|Reviews for The Quest to be a Master|
| dedshadow chapter 2 . 8/21/2005
(pokes fic) Heylow~!
| The Gemini Sage chapter 2 . 12/6/2004
Okay, you've got a goodthing going here. You have good ideas and good concepts. The problem is your, er, dialogue. When someone speaks, there heeds to be a new paragraph, no matter what. Also, you're leaving out some commas. for instance, (example) instead of James said "Ha" or "Ha" said James, put, "Ha," said James. Other than that, it's pretty good, if a bit short and low on a few details. Keep going!
| Psionicnemesis chapter 2 . 12/5/2004
its James going on a journey to Zarith with lavitar
I see promise in this story
I'll be watching for an update