Reviews for Third Chances
borg rabbit chapter 1 . 11/9/2004
They continued so in fact, so changing from fiancées to passionate lovers

There are a few places where words are used redundantly. The second 'so' could have been left out, making an easier, more interesting read. Please continue the story. Maybe Ranma remembers more than he let on, but is too concerned for her safety for the reasons, explained. Nabiki's honor needs protection though.

Ciao,

Wes
Majin83 chapter 1 . 11/9/2004
When i first saw the title of this fic, i thought it would be a spinoff of Ranma: take 2. I read it though and can say this...PLEASE CONTINUE!

will nabiki try and hide it for as long as possible? what will she do?

Ahh, so many possibilities with the ice queen...looking forwards to the next chapter...
Saki Xiashang chapter 1 . 11/8/2004
I would like to point a few things out...

First of all this is fanfiction... Thus... WIthin reason the author has artistic liscense...

Second of all... Ranma 1/2 was written and set during the 80s thus its hard to get an accurate view on the culture of Nerima being a fictional district in the first place (Anyone notice that Nuku Nuku is also in Nerima?)...

Third... Though this is personal opinion... And the author may or may not share this opinion but I do not believe Nabiki is heartless... Petty, a little cruel and ruthless yes... heartless? No I see that as a front but that is my choice... She doesn;t seem the abortion type... thats just personal opinion...

Fourthly... Fanfiction itself has to alter the characters in SOME way... because otherwise you cannot get a different story than the one Takahashi wrote... Making the differences small but with a large impact is what makes fanfiction entertaining... So take your time and explore ideas... its all in good fun...
Lone Templar chapter 1 . 11/8/2004
Oh, this is a good one! I love it! Keep up the good work.
Karibanu chapter 1 . 11/8/2004
The pregnancy is a non-issue: this is Japan, she gets an abortion, sticks up a little statue, end of issue; anything more isn't at all realistic. The emotional side is what you need to be working on, the fact it was their first time, how they deal with guilt about it. You're going to have to work to get any originality out of the plot, though.
Tai Khan chapter 1 . 11/8/2004
Y'know, I'm not saying that Nabiki should be overjoyed that she's pregnant with Ranma's child, but...

Just once, I'd like see a fic where she DOESN'T consider pregnancy and a possible marriage to Ranma as a fate worse than death. Or a fic where she's convinced that Ranma and Akane love each other, despite their behavior (and a complete lack of trust, which is the very basis of love).
dogbertcarroll chapter 1 . 11/8/2004
Hm how about this one containing the Ranma who

died/vanished in your other fic?

Actually doesn't remember anything about him and

Nabiki but did sleep with her because he forgot

his act while drunk and treated her like he

did that one night?
borg rabbit chapter 1 . 11/7/2004
Nice start, a few confusing typos.

had been snow and eventful (slow and uneventful?)

secret there founds it way to the open (finds?)
old fool chapter 1 . 11/7/2004
Cool story, its a great foundation for a longer story. I hope it is anyway. Well, i hope to see you update soon.
Black Element chapter 1 . 11/7/2004
Hm, well I did initially though ranma was a but ooc but the explaination you put in does make it sensible for him to act like that. One thing though, you can immediately tell nabiki's *pregnant* just with the first part of the story. Hm as to continue the story, First thing i'd imagine anyone who just found out they were pregnant would be to either tell somebody or in nabiki's case tries to hide it off, not that that would last very long and someone would find out anyway. Being the reasonable person she is i'd say she would go to dr. tofu and try and find some advice from the good doctor and on how to tell Ranma. After all, she now has to look after another life besides her owns. Looking foward to the next chapter!
dennisud chapter 1 . 11/7/2004
Well the first part of this was very similar to a R/A fic I've read, as well as An R/K story as well.

I think your doing well to set the founatiion here of this story.

Now what will she do, keep the kid, havd an abortion or have it adopted, plus the whole honor thing has to come into play as well.

Either way Make sure Nabs isn't killed and I highly await the scene where she tells Ranma what Really happened!

Or, maybe he thinks it's a really hot dream...until she tells him it was true!

Finally what will all the fince's do, especially Akane!

dennisud
ranma hibiki chapter 1 . 11/7/2004
SWEt! update soon, i cant wait to see what happens to nabiki and ranma :D
Nutty AL chapter 1 . 11/7/2004
whoa!... Nabiki gotten knocked up on frist try! Is she is going to tell Ranma or bear the bady alone for rest of her life. like my mom. I only hope that i can see where is FF is going. I prays that's I'm right.. Update ASAP!
Wonderbee31 chapter 1 . 11/7/2004
Whew, this was an intense chapter to start out with. Looks like Nabiki's in trouble, in more ways than one. I think she knows that if Ranma knew waht really happened, he'd drop Akane in a minute. For him, honor is his whole life, and now, her honor is inextricably tied to his. Ranma will always do the right thing, even if it causes him pain. Looking forward to how Nabiki handles this, as well as how Ranma does as well.
Silverscale chapter 1 . 11/7/2004
Wow... keep updating.
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