|Reviews for Breaking the Dogs|
| Sailor GaOn Donut chapter 1 . 11/27/2011
| SupernaturalGeek chapter 1 . 11/24/2009
That was incredibly intense and almost heartbreaking.
I am a new convert to 'Full Metal Alchemist' so I'm only partway into it and have yet to see much Roy/Maes interaction. It did however feel in character, from what I do know of them, and their friendship was really touching. I'm now looking forward to seeing more of it as I continue to watch the episodes..
The story was very well written too and drew me in completely, whilst also managing to make me laugh despite the angst. Maes's struggle to find the door key and keep Roy from hitting the ground headfirst is just one example..
Great job :)
| Buscadora chapter 1 . 6/8/2008
It's brilliant. I liked the way you've written your story, it gives deepness to the characters.
And... Roy is lucky to have Hughes with him.
| BAFFDWTWFMAfan chapter 1 . 9/13/2007
Damn... Stunning. Beautiful. I've read through it twice and want to read it again. Definitely going on my fav stories list. Thanks so much for sharing!
| Heathenesque chapter 1 . 8/4/2006
I found this and your other story "Watching in Silence" through the LJ comm, Central Library, an FMA fic rec journal. What a delightful treasure to find someone who loves the Mustang/Hughes dynamic as much as I do. And your writing is a pleasure. Now I'm off to snoop around and see what else you have buried in this site.
| Roaming Fool chapter 1 . 7/16/2006
Again, I like the concept. Roy Mustang -would- get drunk after Ishbal, we saw him do it after shooting the Doctors Rockbell.
There are a few things I would do differently, stylistically, if I had written this. The internal monolouges, where Hughes is thinking that he doesn't really want to watch Mustang in pain, or when Mustang is mumbling to himself, I would have left outside the parenthesis and italics. I thought it would have been a little better if we and Hughes had actually heard Mustang mumbling the words as dialouge. Nor would I have broken up the second to last sentence the way you did; it has the effect of making it choppy. However, your meanings are clear, so do what you like with the suggestion.
The one thing that wasn't quite clear, however. Was Mustang drunk before he showed up to the bar, or did two drinks really put him under the table?
| Edward Mustang chapter 1 . 1/18/2006
Wonderful writing. I actually got caught up in the story and got sad when I read 'defective Mustang'
| cool-kitsune chapter 1 . 9/15/2005
That was... beautiful...
| simplewin chapter 1 . 8/28/2005
Heartwrenching story. The sincerity of their friensdhip is very well described, and I don't think the angst was overdone. Very, very good job.
| luvin aoshi chapter 1 . 7/20/2005
That was wonderfully, heartachingly written, and a good portrayal of the effect that Ishbal had on Roy.
| Karmaseth chapter 1 . 4/7/2005
I liked. It was descriptive, but not so much that it gave me a headache reading it. I can't find anything to complain about.
| greyr chapter 1 . 2/15/2005
Brilliant. I love the retelling and the last few paragraphs especially. You got the emotions and characters down so well... wonderful work. Do keep it coming.
| Henrika chapter 1 . 1/21/2005
Wow...just wow. Very introspective. Excellent look at their friendship and Roy after Ishval. Keep writing!
| animedragongirl chapter 1 . 12/26/2004
Very good. You have a real talent for writing.
| Jintachi chapter 1 . 11/2/2004
Poor Roy... sniffles He's had it rough...not to mention poor Maes. He's a good friend tho', ne? Too bad he had to DIE... cries
Anys...great story, like always!