|Reviews for Harry Potter and the Final Straw|
| Ari chapter 16 . 4/15
I personally would have slapped hermione!
| thonez chapter 7 . 4/9
ah usual shield can't stop a gun bullshit. Your rationalization does not work, just shoot while under invisibility cloak and nobody will know. Or Voldemort could give Enoby a gun and put her under imperius to kill Dumbledore then obliviate her.
| turtle329 chapter 1 . 4/5
Ah, the good ole' days, when nearly every story was completed. Not that all stories these days are left uncompleted, but there are a lot more these days.
| HeX chapter 35 . 3/30
Things I didn't like about this story.
-) 'Hermione's loyalty is the lack of options?' As I remember, Hermione stood with Harry during Fourth year instead of jumping on 'Potter is a cheater' bandwagon. Something Ron failed to do. She was with Harry during Fifth year when half of the school considered him a deranged liar. Once again, she could distance herself from Harry but didn't. As for her worship of authority figures, it didn's stop her from setting Snape on fire when she thought Harry is in danger.
-) Harry's words that 'McGonnagal did a lot for them'. He contradicts himself later by pointing out her favoritism towards Hermione, while ignoring Harry's problems during Second, Fourth and Fifth years. I think Harry could have confronted her about it when she tried to talk about Hermione.
-) Dumbledore not even trying to rethink his strategy with Harry when he sees his approach isn't working. Dumbledore was many things, but he wasn't dumb. It's like he tried his best to alienate Harry instead of trying to make peace with him. In the end he died in a trap a First Year student can think through. After the Battle at the Ministry I kinda hoped to see the better performance from him.
| Lady Nature chapter 11 . 3/25
im glad you chose Luna, she is my favorite female character, I perfer Slash fics but some of the interesting one have found a home on my favorites list.
I Hate Harry/Ginny fics
| fyu chapter 35 . 3/21
| senawario chapter 1 . 3/11
I stopped reading when you said something like "her loyalty is more a lack of options". Reporting an anonymously gifted Firebolt in fear for his life was not a lack of options - it was a choice made for *him*, even though both he and Ron refused to speak to her for weeks/months afterward and she was miserable. Believing in him when the goblet spat out his name was not a lack of options - she could have easily gone with the flow and behaved like Ron and the rest of the Gryffs.
If you want to make it sound like she has no loyalty, you have to start your story earlier than these incidents, or at least the goblet one.
And if you want to make it sound like she is authority-loving, you need to go back even more. She set fire to the most *feared* teacher's robes. In **first** year.
If you ignore these things and write the way you did, it just makes the story look moronic or maybe even makes you look like a moron.
| Slytherin Potter Black chapter 11 . 3/9
just want you to know you got sirius' middle name wrong the fact that people tend to mess up people first/middle names greatly annoys me since all they would have to do is look them up online
| ultimatedragonballzfan chapter 2 . 3/5
Nice chapter. I like how Harry is actually thinking things through. And I completely agree with him on the trust thing.
| Bronze chapter 17 . 3/1
Dumby is so going to be pissed when he realizes that Harry has a new training room that he can bug! Too bad, so sad. Maybe if the old fraud'd come clean with Harry'd do the same with him. Though that'd take more truth serum then any living being could survive. Dumby is only concerned with making sure Harry remains his personal sacrificial lamb. It is for the Greater Good,don't you know?
| Bronze chapter 16 . 2/25
Wow, not that I'm surprised by Hermione's actions. She's had her head in a book for so long that she can't function in the real world. She sees Dumbles as knowing all and never wrong. If that old man is never then why didn't he do anything about the Dursley's when they were abusing and starving Harry? Was that right? Was it the Light side way to do things? These questions are just some she should've asked herself about Dumbles.
| Bronze chapter 15 . 2/24
Draco always depended on the protection of his father and his money. Thus when it was only the family money he was defenseless. It is possible that at some point in his life he was fairly intelligent but it would seem that time has long past.
| Bronze chapter 14 . 2/23
And what's wrong with Hagrid visiting Madam Maxime? Doesn't he deserve a love life too? As to the idea that Dumbles as the leader of the Light side can never be wrong, well that's just plain stupid! Dumbles is a human being and all human beings make mistakes! It's just that some are brave and /or smart enough to admit when they've made a mistake. Dumbles IS NOT ONE OF THEM! To his mind he is not ever be wrong.
| Guest chapter 13 . 2/21
I've always been sure that Snape was truly working for Voldemort regardless of what he said to Dumbledore. Someone like that with his attitude should never be allowed near a child's corpse never mind a living one! Murder, torture and rape are what make a Death Eater and Dumbledore hired not one but two to teach a Hogwarts. The man has no moral compass at all anymore.
| Bronze chapter 12 . 2/21
That wizard is so corrupt HE should be in Azkaban sharing a cell with his pet Death Eater! Dumbledore has known for many years just how bad a teacher Severus Snape is and ignored it! One look at the O.W.L. list would show any and everyone that he's the worst type of teacher! Not to mention the lowest form of life on the planet.