|Reviews for Zero G|
| Not A Fan chapter 13 . 5/2
Wow. This story is garbage. It's well written enough. You're obviously talented. Good for you. But the story... oh boy. Is this really the best you've done to warrant all these reviews (I assume it is as it's the last fic you abandoned)? Why? 13 chapters in and there's no semblance of a plot. One of the reasons for that is that your characters are fucking retarded - Inuyasha is just an unlikable loser/psychopaths and Kagome is a useless idiot with no agency (and yes, I'm aware that Inuyasha is a mole for the cops, I don't give a shit). Time and again she briefly entertains the suspicion that Inuyasha is a murderer... before it flies away for no reason, only to return for the next time Kagome grows a brain for like a few seconds. It's such poor plotting and tension, rendering the entire story absurdly contrived. No one would ever act this way after getting kidnapped. Your readers even complained about this - which you lampshaded in your stupid fucknews where you just lowkey attack your readers and show off - and all you can say to address these very real problems are roll your eyes and brush them off, then rant with your usual pretentious drivel (we get it, you're witty; no need to remind us constantly; even your characters talk like you so there's no escaping your "humor"). Again, they're real problems. Holy shit Kagome literally SAW someone dying in a bar last chapter with Inuyasha STANDING RIGHT THERE! IN A DISGUISE NO LESS! And now she's randomly waxing philosophical about proverbs? Were you high? Were you reading a book of sayings and just HAD to shoehorn all the cool quotes on us? I don't dispute that a character could be really into proverbs, but both of them? Yeah, no thanks. And oh my god spare us with this whole "I'm Kagome and I've never done anything with my life woe is me!". Um... she fucking jumpstarted the "plot" with the "miracle cream" she supposedly invented. Why is this never brought up again? And why do we se ZERO evidence that Kagome is this chemical beauty savant? Did you just have a concept for a story and then did nothing with it after chapter one? Damn. Fine, I get the hype for you based on your writing skills alone. Must be nice growing up in "grammar school" I guess. But your plotting is trash I'm sorry. Even Dead Famous was unbearable. Inuyasha is a world renowned "superstar" with more money than Microsoft... but all he does is fight MMA style? He doesnt even act? Or sing? Or... anything? Jesus Christ that's lame. Another cool concept that's wasted on you.
| Guest chapter 8 . 12/7/2020
Possibly one of the realest and most moving chapters in the story. The ending scene is powerful, especially since we’re in the dark on so many puzzle pieces. The tunnel feels like an obvious metaphor... but I won’t bet on it — this is just fanfiction after all :)
| Guest chapter 7 . 12/7/2020
I think he’s so successful at getting away with things because he mixes truth and lies so effectively... for the things we THINK he’d care about (Kikyo), he’s fairly honest. And for everything else, he answers every difficult question with one of his own (why he saved Kagome). Probably because he doesn’t know either. Or because he still has a heart under all of that murder-y exterior and doesn’t want to admit it. Either way — makes for an amazing storytelling experience!
| Guest chapter 6 . 12/5/2020
Of all of the chapters of this fic, this one was pretty tame (no crazy twists here!) but somehow it’s one of my favorites. I like that we see only what Inuyasha wants us to see - we are stuck at his surface - BUT we know there’s so much more underneath that he has kept hidden from everyone. He doesn’t want to wear his heart on his sleeve but it’s still there, secretly beating away... he hides his empathy for everything Kagome’s going through with a veneer of blitheness. That’s what makes this story so compelling — we want to get to the part where he reveals his true self to her. We know what’s for show but we don’t know what’s for real and we’re compelling to keep reading until we find it...
| ushmie chapter 5 . 12/3/2020
Inuyasha’s quick thinking gets him out of all kinds of tight spots... he’s quite the con man, answering one question with another! I can see a tiny plot hole here since Kagome’s family and friends knew about ZeroG being a miracle cream and knew the research went to Kagome and Kikyo — so they’d also see a red flag when Kikyo started marketing it as her own. But something like that is easily overlooked (or even patched over with a side comment later on). I think my favorite part was their argument over Kikyo — Kagome’s inherent goodness really shines and you can just tell that Inuyasha needs that in his life.
| Guest chapter 4 . 12/3/2020
Gosh this took us in so many directions! From the terrifyingly intense Kikyo kiss, to the apple & knife scene, to the bathroom negotiations, and then of course ... the escape! I laughed, gasped, tensed up, and stressed out from one moment to the next. It was a riot... and I loved it.
| Guest chapter 3 . 8/15/2020
Let the plot twists begin! I especially enjoy Naraku’s casual evilness in this story. He’s just a regular old mob boss, going about his business, managing unruly employees, keeping clients happy...
I know in some Author’s Note somewhere you said something about us readers being “subjected” to your stories’ many twists and tangles. I see it more like being “granted access”. What would life be like without any Rozefire humor in it?
| Guest chapter 2 . 8/15/2020
“Struggles with normal conversation” — most accurate description of Inuyasha. The interactions between Inuaysha and Kagome are always my favorites. Something about that dialogue feels so real, so convincing. I hope you’re out there writing books in the real world now. I would read anything and everything you publish.
| Guest chapter 1 . 6/20/2020
You know it’s going to be a good story when the first scene just GETS you. And let me tell you... this definitely captured my attention. Holy crap. You are objectively a fantastic writer.
Let’s go in order, shall we? First - curl up and dye? So hilarious. So punny. AND SO TYPICAL OF HAIR SALONS! At this point, I knew I liked the story. But I had no idea what a diamond I had found.
Next - the little government propaganda song lyric snippets? Incredible! Did you come up with those yourself? Are they from something else? How are you writer people so talented.
Then - the whole bike thing. She recognized him but had never seen him? Interesting... She had said she was indebted to him, but only as a social convention thing? Very interesting... AND THEN INIYASHA KILLS HER?! Also quite interesting. To say the least. Dun dun dun!
And lastly, this gem - her final passing thought is that she’ll be found by a hobo on a Thursday in a dumpster. So funny. So completely and absolutely hilarious.
Basically, I love this. You’re So. Freaking. Amazing.
| Joydignity chapter 20 . 1/22/2020
Nice story.. it got me hook and then leaves in hanging...in any case.. very well written
| Guest chapter 20 . 9/18/2019
Years ago, I used to read your fics as you were updating them. A new story or a new chapter never failed to delight me. From time to time, I will reread a fic. They fill me with nostalgia and remind me of a simpler time in my life. I hope that you are able to continue to write stories and create works of art that inspire and touch others hearts as these fics have inspired me. Part of me hopes you are still writing, even if it’s not FanFiction. Wishing you all the best and thank you for all the lovely stories. You truly are a talented person.
| Guest chapter 20 . 7/8/2019
After every reread I think... hmm, I can probably map out a vague idea of where the plot was headed next! White-haired dude who isn’t IY? Must be Sess! It would be a perfect twist for IY to think he had died in the April Showers but hadn’t really. Sess having a connection to Naraku’s boss? Very likely! Both affiliated with the government thereby giving Kagome an “in”? Possible! Kagome taking down massive governments/orgs with Sess’s help... why not! It happened in Price of Freedom! And then I remember the twists and turns from Dead Famous and realize... nope... the story probably had three totally unique and convoluted twists coming up that I could never guess. Anyway, it’s fun to reread and find clues. I like playing detective.
| InuYume88 chapter 5 . 6/20/2019
I love the fact that you used “lorry” after last chapter’s A/N. Lol.
| FlameDragonHime chapter 20 . 4/14/2019
Aww damn you haven't updated in years :( I really hope you come back! I'm looking forward to it!
| FlameDragonHime chapter 1 . 4/14/2019
CURL UP AND DYE IS A SALON NEAR ME OMG