|Reviews for Rising Sun|
| tomorrow4eva chapter 15 . 6/20
This is so awesome. What an amazing build up. Loved it.
| tomorrow4eva chapter 4 . 6/20
Totosai is just perfect in this role
| izzy5683 chapter 1 . 7/3/2014
I like this chapter and would you please be my Beda reader
| Feza's twin chapter 15 . 4/29/2010
It's a shame you never finished.
Ah well, thanks for an interesting read.
| Finbastard chapter 15 . 7/26/2009
ARGGHH! Update this, it's f*cking good!
| Xoroth chapter 15 . 3/13/2008
Great story so far.
| Ouatic-7 chapter 1 . 10/7/2007
I really, really enjoyed this. I would have read it at one sitting if I hadn't had to go to lunch with my husband. I especially liked how you used Dumas as a starting point rather than trying to slavishly follow the original story and, of course, Totosai is much more interesting than the Abbe Faria.
I also liked how you didn't rush to get Kagome in. Is Edmond not going of with Haydee what annoys your sister?
| Lifestyle chapter 6 . 4/29/2007
Rin is adorable! Wish I had a kid like that!
| Lifestyle chapter 5 . 4/29/2007
Three cheers for secondary plots!
| Lifestyle chapter 2 . 4/29/2007
Ok. Just one question. Why are you writing here when you could be publishing something? You’ve certainly got the talent!
Anyway, character composition was flawless once again (no surprises there), spelling was good, dialog blew me away, and your transitions between the “past”, if that’s what you want to call it, and the “present” were some of the best I’ve ever seen.
I really want to catch a weaker point to help improve your work… but I just can’t seem to find any to address. Only two chapters in and you’ve got me hooked. This is one of those stories you read and then for the next few months everything else seems dull in comparison. You’ve spoiled me already.
I’m getting redundant, aren’t I?
Well, for the next few chapters, let’s see if I can find anything to comment on for improvement. Doubt it, but whatever. Let’s do it. I’m always one for a challenge.
I should really read The Count of Monte Cristo again. I’ve forgotten much of it already. It was defiantly one of those classics you can read again… (With a hint of despair)…I’m never going to get to my homework, am I?
On to the next chapter, then!
| Lifestyle chapter 1 . 4/29/2007
This is amazing! I'm glad I clicked on this story. It's composed so well that I wouldn't even question whether it had the potential to become a published work or not.
I especially love your portrayal of the characters. Kikyo is usually portrayed as evil in other stories, not really catching the side of her the Inuyasha must have fallen in love with.
In all- superb. This story deserves a thousand more reviews than it already has!
On to the next chapter, then! ;)
| Rio Grande chapter 15 . 2/26/2007
wonderful story! amazingly written - you've got a way with words, and i mean that sincerely. your writing flows, you know? never read the count of monte cristo before... but now i wanna, so thanks - update soon please!
| Silence-Darkness chapter 15 . 1/31/2007
Do you ever get that feeling..? You start to type away at your story, but then you look over it... you know the plot's good, you know what you want to do with it, but when you write, you just feel it's not good enough, and leave it for later when perhaps the style returns to you...
...Perhaps. Certainly an author of your calibre passed through that stage at least once to reach where you are right now. I wish that stage would just end already for me to start writing in earnest again.
As usual, flawless grammar and spelling - I don't know why I even bother pointing it out, because you certainly don't need to worry about those aspects any longer. I actually read some of Monte Cristo now (go Project Gutenberg, but it's still really, really hard to read right off a computer screen), but haven't even reached the real conflict of it all.
The only complaint I really have is that you should have kept Kagome's subservient tone for a bit longer. Sure, you needed her into her own personality quickly, but the rate of change seemed a bit too sudden for me - it would have been better if she slowly flexed her freedom a bit more before realising she could get away with such talk against her "master". I suppose your story plot doesn't allow for that time though, for perhaps you need the characters right in action soon (I'll be looking forward to that).
An interesting way to add Sango into the mix - maybe it's because I didn't reread the past 2 chapters she felt like she just dropped in - and certainly a different way of ending it. It sounds kind of anti-climatic for the battle to end from just a sprained ankle (maybe a bunch of kids were about to turn the corner, and Sango didn't want them to see a man murdered?). Given my (hopefully useful) experience in writing fighting scenes, it usually helps to work the sentence length to flow with the rhythm of the fight. Currently they read like a narrative, which works everywhere else, but it doesn't quite give the feel of the fight and the emotions Miroku is feeling as well.
Ah! And finally the Shikon no Tama appears! I wonder how closely you're going to stick to the Monte Cristo plot, or Inuyasha's plot, or just forge your own in some new direction in between. I can't fault you for your update speeds - Heavens know how slowly I bother - but my mind's racing with the possibilities! What, how, whom, when?
I really should get to writing my own, but hey, I don't quite know how to write a thriller yet. And the chapter I'm crunching through has to be thrilling.
Good job on posting this. I think I've rambled on long enough already.
| kitsune-koinu chapter 15 . 1/19/2007
| priestessmykala chapter 15 . 1/18/2007
great chapter and i am so glad you updated