|Reviews for Return of the Sayajin|
| Breezy b chapter 2 . 8/30/2013
I really hate Jari. Big tittied Marie Sue.
The story also has no flow. I need a tremendous jump in logic to make the story line plausible. The character interactions are so unrealistic and embarrassingly simplistic.
| Foold chapter 4 . 8/14/2013
The Oc was very dumb in my opinion how she was stronger than Buu and learned two super saiykan forms Pass
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/29/2012
idk if you have ever read dragonball multiverse. But I know this came before that. I like this first chapter to what would happen if vegetto stayed fused, instead of staying and trying to cope, he left, all the way to mid GT (ugh) time
| Ermilus chapter 17 . 9/20/2012
I like your story oke. But if that a Goku-Vegeta why does they often talk about Goku and less about the prince of al.. Vegeta.
| Infidel94 chapter 5 . 7/15/2011
saiyan that is how its spelt not sayan edgit
| shadow'relic chapter 24 . 8/27/2010
Great Story! I really enjoyed it, even if my sleep might have suffered as well as my school work. lol (_) I luv it!
| L.E.N.E.X chapter 7 . 8/10/2010
But there's nothing lost though. Vegetto is still Vegeta and Kakarrot.
I remember Vegetto being a bit more playful though. Hmpt... Oh whatever... It's interesting I guess...
| supersaiyaman chapter 1 . 6/27/2010
very good start to this is rare to find a fanfict of this quality on
| sparklesyaoi chapter 1 . 3/19/2010
couls you please send the link to the picture to
| adamrpg chapter 1 . 4/20/2009
This is short but... I just have a feeling there will be a sequel. No more chapters for THIS story, eh? Ultimate cliffhanger... Though I think you should go back and edit out all the VERY, MANY NUMEROUS grammar and spelling mistakes, no offense.
| Kiyamasho chapter 25 . 2/12/2009
this story was incredibly epic. i LOVED it! I've always been a major DBZ fan and i love the way you continued the story after Buu. Too bad they didn't continue the anime this way.
anyways, good job and it was well worth all the time you spent writing this.
| Gaming Girl chapter 24 . 1/7/2009
Farking best DBZ story EVER!
I love this story so much,
I took my time reading it becauase i was scared it would end! .
lol I was so sad when I throught gohan died,
but to read he came back was great,
but I would have throught it would have been that guy who Kavri let live in the last bettle that saved Sirania, becuase there might have been the chance he was still bad, but we never find out what happens to him 'personaly'.
For a while I throught Jari and Chira might have gotten together secretly, becuase of what chira's mum throught and stuff, but that didn't happen.
I also may have throught becuase the family bond blood was so far apart, and age really don't matter when your sayain,
that Vegetto and Chija may have gotten together, cuz the moment they fused, both of them became two new people,
not goku and vegeta and not chira and jari but like totaly new people,
so ya know i throught something might happen, but when it came up that Vegetto adobted Chija i was like "mep! lucky they didn't get together".
It would also cool for there to be a small one shot where Vegetto finds a girl he would like seeing as he is the hero and it would be nice for him to have some kind of love life.
thank you for the brilliant read.
I wish you had more storys up from DBZ or any other things we may share a interest in.
again awesome job.
| TrunkstheWarrior chapter 1 . 4/12/2008
Your probably going to be mad but I too created Dragonball Return of the Saiyan. But instead of 23 chapters, I'm typing 410 chapters and 29 Saga/Seasons. Oh I created my own characters and serneryos. And I'm already up to season 6, chapter 57.
So if you are mad pm me and if u r not pm me.
| Mew Rin chapter 24 . 3/19/2008
Very beautifully written! I must say, every emotion that should have shown on the reader's face have shown for me! Never had I cried so much when Gohan "died". I was so sad. But thank God he still alive! It truly was a surprise and hopefully there will be a sequel to Gohan's return and Sirania's. Wow, bless his heart to forgive her(at least I think he did)and I also see some change in her heart also. I'll be praying and hoping that you will make a sequel soon, because you have a wonderful imagination and it would be a truly large lose if you did not use it. Anyway, what i'm trying to ask of you is...could you make the sequel soon? I'm dying to find out what will happen if Gohan will ever come back and what he meant by "I...know that you will be needed one day...and even though I don't know for what or when...this is what we are supposed to do." Will a new enemy even much stronger come? I can't even believe anyone to be any stronger then Vegetto nor Chija, but I know this will be another wonderful and beautiful adventure. Not only for them, but for the lucky reader who just happened to stumble upon a exciting new story! Good luck on these new adventure! Hehehe .
| Liddleheart chapter 24 . 3/4/2008
Absolutely wonderful, certainly one of the best pieces of fan fiction I have read. I have sent a link to my other half as I am sure he will enjoy it as much as I have. I truly hope to see a sequal in the near future :)