|Reviews for Torn|
| rikku girl chapter 1 . 2/16/2010
dude, Wat up with the end i mean I thought this was rated T.
u noe wat nvm that. Besids gr8 endin thou it's kinda repated.
gosh y do i keep bein such a critic, hehe lol.
(sry 4 the critisim)
(sry if I can spell that word I just a kid, darnit!)
| Yukibara chapter 5 . 5/27/2007
I like it! Roamntic Tikkus are the best!
| Syco chapter 2 . 4/24/2007
Grate! I allways thought rikku and tidus were ment to be together :D
i loved it
| silly chapter 3 . 8/18/2006
| chappie chapinayuli23 chapter 5 . 2/1/2006
*sighs* the end of such a beautiful story. it was really good. the only thing i really didn't find neccessary (here i go again) was the sex scene at the end. i think that if you had just left it at the part when tidus walked in and found rikku in his old t shirt, it would've made the story sound a whole lot better. it could have been just fine if you had left it there. i mean, don't get me wrong, it was a good ending but perhaps it might have been better if you had just left the rest up to the imagination. ;D i mean, as writers, we're supposed to leave the reader wondering, right? and also it wasn't all that important but i felt a bit bad for paine, even tho she wasn't even in the story for that long, and that maybe she could've had a small happy ending herself instead of staying in her home by herself. well, it wasn't all that important but it may have improved the story a bit. but in the end, it was a great story, so don't worry. i really enjoyed it, and by the looks of it, a lot of other people did as well. Good job!
sorry to write so much,
| chappie chapinayuli23 chapter 4 . 2/1/2006
finally we get to the juicier stuff! but gr rikku shoulda socked yuna back. i know i would've. but i'm just wonderin why yuna is so mad if she kissed another guy other than her boyfriend herself. wut a hypocrite!
lady needs a taste of her own medicine!
| chappie chapinayuli23 chapter 3 . 2/1/2006
oh wow, so close! lol i was on the edge of my seat the entire time. *sighs* how exciting. i gotta hand it to you, i really liked that chapter, especially when rikku and tidus were acting all weird around paine. this is getting a lot better. i can already see how this is going to end...
| chappie chapinayuli23 chapter 2 . 1/31/2006
wow you seem to really cut to the chase do you? well it was a bit rushed for my taste, but i know how you feel, wanting to get to the juiciest part of the story first, so i don't blame you. another thing that kinda bothered me is that you seemed to rush the love scene a lot when you should have been putting in feelings and emotions instead of details. it was the climax for this chapter so it should have been more slowed down. it also seemed as if you couldn't decide whether to keep it safe or put in some more details. well, i've never done a sex scene, but i know it is a bit challenging. it was good for a first time, tho. i'm sorry i didn't mean to criticize in my review. the rest of it was perfect, so the only thing you might need to worry about is your pacing of the story.
| chappie chapinayuli23 chapter 1 . 1/31/2006
omg! poor rikku! i feel so bad for her! ok i know you're going to hook her up with tidus in this story. who cares about yuna goddamnit! lol, sorry yuna lovers. i'll try and be more respectful. anyways you did a pretty good job on the first chapter. you definitely caught my interest, and i'll follow thru til the end. i mean, as long as it's good. so keep it exciting!
| Tikku Fan chapter 5 . 11/12/2005
That was beautiful. I love happy ending.
| H Y u n i k o chapter 4 . 9/3/2005
Oopz...sorry, i think i reviewed the wrong story...
i'm very very very sorry... i read the wrong sammury!
please forgive me.
| H Y u n i k o chapter 5 . 9/3/2005
I thought you said there was some RikkuxGippal here.
sigh...what a waste, i love RikkuxGippla!
| ChErRyBlOsSoMs-FlOwErOfDeAtH chapter 5 . 8/10/2005
THAT WAS SO BEAUTIFUL!
| Radical Ecstasy chapter 4 . 8/9/2005
Yet another great chapter! I'll read the next one in a while, since people apperently want me to come over... I hope the next one isnt the last!
| Radical Ecstasy chapter 2 . 8/9/2005
*giggles* Just oh dear! *keeps reading*