|Reviews for Mascara|
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/6/2013
| Literati Lover chapter 1 . 11/28/2008
Amazing! I love the whole mascara part! It's amazing and touching! ) Great job!
| PisceanGirlPower chapter 1 . 8/25/2007
oh...that was such a nice fic. u rock, Lolly. I officially declare myself a Lolly the Sea Cow Fan.
| Breaking.Benajmin chapter 1 . 3/10/2005
Aw *is speechess*
| Querida1605 chapter 1 . 1/20/2005
good story, is this a one shot?
| nikki chapter 1 . 1/10/2005
good story, is it a one shot?
| Alenor chapter 1 . 1/2/2005
oh, that was good. interesting in an odd way, but also good. update flashlight please...cya later.
| Jeast chapter 1 . 1/1/2005
That was cool. I didn't know that MAscara could do so much to you. I m ean, make you bawl and like think through everything thast has ever hurt you or made you feel worth a damm.
Why does the fashion world have to be so cruel and insensitive. Making a product that does to you in less than five minutes what a gazillion sessions with a syciatrist would do and at like a %th of the price.
Kill me before my secrets are spilt like water gush from and overflowing cup. Ugh.
| Starburst427 chapter 1 . 12/29/2004
man i love this short story! it was so TOTALLY AWESOME DUDE! u have to continue writing! u should really extend it! makie it into a fanfic and have this as ur opening chappie; like an introduction. then the next chapter will explain the scene where jesse leaves suze, smiling as he shimmers out of view. after that, u explain this scene w/ suze crying, paul finding her and asking her why she's crying, all of her thoughts speeding around inside her head at a thousand miles per hour, what she says to him about the mascara, and so on and so on and so on until u land hear at the end w/ suze crying into paul's chest and paul huggung her protectively; and then u could continue the story w/ more chapters and suze falling for paul or whatever u want to happen next! but i really really really REALLY recommend u continue writing, cuz ur an amazing wtiter and so are ur fanfics and stories! so PLIIZ CONTINUE AND UPDATE!
$$ Jasmine $$ P
| The General G of K chapter 1 . 12/26/2004
That was so emotional. Damn! You have like the EXACT words to describe a situation, an emotion, or a feeling. It's beautiful. Like, for example, the whole pain thing, "Pain liquifies and leaks from my eyes." It makes so much sense, but I would never had thought of it, nor would I have probably stated it that way either.
Once again, you've made a beautiful P/S! They are your specialties. I command that you never write of Jesse again, unless he is making Suze cry, which causes Paul to make-out with her. Besides, your talent for Paul/Suze writing is just way too powerful, realistic, and totally awesome. Plus, you always, more than never, include a scene where they both let go of there carnal urges... and well, you know:)
And what are these red highlights Hayley speaks of? You never told me. I want to see them. Send me a picture.
| I Call Him Fred chapter 1 . 12/26/2004
o0o! drama! angst! suspense!
Nice job with this one, Lolly. Great writing style...Mascara. Just the mascara.
| Sandra Rose chapter 1 . 12/24/2004
OMG! I loved it, it was like so sad, really it was. For a second there my eyes started to tear up-but I'm sure it was just my mascrea. Merry Christmas Eve!
| amy88 chapter 1 . 12/24/2004
gods, that was awesome! wow! honestly, i'm not big on paul and suze, but that was so good! great, great, great job! yay! ~ames~
| Teen-Princess chapter 1 . 12/24/2004
that was bitter-sweet!it was so sad what jesse did to suze,but i'm glad that pul was there to comfort was right to tell you to publish this!you should write more stories like this!
| moovalous3 chapter 1 . 12/23/2004
whoa. WHOA...that almost made ME cry...soo painful! HE LEFT HER? HE MOVED ON? SMILING! Oh jeez...
That was a cool way of writing. Very cool. :)
This was good...although way intense. But very good.