|Reviews for Spin|
| cat-of-luck chapter 14 . 10/8/2013
Oh yeah, one more review. I was just wondering where you base Sakura from. Is she a character to you or is she like yourself? I'm asking because her narration is very different, funny, and refreshing from other writer's attempts at first-person narration. In my opinion, other writers make it seem forced. Like, they write in this way in an "attempt" for the readers to connect with them on a personal level. But it doesn't feel like that. It's more distracting than anything and I find myself clicking out of a story like that.
Yours, however, it's intriguing. I feel like I know Sakura, like I can understand her. Even though I'm different from her, I find that I can connect with her because she feels like a normal person to me. Sounds cliche, but I can't think of another way to describe it. Not some author trying to sound like a character who's trying to sound like a real person. One thing people really like about your story is how Sakura's thought process. Like, in the pool scene, you can feel she's confused and trying to trick herself even though it's her own mind she's tricking. I guess I'm just saying you have a knack for writing realistically and that's one of my favorite things in a story.
| cat-of-luck chapter 10 . 10/8/2013
Leaving a review right now because that sexual relations line ALWAYS gets me! I laugh so loud at that. And I've been wondering what story I read it from and only now I remember it was yours.
| cat-of-luck chapter 1 . 10/8/2013
I read this story a while ago, and I'm re-reading it again now. I have to say, it's one of my favorite stories because despite the unique situations, the story has a sense of realism. Though different from the canon- Sakura, your version of her is very interesting and funny and human. I don't know why only now I'm putting it on my favorites list. I really wish you wrote more stories because you have a unique and interesting writing style.
It's humorous but not forcibly. It's real even with unreal situations. There is a couple grammatical and continuity issues that makes things confusing, but it's something that can be overlooked.
One criticism I have with a lot of stories is that their characters are so plain, so one-dimensional. There's only black and white. Your characters, they're gray; they're dirty; they're dark. And I think that's what makes it so interesting. It wasn't just one person's fault, it's everyone's fault. Stories right now are so divided, the world isn't like that. There's gray; there's blurred lines, and imperfections.
There were certain things I didn't understand when I first read it and reading it a second time did help. So I guess that's my only constructive criticism. However, this story was written so long ago that I'm sure you're aware of that already.
This was really a good story. I just had to leave a review. Usually I don't offer constructive criticism, but I felt your story was really so good that complimenting doesn't really help an author like you grow. My criticism wasn't much anyway.
You just have such great characterization. Really wish there was more of your writing to read. Anyway, thanks for the story!
| LexaStarr chapter 14 . 6/9/2013
| Silly sis D chapter 14 . 4/16/2013
Simply put... Awesome story :)
| aurora0914 chapter 14 . 3/22/2013
WoW. This is... *_*! Gooooooooooooooood Jooooooooob! I loved it, and i loved how Syao never loved Kaho! Cheers!1
| Shubhs chapter 14 . 1/5/2012
"This is where I tie everything up, begging and end, into a perfect little package."
Did you mean beginning? :P
"I'm working right now, so is Kaho, Rika, and Tomoyo. Friday night so only the regulars are here."
so are**. 'are' for more than one person and 'is' for just one person or one collective group.
BTW you mix up your "you're", "your" and "you" pretty often. At least in this fic.
Pretty damn good grammar on a general basis though. I think if you proof-read it once or twice then you could catch where you went wrong or whatever. This is only the last chapter but there were others as well.
Love the way you wrote it. The characterization was damn sexy. :P
| Blue Aidelle chapter 13 . 5/11/2011
This is a good chapter. Congrats!
| Blue Aidelle chapter 10 . 5/11/2011
| Blue Aidelle chapter 9 . 5/11/2011
God. This is sooo good. U are soo good!
| Blue Aidelle chapter 8 . 5/11/2011
| Blue Aidelle chapter 6 . 5/11/2011
This chapter is so good! WOW.
| Blue Aidelle chapter 5 . 5/11/2011
Strong words. Nice story. Good job!
| Nic chapter 14 . 3/5/2011
Can I just say I first read this entire fanfic in o6' and the title of this story never escaped my mind. I have never ever had to dig through my memory and snap just to remember what the title of this story was because it was just that brilliant. A memorable piece of work.
| unagihime chapter 14 . 1/7/2011
AMAZING STORY. It's so different compared to the other fish in the CCS Fiction Sea. The concept of the magicians was actually fresh and... I don't even have a word for it. xD It's definitely unique. The way you started every chapter was great; not a lot of authors do much anecdotes or some kind of analysis. (At least that's how I viewed them to be) The pathological liar part for Sakura is something I've never seen before. Also, the use of magic in this fic wasn't cheesy or the kind that usually compels me to drop the fic. It's... angsty. xD I liked it alot. (: Gah, writing this review is making me relive all the times I was flipping out while reading this, lmao.
This piece of work deserves a bit more fame. /: I'm a bit disappointed that not a lot of people have read it. D:
BUT IT DOESN'T MATTER. It's their loss.
Again, fantastic job. :D I look forward to any works you may get into. c: