After reading "Changing Sides" before, I returned to enjoy one more work of J.S Mallory, and have no reason to be disappointed. A time-efficient writing style takes us into a far from stereotypical scenario. In my opinion another worthy mini-story. "Never deal with a Dragon, never trust an Elf, and never ever rely on a Psychiatrist?" ;-)

Great job on the story... do you think a 2nd chapter could materialize?

Very well done. I see potential in this story to lead to follow up chapters. I'll add it to the C2 community.

wow! O.o. i noticed that this wus made in 04 but this story is so great imma gonna comment it anyways. *couhcoughahem* this wus a awesome!1 Xel'lotath is annoying...and bonethievs with their long saber/sword like arms -.- this story is going to my faves .

That was kind of a trick... there is no logical explanation as to why that crate should have been there...

The building was renovated and overhaulled...Max's stuff should not have been there.

Yet it was...

That's one thing I love about stories involving insanity. You can do almost anything, because you can always pass it off as perhaps another illusion... or maybe not...

J.

Trippy. I like the idea of a one-shot, with a person taking the Tome, yet not accomplishing his goal, whatever that might have been. It also raises some questions as to how many other people this kind of event happened to. We only hear about the ones that were successful, or even semi-successful; what about the Dereks? Those who are taken by the darkness before they can resist it? Excellent story.

On a few side notes, there are some imperfections here. First, how in the world did they allow Max to keep his Sabre and the Tome in a box under his bed? Second, I never saw a bed in his cell in the first place, so where did he keep the box? Third, the Sabre was still in the mansion for Edward Roivas to use in 1952, and as far as I know, he never went to the asylum. Fourth, what about "Magickal Attack?" Even when he lost his weapons, he still had the ability to kill. It would be difficult to slay a legion of bonethieves with only a magickal attack at your side, but it would be something.

Anyway, you know you've written something worth reading when these kind of questions appear. It means your readerbase actually thinks about the subject matter after the story is a memory. Nicely done.

How about another short story? We can't get enough of Eternal Darkness fics around here!

Keep writing!

-T.J.

Wow...nicely done. You really captured the creepy feeling of the game.

Wow. Very, very nice story. I simply enjoyed it. Your character was very intersting and indepth, much like the ED characters themselves. (He also wasn't a Gary-Stu, thank god.)

The ending was...well...delightfull. I absoultely adored it, especially the last sentence. A very creepy, and well done story. I sincerly hope you will contiue to work on ED fiction, as you are incredibly talented.

This story was so good. great descriptions and a great ending. It really portrays what I think the characters go through in the game when they go insane. Great fanfic for a great game.

Ooh, nice short story. A little creepy, those bone thieves bother me, but reading Eternal Darkness stuff I'm looking for kind of creepy.

Wow. That perfection at it's peak. Definately. That is one of the best stories I have EVER read. PLEASE write again! *in awe of your awesome writing skillzors*