|Reviews for Clouded Sky|
| fractalman chapter 10 . 10/6/2012
It's been a while since I last read this story...I'd quite forgotten about this chapter
| Tanon chapter 29 . 10/6/2012
'you a bill after the fist segment of the challenge has been completed.' First?
"What do I care for another piece of Johtoan filth?" Cass snorted. "Although you must admit, my acting is superb, isn't it?" I'm guessing you meant Jenny, not Cass? Otherwise I am extremely confused.
| Tanon chapter 26 . 10/6/2012
'aroma therapist' Is actually just one word.
shOULD WE EVEr
Damn you, it's not fully decipherable.
Interesting tournament format, especially where the ideal team is concerned. I'm guessing the last member of the group is going to be a major contender for the prize.
| Tanon chapter 23 . 10/6/2012
So happy you didn't decide to detail another gym journey. Do Tarsix evolve? I guess I'll get my answer before finishing this. Hmm...
| Tanon chapter 21 . 10/6/2012
Sounds like Adolf Hitler won WWII.
| Tanon chapter 17 . 10/6/2012
Well, the past few chapters have been amazing. You really wrote Tobias and Ralph well in this chapter and in the past 2 (for Tobias).
I hope this isn't going to become a standard journey fic, but judging from the past 17 chapters, I really don't see it happening.
Also, I'm going to guess that Jinx will ultimately be responsible for bringing the shield down and stopping the...err...brainwashing that the psychic pokemon of Waytar seem to be performing on their inhabitants. Not brainwashing...but I can't come up with a better term. Arhg.
| Tanon chapter 13 . 10/6/2012
'An enraged Slipstri is one of thegreatest hazards of the high seas,'
Haha. Story over. Now I can move on and read other stuff, right?
I'm not funny. I didn't expect this to happen, although I actually don't see how you're going to keep Timothy alive, unless Timothy is no longer important and the rest of the story is going to focus on Jinx. Now there's a plot twist.
It's also not going to happen.
| Tanon chapter 12 . 10/6/2012
"He deserves and apology. Give him one."
' The fell and impaled themselves in the waters just outside the boundary.' They?
Well, I guess this isn't going to be an issue any longer, but Tobias' treatment of Jinx didn't really seem to match Jinx's reaction to said treatment. I mean, Tobias didn't treat Jinx badly, but he pretty much ignored Jinx, especially for the first two battles. I know he had good reasoning, but he never mentioned it to Jinx, who (as far as I know) can't read minds.
It's the only thing I can fault so far, and it's just a small thing. Tobias is in an interesting situation, isn't he? None of it is even his fault. I also have a feeling that Tobias won't be catching this ship.
| Tanon chapter 9 . 10/6/2012
'When I eventually dragged myself over hear, I was damn near dead' Small typo :)
I'll give a review when I get to the end, but I've still got a bit of reading to go. I'll add any typos I see in chapters though.
| Wolfwhispers chapter 45 . 10/4/2012
Another great chapter. I had some thoughts on subtle mind maipulation towards Accemenla, though I wasn't entirely sure, given her immediate dislike of Tobias and throughout their entire journey. Still the three years of being lost together in Johto should have given them some sort of bond, no matter how small, so I'm eager to see how the psychic type will react with this newfound knowledge. I'm also curious to see if you'll eventually evolve Jynx. I know this started way before Honchrow had even been created and you already had a plan for this story, but given all the recent pokemon and moves I wasn't sure if you would go that route. A giant, flying Dark beast of a pokemon would surely frighten the Pyschics, especially since its new size would give it a physical advantage towards its larger opponents like the Pidgeot we just saw.
| dzk87 chapter 45 . 10/3/2012
YOU HAVE RETURNEEEEEEED. After two years, you made one post, and I thought it might have been your last, but you still continued this!
So, for the actual review. I... actually, this chapter did NOT appeal to me greatly. I love how Clouded Sky toys with everything you, the reader, thinks is real, and reallly makes you wonder what is going on. So, the only part I liked (much), is where he suddenly starts understand Jinx, and where he doesn't even notice Chevron. That said, your battle scenes are GOOD, but... not what I love about this story.
| Guest chapter 26 . 8/18/2012
| Padfoot Arcanine chapter 44 . 8/9/2012
Really liking this story. Very unique and nicely written. Amazing job!
| Eneko95 chapter 6 . 7/7/2012
And the plot continues to fascinate! I like the idea of using Psychic-types as judges, though I have to wonder; why would they lie?
| Eneko95 chapter 4 . 7/7/2012
I'm impressed! It's easy to connect to your characters, and the backstory for Waytar is very interesting indeed. The way you explain basic things like Poke Balls and the dex is also fascinating, and makes me think that this is some sort of medieval AU or something.
Ok, now for some criticism. In the third-to-last paragraph, Tobias' name should not have a "the" before it; there's only one of him, after all. Also, I noticed that in chapters one through three, you don't capitalize the Pokemon names (or possibly even the word), but here you do. I suggest you pick one and stick with it.
I'm glad I decided to look this up on TV Tropes. Hope my review is helpful!