|Reviews for If Everything Had Been Different|
| Inni chapter 14 . 1/30/2005
What a story! I just loved it. You really had me intrigued in this. I must commend you for the clever ending, how you put Veronica's thoughts into a letter. The words "my son" at the end were so strong and powerful. Excellent work! ;)
| myosotis chapter 14 . 1/2/2005
This was a very good fic and I enjoyed following it through! Each chapter was better than the last (and this final one was absolutely amazing!) and you never let me down! Now get to work in translating the sequel:) please...
Congrats to the authors and beta readers(s) and keep up the great work!
| santa crux chapter 14 . 12/30/2004
I have very much enjoyed the whole story. You really capture the explorer's ways and the tale is very touching. I guess because of the translation, the story has a lilt that is quite musical. Glad to hear there is a sequel.
| Claudia chapter 14 . 12/30/2004
That was a lovely story! Can't wait for your next one!
| Cris chapter 14 . 12/29/2004
My dear ladies,
you really know the way to close a story with a golden plate!
Simply loved the way Malone and Verônica got together, as well as the growing relationship between Tommy and Ned.
Of course Marguerite and Roxton teasing each other is always a must (for a M&R maniac like me ;-)).
This closing, with Challenger's journal was touching.
But of course the inflexion point, for me, was Veronica's notes - definitely brought tears to my eyes...
Thanks for giving us this fiction as a gift!
| charmedchick8407 chapter 13 . 12/28/2004
This is a great story line i hve been ready it for a while hoping you would keep it going. I love how you played off a story line that was already created. Thanks for making this story. Hey if you want you can email me if you want to talk or get to no each other (charmedchick8407 )
| Cris chapter 13 . 12/26/2004
For me the highest point in this chapter is the parallel conversation between Ned/Challenger and Roxton/Veronica. Simply amazing the way you've built up their final recognition of their attitudes.
Loved Tommy going to Veronica's bedroom and his reactions to her - he is simply lovely!
And, as a M&R fan, adored our Lord bitting back his nice words for Marguerite to prevent her of using them against him in the future!
Now, it's a matter of time - curious to check on next chapter!
| Claudia chapter 12 . 12/20/2004
That's a very funny stuff, guys! Can't wait for the next one! Hilarious situation between Roxton, Marguerite and the kid. I liked it!
| Cris chapter 12 . 12/19/2004
You know what impresses me more in your writing? It's about harmony: you definetely know how to equilibrate a chapter full of danger with a lighter chapter, like this one, and still get the readers by the heart and make us feel like "I want MORE of this!"...
In this chapter, I simply loved:
- the funny sequence on the hunting of the "white chicken", the trial with the pterodactyl, and the result of it
- the part of WHO IS IN CHARGE is simply amazing, I couldn't stop laughing, I could see the scene in front of me, the elevator going up and down, Marguerite getting sick, simply amazing
- and the sweetest of all: Tommy getting finally a way to Veronica's bedroom
- Ned and Challenger starting to go back to a "friendly" situation...
Simply loved the chapter, and I'm curious to see what's next! Ups, this means I need to start working on translating chapter 13! ;-)
| myosotis chapter 11 . 12/14/2004
This is coming along just perfectly! Keep it up guys!
| Claudia B chapter 11 . 12/14/2004
Finally , it seems things are going back to normal between them, that's a relief! Keep going!
| Cris chapter 11 . 12/13/2004
As a wine, this story gets better and better as it is approaching its end in a few chapters...
By the way, mentioning wine, the comparison of Marguerite to a good wine or a rare perfume, when you mention Roxton as a connoisseur of hers is the most appropriate comparison I've ever seem...
Marguerite's memories being mentioned just through a quick light on another shadow of her past that we probably are never going to learn about - very nice...
I simply adored Roxton challenging Ned and Arthur to cheer up. And he is simply sweet when going for Marguerite and especially by staying with her...
And Marguerite always amazes me! Her idea about the relaxing massage, and especially her one-sided conversation with Veronica is something to be recorded and recalled as times goes by!
All I can say is that I definitely must start translating chapter 12 ASAP!
| Rosa chapter 10 . 12/12/2004
Im not tired for say that fic is fantastic, all detalis and work for writer this wonderfuls.
Yours is a realy writers.
| Rosa chapter 9 . 12/12/2004
The moments of tension continued, and im very nervous too.
I like when everybory work togheter...this wonderful!
I soo scared with the Veronicas sick...but every think go well, i hope!
| Rosa chapter 8 . 12/12/2004
Before i forget sorry for my english.
This chapter was very anxious, im feel realy nervous with soo much tension.
Very good work girls.