telling about the meetings between Rodney and Heightmeyer and those kinds of things.

P.S. I would have read and reviewed it sooner but my internets been sporadicly working on and off for the last month or so.

i really enjoyed this story! i love mckay and though me ma finds him irritating i keep saying theres more to him that meets the eye, and i think you hae expressed that well!

i look forward to more mckay angst!

xx

aw. squee. this is such a great story. i love the sick Rodney... _;; its cute. _

Love the story so far! I'v been gone for nearly two weeks so I'v been missing all the updates! UpdATE SOON

Excellent story! Loved every page!

I've een having a really bad day today, and I've been wondering why my friends put up with me.

Your story has really made me feel better, and that I can face things again.

I wanted you to know that you've made a difference in someone's life today.

Oh! And that I'll continue to read it. :D

Y'know, that really seems to be Rodney's response to any trouble he's in: "I'm gonna die."

*Shakes head sadly*

You're good at dialogue, you know that? I mean, I can see the characters reacting the way you write in your story. I can hear the inflections of their tone, your words fit so smoothly into their mouths.

Oh, and the world needs more Rodney fics. ;)

Aw! Poor Rodney! Poor baby! You are SUCH a good writer!

Aw, McKay stories are the best. This was great! Perhaps more?

Awe.

Rodney feels warm and fuzzy. :D

::snuggles him::

i just love this story. can't wait to see what happends next. plz update soon. PLZ!