|Reviews for Clouded Sky|
| Zokolov chapter 1 . 4/15/2013
Wow, your writing style, I must say, is excellent, descriptive and sets things up for an air of mystery. You also nicely give us just enough info while still avoiding excess info dumps about the nature of guides and about this new region of yours. The plot, or what we saw so far of it, looks quite interesting and original, too. Haven't seen enough Tobias to evaluate him, but he's definitely not a Marty Stu and you really let us sympathize with him straight from the beginning.
The only minor gripe I have is with the names, "Damien Darksand" and "Mary Moonflower" are rather... well, you know. Then again, it's thematically appropriate. I'm on the fence about these original Pokémon that appeared here, but they do seem more interesting than in the average fic, so it's not really a con.
So, all in all, I like it, particularly the style of the prose, and will definitely be keeping an eye on this story. Loved the cliffhanger here, you do seem to know exactly where to end things.
| Ein Storm chapter 8 . 3/27/2013
| Kippe chapter 47 . 2/25/2013
This... this was a work of art. Seriously, it's the best story that I've read in a long time. Sure, it could definitely use some proofreading and there were a couple continuity errors (like when Frostdown all of a sudden became Snowpoint) but overall the plot was great. It's a shame that you won't be writing the other two in the series; I'd definitely be interested in reading them. Ah well, this story was great anyway and now I suppose I'll have to read The Ninetales' Curse.
Also, in chapter 21, I noticed when Marie was telling Tobias about her encounter with Raikou, the way she told it wasn't really the way a person would talk. Maybe if it were her writing it down in a journal or something, but I honestly felt like the way it was written was just a little awkward. Also, was Alex a child of one of the Psychic Temple acolytes? I thought I noticed something that hinted towards it, but I might have been mistaken (I was a little sick when I read the story, and I read the whole thing in three days. Don't give me that look, it was good.)
Anyway, just overall a good story. I'll have to go check out some of your other fics now, I guess. :D
| Cedric Bale chapter 47 . 10/30/2012
Has it really been 8 years? Holy crap.
| Teraunce chapter 47 . 10/27/2012
What could have been, shall never be. 5/5 although it leaves me sad.
| Dragonfree chapter 47 . 10/27/2012
Congratulations on finishing the fic! Too bad the other fics won't happen, but the end was very Clouded Sky, so it was a suitable ending to the story.
Aaand now it's my turn to finish my way-too-long-running Pokémon fanfic.
| Waypoint chapter 47 . 10/25/2012
Almost eight years, man. Thanks for coming out of retirement to finish this - even if it ends on a lot of question marks you'll never get around to exclamation-pointing, it's still a tremendous relief to see a very satisfying story like this wrap up. Best of luck on your next project!
| pokeaminal chapter 47 . 10/25/2012
Now what am I supposed to wait for each day? WHY MUST IT END
| Grey Noise chapter 47 . 10/25/2012
Thank you very much for this excellent story. When I first read it several months ago, I didn't expect it to ever be finished, so, first of all, I applaud you for your phenomenal perseverance. It took you eight years to write this story, and that is some real dedication to your craft right there.
I read most of this story some time ago, so i don't remember most of the plot, but I don't remember anything sticking out as badly plotted or as breaking the suspension of disbelief in general. Your characters are all cohesive and mostly believable, although most were rather flat. You could have done with a few more well-rounded personalities.
Your world (and you created an entirely new setting on a continental scale. Ambitious, yet satisfying.) fits into the established setting organically and does everything the plot needs it to, and there's that feeling of a wider world than what is shown about it sometimes. That's a good thing. Don't be afraid to include offhand details, as long as they're used sparingly. I'm not sure how much of this was planned in advance, but the whole story seems very cohesive, so that's good either way.
Finally, you're obviously tired of this storyline after all this time. If you're not interested in what you're writing, chances are readers won't be interested either, so write what you want to. This isn't a job, it's a hobby. Anyway, good luck on your next endeavor. I look forward to it.
| Computerfan chapter 45 . 10/12/2012
This... This is honestly a stunning, sensational fanfic. Oh my god... I've been addicted to it all week, and I can't believe I've finished it. I... I can't even describe how amazing this is, how amazing your characters are and just this is the best Pokemon fanfic ever.
In fact, I think I'm going to reread it all right now. I wish I'd followed this from the start so I could review every chapter as I went on but unfortunately I'm eight years late for that. And now I'm really hoping its not too long before you next update cause I'm dying to know what happens next.
Igneous is an amazingly thought out pokemon, in fact they all are. Chevron is adorable, I hate yet love Tarsix (I'm sorry after 45 chapters I still can not remember how her name is spelled) and was cheering when she attacked the Gyarados... Jinx is just annoying yet awesome too. Gah I only finished reading ten minutes ago yet I'm so impatient for another update.
There's so much more I could say about this story.. The olivine lighthouse twist completely threw me, and I love how you made team rocket an actual threat even if it didn't end up an important part of the story. The last two chapters were like a movie, and I'm amazed at how you managed to make the various battles flow together...
I only wish that I remembered who half the characters were. I'm thinking I should have remembered Jenny, Damian and this Kevin from before but I honestly don't... I may find our when I start rereading I guess.
| Teraunce chapter 45 . 10/9/2012
The world isn't destroyed just yet. still an awesome chapter however.
| fractalman chapter 23 . 10/7/2012
" He had found nothing unusual on such trips, save for one very irate Gyrados that seemed intent on killing him for some reason. Tobias had made sure not to venture into its territory after their first encounter."
| fractalman chapter 10 . 10/6/2012
It's been a while since I last read this story...I'd quite forgotten about this chapter
| Tanon chapter 29 . 10/6/2012
'you a bill after the fist segment of the challenge has been completed.' First?
"What do I care for another piece of Johtoan filth?" Cass snorted. "Although you must admit, my acting is superb, isn't it?" I'm guessing you meant Jenny, not Cass? Otherwise I am extremely confused.
| Tanon chapter 26 . 10/6/2012
'aroma therapist' Is actually just one word.
shOULD WE EVEr
Damn you, it's not fully decipherable.
Interesting tournament format, especially where the ideal team is concerned. I'm guessing the last member of the group is going to be a major contender for the prize.