|Reviews for Past and Future Town|
| Clois Fanatic chapter 32 . 11/10/2009
Umm...O-kaay. Just read the entire story up to the last 3 chapter updates, and besides being deeply disturbed and put off by the Lois and Lex sex (GAG to that, by the way), I find Lois and Clark at this moment to be unrecognizable, as far as characters go.
I'll explain why I feel this way now. This story is supposedly set in the Smallville universe, with Lois barely knowing Clark. So what she never lived with him and his parents? Or went to school with him and Chloe? You were a little vague about this in your backstory summary.
Also in that same summary at the beginning of the story you stated that your Lex Luthor is the Luthor from the comics. Okay that fine, but you never sttd clearly or otherwise what version of Clark and Lois that you are writing because I can't clearly see it in your story.
This is what I got about Clois' character after reading your story so far:
Lois - Is looking for a hero and security, since Superman is no longer around, and the person that she chooses to get this from is...Lex Luthor...Superman's enemy.
This just makes me say HUH? I mean where is the logic in that? This one act of Lois makes her seem just like Lana, because that is what Lana did she was mad at Clark and looking for comfort, so she went to Lex. Lois is basically mad at Superman so she does the same thing essentially. When Clark finds this out I think it will make Lois go down in his eyes, just like it did with Lana. Things will never be the same, I mean how can it be, 2 women in his life chose to sleep with Lex Luthor when things got hard. Lana betrayed Clark, while Lois betrayed Superman. The parrallells are disturbing. I don't know if you meant to write it that way but that is the way that it is presenting itself(at least to me). I don't know if I can like a Lois that exhibits Lana behavior.
Now onto Clark/Superman...
Clark- in this story is a real big disappoinment. He doesn't exhibit any of the characteristics that make him a hero. His attitude is basically that he was tired of Lois liking Superman and not Clark Kent, so he decides to just stop being Superman until Lois wants Clark. And again...HUH?
Clark is basically punishing the whole world because of a woman! I mean come on that is so dumb! And if that wasn't bad enough, when his master plan didn't work, he basically starts a relationship with the first woman to show interest in his Clark Kent persona, and is calling it love. If this was the case, and he really found love with Rebecca, why is he still punishing the world by refusing to be Superman anymore. I'll tell you why because he is still punishing Lois and is just using Rebecca to run away from his feelings and avoid facing reality. Clark's handling of the Lois rescue, that led to the death of Sidney was just heartbreaking. To see Superman let someone die for no reason other than selfishness was just so upsetting. I mean it's one thing to be a flawed Hero, but a whole other to be cruel. He didn't even try to save Sidney. I don't care if he was a bad guy, his death was senseless and undeserved. He died trying to save Lois, something that Clark could have done easily. He should have just saved both of them because he was the one that put the live wire in the room, so it was his responsiblity to make sure that it doesn't hurt anyone. Superman would have made sure.
To summarize, I find myself not caring for either Lois or Clark right now. They have both currently earned nothing but my contemp. They are not characters that I want to root for, at this point in the story. In fact the story seems to be very Lex Luthor sympathetic to be honest. Which is also something else that I don't care for when reading a Clois fanfic.
If Clois do find their way together, their recent actions will always be there between them.
Especially Lois' actions, because her stupid mistake will have far reaching future consequences, causing the most damage.
Lois sleeping with Lex Luthor, is going to be a weapon that Lex will use repeatedly against both Clark and his Superman persona. Lex is going to taunt both personalities with this knowledge repeatedly, because that is the type of person he is. He will also throw it in Lois' face everytime she tries to write a story about him and his current criminal actions. I wouldn't even be surprised if he used it as a way to damage her creditbility with futures stories down the line.
Now don't get me wrong Clark causing a death will always haunt him as well, but once he wakes up and acknowledge his actions as reprehensible, he will spend the rest of his life trying to make up for that one act, because that is the type of person that Superman is, or is suppose to be.
So sorry for the long review, but these are my thoughts and questions about the story so far. And while I do have my doubts how Clois can end up together, I must admit that I am curious to see how you pull it all together. So I will continue to read for now, at least until I can't stand it any more.
Although anymore chapters like Ch 30, may be a deal breaker, just the thought makes me nauseous!
| Drew April chapter 30 . 11/9/2009
ok that was totally not what I expected, now I'm really disgusted. I found your story very interesting but this lex and lois "union" made me nauseous, and I'm not exaggerating. it was truly and absolutely disgusting.
your story was really great til this chapter, I'm disappointed
| IceQueen825 chapter 31 . 11/9/2009
I felt the need to say more once I thought about what happened these last few chapters...
Thank goodness you are having Lois recognize that what she did was wrong. PLEASE do not have her sleep with him again, I don't think Lois would make that mistake again.
As I said in the last review, Clark needs to be 'drowning in a shame spiral over his behavior!' I think you have the perfect vehicle for this in the dreams he has been having that are waking him up in the middle of the night. We need to see some really heavy guilt and turmoil. Something needs to knock some sense into him and bring him back to reality. Pain and heartache needs to be happening.
A big knock down, drag out seems to be in order for Clark and Lois, but not at work, something private where they can both really say what needs to be said.
Lex telling him what happened with Lois seems right around the corner, and I just can't see anything other than Clark hitting the roof over it. Of course, it is none of Clark's business, but that won't stop him from letting Lois know he is very disappointed in her. He has this whole self-righteous thing going right now just because she had any kind of association with Lex at all, it is just screaming for a nasty fight.
I want Lois to find out now who Superman really is. She can't really fight back at Clark when he hits the roof over Lex without knowing that he has all but abandoned his Superman persona. His behavior is so much worse than hers at this point, but she doesn't know it. Right now Clark is not putting his all into his work, which doesn't compare to the Lex thing. Or perhaps Lois is a little more aware of what Clark was trying to pull with that celebration of their partnership? And calls him on his relationship with Rebecca?
No more from me until the next chapters. :-)
| ClarkCanDoBetterandLoisSUCKS chapter 32 . 11/9/2009
Lois was such a tramp and whore for sleeping with the EVIL Lex Luthor.
Then she was such a b*tch to Clark for getting made with her, after knowing his history with Lex from Smallville.
I hope Clark tells her that she has no class, and that he never wants to see her again, after he finds out!
In this story Clark just annoys me, But as of now I can't stand Lois. I don't want Clark to even get together with her after what she did!
The Clois in this story has been officially ruined for me, and I no longer could care less if they end up together or not because I won't be reading this anymore!
It's just to upsetting to this Clois fan. :(
| mandrake-o chapter 32 . 11/8/2009
This story fascinates me.
| cloisharley chapter 32 . 11/8/2009
Ok i'll be hoenst chapter 30 left me a little nauseous and worried for lois's sanity! lol but i'm sticking with this story and holding out for the clois.
i really liked the way you told clark's part in the lois saving, it worked really well. i'm glad to get to read it cos that's something i've been wanting to know.
pleased to see that he also called her back and was trying to ask how she was when they got to the office.
oh my goodness did you see how mad clark was at lois dealing with lex (well, Ok you wrote it...lol) he is going to explode when he finds out she slept with him.
Lois is already feeling the badness of that decision so when she actually realises her feelings for clark it's gonna be a whole lot worse.
this story really has a fire burning under it, but i'm holding on to this bare knuckle clois story
| bigvillir001 chapter 32 . 11/8/2009
ok this is just wrong there is no trust no friendship and Lois and and clark are stupid and blind i cant really say this is a clois story it started that way but its just gotten to be a pain i reall hope you read the feedback on these last chater because changes need to be made to fix this Clois trouble
| Pem21 chapter 32 . 11/8/2009
This chapter proves how much I have no empathy or warmth towards Clark. His concern for Lois's wellbeing is a little too late in my opinion and then he asks Lois to help cover for him with Rebecca? My main issue with Clark's sudden worry and protectiveness over Lois is how false it seems; how there seems to be no sense of guilt or sense of being ashamed for his actions in the previous chapter; how he took the cowardly way out and didn't seem to care about sticking around after Lois got out of the building, to let her know that she had a friend who was worried about her. In the end, Clark's motivations and concerns while they seemingly appear to be about Lois are all about Rebecca and maintaining his relationship with her.
I hope you will redeem Clark; have start feeling some guilt about his behavior and understanding why he took on the role of Superman. Because right now? Clark is anything but super.
| IceQueen825 chapter 32 . 11/8/2009
Thank you for not having Lois thinking what she did with Lex was okay!
Clark is an A**
I think he needs to be feeling some more guilt; he needs to be drowning in a shame spiral over his behavior! Use these dreams he is having to cause him some real guilt and inner turmoil. HE NEEDS TO SUFFER.
The fact that he let Sidney die just to stay in the shadows! CLARK put that wire in the room, it is his fault that Sidney died! Sidney wasn't leaving without Lois, if he had left he would have lived, he stayed to get her out...he died trying to save her. Evil or not, Superman doesn't make those calls, he lets the law handle the punishment.
It is horrible how far from Superman Clark really is.
Too little too late with that phone call, and getting upset with Lois for talking to Lex, he really has no right. Clark needs a serious wake-up call where his behavior is concerned, both as Clark and as Superman.
I really think that this Lex thing is the perfect reason for him to finally show that passion that is in him and has been missing, GO HAVE IT OUT WITH LOIS! Instead of sitting there and saying two things and then walking away with your tail between your legs when Lois fights back...show that you care, make her understand why you're so scared for her. Show her the kind of man he can be, the kind of guy she would want to be with!
I think a blow out is order, but Clark needs to man up and stand his ground, not walk away when Lois is being Lois.
| mstl chapter 1 . 11/8/2009
Good start !
| anon chapter 32 . 11/8/2009
keep at it
| JustBNMe chapter 32 . 11/8/2009
You know after reading this last chapter I think it is obvious that Lex is up to something. He deliberately brought those papers to Lois so that Clark would know that Lois has been associating with him.
He has something planned and Lois, like a big idiot has fallen right into his trap! I have always found it so ironic that a woman who is supposed to be so independent, in the end only really takes risk because she expects someone (Superman) to save her, and when Superman isn't available she turns to Lex Luthor?
I'm sorry but that is just a bull crap excuse for her behavior! Superman wasn't available, and that's why I did it! *rolls eyes* This was won of Lois' major airhead moments, one that I hope she never forgets, especially when she is writing a story in the future about how Lex Luthor has killed another person! The Lois in this story has one major flaw, she plays at being independent, but in reality is just looking for a hero just like everyone else. Only in Lois' case it makes her a little stupid (ie, sleeping with Lex).
Now for Clark, is he so lonely that he would just use the first woman that is nice to him and shows him a little attention, and then call it love? Are you kidding me! He's stupid too!
Clark is acting like such a pansy wuss in this story! I cannot believe his irresponsible behavior in saving Lois. His stubborness led to a death! Does he show any remorse? No he rationalizes it away as it being the victims fault because he should have just left with everyone else! Are you kidding me! This is not Superman! This is the behavior of one of the criminals he used to stop. Their rationalization was that it wasn't their fault that someone DIED as of a result of their actions, as a matter of fact they barely give it much thought, Just like Clark did AFTER HE MADE HIMSELF FEEL BETTER ABOUT IT BY SAYING IT WAS THE VICTIMS FAULT BECAUSE HE DIDN'T LEAVE! Again the Clark in this story IS NOT SUPERMAN!
He wants Lois to notice him, and like him for being Clark, not Superman, but he still doesn't show her his real self (which is a combination or both personalities!), he just wusses out and expects Lois to have the ability to read minds. If Lois had that ability she would know what Lex Luthor was up to already, and not been so stupid to screw him!
Speaking of Lois screwing Lex, I personally can't wait for it to come out, which it will because Lex Luthor is not going to be able to resist telling Clark or Superman about it and gloating. I wonder if finding that out will be the final straw for Clark, and change his perspective of Lois to the point where he takes the blinders off that he has about her (and for the moment ONLY) kills (or at least tries to) any feelings that he has for her. To the point where he breaks his Clark kent identity and not care what Lois thinks or sees, this coupled with Clark viewing Lois with a touch of disgust would I imagine lead to one heck of a blowout, ending with Lois realizing that Clark is really Superman, and that the way he saved her that night, led to a man's death, and to her sleeping with Lex. I think that this is what Lois will try to use as a excuse to justify her actions.
Bottomline at the moment to me, both Lois and Clark are big selfish, stupid IDIOTS! (With Lois being nasty as well, I'm sorry but her sleeping with Lex Luthor was just so...EW! **shudders in revulsion**)
| IceQueen825 chapter 24 . 11/7/2009
I'm sad about the direction this story has taken, but I've been through some sad wild rides in some of these stories, so I will stick it out with you! I have faith that the end payoff will be worth the discomfort of this part of the story.
I will say about the Lois and Clark in this story...I'm terrible disappointed in Clark, a little in Lois.
Clark has all but abandoned half of who he is with ignoring Superman. He basically tried to trick Lois into going on a date and got upset when she acted just like LOIS instead of catching on to what he was up to and swooning. She doesn't see a guy who is passionate and worth getting into a romantic relationship with because he doesn't SHOW her that side. He pushes away the part that she is most attracted to and doesn't let the Superman part out around her. She sees someone who is slacking at work, someone who doesn't give any girl a real chance, why would she want to be with him in any way other than a friend?
Now Clark is with Rebecca, who is totally a Lana clone and couldn't be further from Lois in attitude and temperament.
Lois, the girl he wants, the girl he couldn't stop talking about while on his date with Rebecca, is in trouble and he does what? He saves her in the shadows, and then leaves her there without letting her know that she is NOT ALONE; all to run back to Rebecca and make things up with her. Is Clark letting Lois go more and more because she reminds him of who he really is? Who he is suppose to be?
Now for Lois. I don't really see her being anything other than Lois. I do have a big problem with her sleeping with Lex, but I understand why she did it.
She is attracted to Superman because she sees him as someone who is confident and does something truly amazing, takes great pride and care in what he does, is selfless. etc. Clark is there are a friend, her partner, but she doesn't really see him as someone to depend on because of how flighty he seems to her. Now both of these men have all but abandoned her, Superman is nowhere to be found and Clark is playing games with her and now he is with Rebecca.
So Lois goes through this very traumatic experience and doesn't realize who saved her. She was feeling very alone and scared. Now, if Clark had just stuck around and either shown himself as Superman, or found some reason to go over to her place as Clark and comfort her when he saw something was wrong, things would have turned out differently.
Instead she was by herself and trying to understand what happened, so she went to the one person who would be of help with figuring out what happened...LEX.
In Lex she sees the traits she is attracted to, even if he is evil, she is not looking at that now. She is seeing someone who is trying to help her, who is passionate about finding the truth, and who is willing to be honest with her. She is, of course, blind to what is really going on, but she is living in the moment right now.
Of course, if she doesn't kind of flip out the next day after realizing what is actually did I will be disappointed. I don't find it all that hard to believe that she would give into her baser instincts and sleep with him once, I find it very hard to believe that she would continue on with that behavior.
Looking forward to seeing where you take us next with this one...
| bigvillir001 chapter 30 . 11/7/2009
this is a great story but clark and lois sex with other people just feels wrong edpeaclly one of those people being lex lois must burn clothes and shower about a billion times after you said this was clois and it is but them just being with different people maske me sick and sad hope the come to realize its just wrong :(
| IceQueen825 chapter 30 . 11/7/2009