Reviews for Destiny of a Dragon Warrior
blasterdog chapter 8 . 8/18/2010
this is amazing the whole thing is great you have to continue
Erora chapter 8 . 11/6/2009
OMG! I love it! Your story is really good. It's getting predictable though. Spice things up some. Good luck!
Erora chapter 4 . 11/5/2009
god of all chapter 8 . 7/3/2009
Great chapter and story so fair pleaces continue the story soon.
Gravity The Wizard chapter 1 . 6/8/2009
Please Continue Someday!
TheSlain chapter 4 . 7/24/2008
While I must admit this story has potential, you're going to need to refine your writing style. The use of the word "well" is over done to the Nth degree and becomes annoying very quickly, a good example of this is when Sarutobi and Jiraiyastart talking in this chapter, Sarutobi opens his first senetence with the word "well" and so does Jiraiya, grammaticly correct(I'm not entirely sure about that but I have graduated highschool) it is as mentioned above, annoying. its like lisyening to a badly written play. Another thing is actually how you're wording sentences, "is currently" would be considered grammaticly incorrect because it's redundant, just in case you don't know what redundancy is I'll give a short explanation. it's when you write a sentence or fragment that repeats that same idea more then once without a period in between the two. for something using that phrase to be grammaticly correct you would have to use a word that is in the past tense and then a word that is in the present tense, such as "was currently". I think I've babbled on long anough and gotten my point across, teh general idea? Work. On. Your. Grammar. I do like this fiction, just needs a little work, otherwise you have a great thing going, keep at it.
Amelia chapter 2 . 7/18/2008
Why was the second half of this chapter bolded and underlined?
wert1990 chapter 7 . 4/12/2008
please continue this storry
panther73110 chapter 8 . 3/11/2008
Are you going to finish this story?
momocolady chapter 8 . 2/11/2008
good story
Blackfang1983 chapter 8 . 1/9/2008
i wish u would update this story it's kick ass
Call0013 chapter 8 . 12/16/2007
narutofreakjax chapter 8 . 10/7/2007
wow great story i love it but there are a couple of mistakes. no this is not a flame. these are just common mistakes. ok. you might want to read your story out loud word for word to yourself because there are quite a few grammer mistakes there. sometimes it's just the word use and sometimes a word is missnig. also shushin no jutsu is NOT what made the fourth hokage famous. the shushin no utsu is a common chunnin lvl jutsu taught to all chunnin ranked ninjas. the jutsu that made the fourth hokage known as konoha's yellow flash is called the flying thunder god jutsu. it works along with kunai knives that have a seal. the jutsu needs a seal to work. the jutsu although by far one of the most powerful ones ever created required minimal chakra meaning a genin could do the jutsu once he learned how to activate the seal. if you want i'll gladly beta read for you. i've done it before and i usually return the chapters the day that i get them. i don't change any of the story all i fix are the gramatical errors. you can find my email on my account garthjax
bobbetter chapter 8 . 9/27/2007
please update! D: *sobs*
ApocSM chapter 8 . 8/6/2007
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