|Reviews for When Civil Blood Makes Civil Hands Unclean|
| Trinity Day chapter 4 . 6/22/2005
I think you would have been better off sticking to your more revised lines in this one, instead of staying so close to the source text. Also, are there plans to continue or has this been abandoned?
| Trinity Day chapter 3 . 6/22/2005
Ack! I keep forgetting to mention, A/Ns within the text make me wince. And when I say "me", I mean me and most of the people that I know. Honestly, there's nothing so important that you can't wait until the end of the chapter to say it (or the beginning of the chapter, for that matter). It's one of the top five reasons for people to click their back buttons without reading the story.
| Trinity Day chapter 2 . 6/22/2005
"A freaking Whomping Willow with any other name would still be a giant, abusive tree!" Hee! I really do enjoy these types of lines.
| Trinity Day chapter 1 . 6/22/2005
Actually, for all that you're warning that you know some lines that appear here aren't the same as they appear in the play, I think you'd do better to deviate from Shakespeare's script even further. Although I will say that I like some of your slightly skewed lines. (eg, "Goyle: No, stupid." to Crabbe's "Is it in my favor if I say yes?" and then later on "Well, there are other House Elves in the manor, aren’t there?")
| RavenAmeraDreams chapter 3 . 12/1/2004
Good chapter...although a couple of hints to make it less confusing. Hermione would descend the steps. I thought she saw Draco and went back into the school or something. And a question. Hermione is the nurse right? Cause I'm thinking yes. Anyway, good translation! You're doing better than I could have. And Spooty is my nickname. Now that I think about it...I have no idea what I put A in front of my pen name. I should have stuck with DepressedSpooty...oh well...
| xxlei chapter 4 . 11/30/2004
oh, my god! i cannot beleive you killed off ron! but i can totally see draco doing it in the movie. seems very leo dicaprio ish-his face wet with tears. this is a really good idea with a really great story line. so exciting! write more!
| RavenAmeraDreams chapter 2 . 10/25/2004
Aw...I was hoping Juliet would be Hermione...Oh well...tis alright...
as long as it's not a Ron/Hermione story I'll read it...
I still like the idea...
| xxlei chapter 2 . 10/24/2004
great chapter...really good idea!
just one question: how does he know the gryffindor password?
| hedwigmail chapter 2 . 10/23/2004
Major question does he even know who she is? Great chapter by the way.
| xxlei chapter 1 . 10/19/2004
its really good, write more!
but what are the 0's for?
and are you doing g/d?
| RavenAmeraDreams chapter 1 . 10/18/2004
I like this! I've used the biting of the thumb thing since I read Romeo and Juliet...and I have a feeling that putting Harry Potter into one of the best plays ever written will be fantastic! I await the next scene/chapter to be put up! An you do realize that Draco only feels bad because the girl won't have sex with him...right? (Well...Romeo does...but since Draco is Romeo...agh! You know what I mean!)